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[leafanight]

I need some advice. I’m trying to do this pose but I’m not sure which basic sketch looks better. I know each still needs work but which one should I focuse more on. I’m trying to get it to look like my character is in anime.

the one on left is more flat and more my style. So it’ll be easy to make the picture look weird. But I’m more familiar with and can work from there.

the one on right looks more curved but bulky. So I feel it’ll look too big next to the other character. It’s more what I’m going for but no matter how much I work on it it feels still off.

should I just redo another basic sketch? Please if anyone has tips it really help,

also sneak peek on upcoming post.

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[stitchwraith-stingers]

why do i kinda wanna make a sonic ochelp

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[uglydoddles-blog]

I'm totally new to putting my art on the internet, but I am. This is kinda where I'm at with anatomy, and as you can see I can't peice shit together to save my.. anything. My main goal is to make original characters with ACTUAL emotions. I'm realizing that creativity is not taught, so any ideas, or thoughts on how to help me would ALL be beneficial. I'm super excited to use Tumblr as a growing technique for my drawing and my creativity. Help me spark up some inspiration 🤩.

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hi I was wondering how do you find "theme songs" for your characters and story in general?

Oof, I’ve never been good at finding theme songs myself :( usually I start with a song and then create a backstory! Nevertheless, here are some tips I managed to dig up from the internet:

1. If you’re making a fantasy setting, Two Steps From Hell makes some amazing fantasy-themed music (like it’s absolutely gorgeous I cannot recommend it enough)! They work great for Dungeons and Dragons characters especially. Unfortunately, very few of the songs have lyrics, so that might be a bit of a downside if you want a song choice that specifically captures your character.

2. Someone made a Character Theme Song Ideas playlist on YouTube, so listening to it is always an option!

3. Here, here, here, and here are a few quizzes to help you decide your own personal theme song! You can answer these from an OCs perspective to get a match.

4. A great place to start is with these Pinterest song lyric boards! Scroll through them to find a quote you find relatable to your story or character and trace it back to the source song!

-Mod Harmonia

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[ochelps]

writing prompts

“gloves make everything complicated”

“are explosives really your answer to everything?”

“you flushed my phone down the toilet?”

“i can’t cure your wounded pride”

“it’s just paint, this time. it’s not blood”

“sometimes i wonder if everyone around me are brain-dead”

“you know you can’t kill me with your glaring?”

“i’m sorry i’m late. i got stuck in a revolving door”

“are you having a staring contest with a cat?”

“are you confused or do you normally look lost?”

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“whatever you do, wherever you go. i will always follow you, (oc).”

for your favourite otp. úwù

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[cupiddastupid]

HEY THIS IS VERY IMPORTANT!!!!!!! OC PSA FOR PEOPLE HAVING TROUBLE WITH OCS

Original Characters are a little hard to make. Making them decent is hard too. Now, most people would say that since it's their character, that they can do whatever they want with them, that is true, when in private. When you put your character out into the world, you should put effort into making it memorable yet realistic to the fandom you are placing it in. Here are some tips to make the character a bit more memorable and realistic.

Tattoos And Piercings: Though they are fun to play with, you have to remember how painful and time and money consuming getting a tattoo is. It can cost upwards of 150 dollars to get a tattoo, it's painful to get in many places where it is most popular to get them like the hands, pubic bones and back, not to mention the fact that it is permanent and even more painful to get rid of. Laser Treatments and cover-ups can cost more than the tattoo itself. And a teenager, 14-17 years old cannot get a tattoo. It's illegal and in all honesty stupid. How many 17-year-Olds in high school do you see with gigantic tattoos on their hands and pubic bones? Piercings are a different story, however. I don’t mind extreme Piercings as much as the average person does, I just hate the typical ones. What about the collarbone? Or a knuckle. Still, I don’t mind them.

Age: this one is oozy. Most Original Characters are between the ages of 16-21 years old. Sometimes their with characters who in canon are 26 and up. It's weird that a law-abiding adult would get with a teen just out of high school. Now, if this is part of the storyline of the romance, how it is forbidden and wrong then sure. Maybe. It has to be done intricately. And you shouldn’t be afraid of making your character 30 or so. It's not bad to be over 27 years old. Of course, it's a little hard to make it work, but it's not a bad thing.

Main Character Changing/ Cannon Manipulating: I hate this. Like, a lot. I see this the most with Voltron. Giving your character a lion that does not exist. Purple, Pink, even white and that one is a REAL HEADCANON. That is so...frustrating. The theme of Voltron is that each part has a purpose and everyone has a use, meaning togetherness and perfect sync. It's like the adult swim Voltron short with the pink lion. Look it up and you’ll get how ridiculous it is to have an extra lion that doesn’t need to be there. It would be cool if your character from the future. Or has a battling bond with one of the lions. But don’t pick a color and make up a lion. It's dumb. This goes for all anime. Gurren Lagann, Any Magical Girls ETC. (I see this most with Voltron. No one needs you pink, purple, orange, Grey and white lion.)

Siblings: Sigh...if a character is an only child...their an only child. Keyword ONLY. That is part of their character. Who they are. That would change the way they act MAJORLY. They would become more caring. More sympathetic. If they have siblings, leave it at that. Its different with, For example, the Sakamaki Brothers in DL.

But make it a brother….not a sister.

I have more to say

If you have any questions concerns or things to add on please reblog and let me know ;3

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[roguetheawesome]

Characters

I want to make a new character but I don't know what kind! Helps!

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Lina Schlitz (Shingeki no Kyojin OC)

HEYAAAAAAAA its me again i made a really big mess of the old char sheet because i did it at like 3am so i decided i would redo it !! thanks again <333 

H: it’s fine! For the second time (bc Mod Eris is lazy!!!!) I’ll be the only reviewer. Under the cut, because this one is long!

Name: Lina Schlitz - リナシュリッツ

H: Shlitz is actually a name that has mid-German origins--nothing to fix here, it’s right on the SnK map!

Nicknames: Querida - pet in portuguese, given by her grandma. Idiot - given by some of her squad members. (i dont really have any other ideas for nicknames plz alp)

H: Most nicknames I’ve had or given come from inside jokes or shared experiences--a joke about her age when she started training or an alias from a battle, maybe?

Age: 17

Gender: Female

Birthday: 18/11/833 - scorpio (so she would be in the …. 102nd squad i think ? as she would be 17 by the time eren, mikasa, armin & the squad were 15… .although i kinda wanna make her older . .. should i?)

H: I honestly like making my characters older--older characters have more extensive backstories and more room for creativity. However, it’s your choice in the end! (And I’m pretty sure if she was 17 while the trio were 15, she’d be in the 102nd.)

Faceclaim: michiko malandro (from michiko and hatchin)

(i think this one is the most accurate - hairstyle , face, everything, n expression)

(without the chains tho… and the survey corps uniform… and shorter hair)

H: She’s so pretty cri

-personality:

positives;

brave - lina is not afraid to put herself in danger or do risky things, so she can get things done better than most people

decisive - she can throw her humanity out of the window to make decisions

honest - she doesn’t really care what people think of her, so she will often say what she thinks to your face

direct - as above, lina gets straight to the point 

observant - she often notices the little details, from environment to facial expressions or body language

realistic - she knows that she might die any day, and she lives life to the fullest

simple - relating to her trait of being realistic, lina views life in a simple way - you either die or you don’t, and if you don’t, then you better make the most of it

kind - despite not showing it much, lina is actually quite kind due to her grandparents and parents raising her to be a good lil child

neutrals;

competitive - she loves a good competition and will never back down from a challenge

sarcastic - lina uses sarcasm to make people laugh and hide her true feelings

unsentimental - as mentioned in her trait description of decisive, she knows that her 

comrades, family, and friends can die any day and they have a high chance of it too, so lina detaches herself from them as much as possible

tough - lina can power through a lot of situations, as she contains her emotions on the inside

calculating - she can observe a situation and make a decision off of it, but also she is good at making plans

strong-willed - lina will not give up. ever. no way hozay

perfectionist - everything must be perfect - including her statistics, battle technique, horse, and mostly everything under the sun. however most things aren’t perfect which annoys her to no end

negative;

cocky - lina can often overestimate herself, in battle and in casual situations, which leads to her putting herself and her comrades in danger

brittle - her emotions are easily hurt, although she doesn’t show it

manipulative - lina will lead people on if it benefits her

compulsive - she often acts off of instincts and emotions alone, tying in with being cocky

disrespectful - adding in to lina’s trait of being honest, she often disrespects her superiors, elders, and anyone on the planet if she feels like it - which doesn’t make her that likeable 

hostile - being hostile to keep people at a distance means that lina doesn’t have many friends

inconsiderate - as long as it is good enough for lina, it is good enough for you so you better not complain got it got it ok

messy - lina’s bed is often unmade and her appearance is disheveled

mannerless - tying in with being disrespectful, she often licks her plates, chews with her mouth open, talks while speaking, disrespects her superiors, ect

neurotic - despite not showing it, lina often has anxiety attacks about her past and friends, and what will happen to her (her symptoms include nausea, fear of dying, a racing heart, and heightened senses - including trembling and sweating, also staring off into space)

possessive - lina is possessive of her possessions, her friends, herself, and mostly everything that she views belongs to her

procrastinator - she often pushes things like apologising, doing training, and eating, off until the last minute

sly - tying in with lina’s trait of being manipulative, she can worm her way into someones mind quite easily and manipulate them for her own gain

uncooperative - she is terrible at teamwork, believing that everyone is ‘cramping her style’ and slowing her down, so she often refuses to work in a team and has to be forced - unless she is the leader, and then she loves to boss everyone around

sadistic - lina enjoys cutting the limbs off of titans before she kills them, however only ones that remind her of the one that killed her grandma and family - the others she has a strange interest in

cold - she often pushes people away, rejects friendship offers, and isolates herself

stubborn - once lina has decided she is doing something, there is no changing her mind

hot-tempered - she often flies off of the handle when provoked or annoyed, or if she is in a bad mood

H: So, from skimming, I’m summarizing her personality as appearing outwardly cold (though she doesn’t always mean to be) but actually being a lot different and less intense when you get to know her.

-appearance:

Hair Colour: brown-black

Hair Length/Style: mid-back length, extremely straight - tied in a high ponytail (so it is around the length of kristas/sashas)

Eye Colour: nut brown (very dark brown) with bits of lighter brown

Skin Colour: bronze-coloured

H; Seeing as the SnKverse is mostly white and light-skinned, how does her race affect her life? I’m guessing that once the Titans arrive, people don’t care what the heck you look like if you’re the one saving their asses, but maybe when she was a child?

Body build: mesomorph, a mix of hourglass and inverted triangle - lean

H: As she continues her training, she’ll begin losing weight and her hourglass figure will be less dramatic. If you want to write/draw her according to the timeline of her training, that’s a good thing to keep in mind!

Demeanor: relaxed - arms crossed, leaning on walls, slouched in chairs, head tilted back, head resting on table

Ethnicity: Brazilian/Portuguese/German/English (where is the story set in ??? nobody knows)

H: I’m not certain myself, but I made a post on where the story most likely takes place. Brazil isn’t on the map, though. You could make her Brazilian ancestry from her grandparents or great-grandparents who immigrated north. Then again, the map isn’t canon, so who cares?

Height: 5'3

Weight: 8 stone 6

H: She’s slightly underweight, but enough that’s it’s realistic for a malnourished environment.

Scars: One down her right arm, due to when a titan had her in its mouth during an expedition and, although one of her teammates killed it, it’s jaw fell onto her arm when it hit the ground and broke her arm.

-statistics:

Combat: 9/10

Hand to Hand Combat: 7/10

Agility: 4/10

Initiative: 8/10

Wits: 5/10

Teamwork: 4/10

3D Maneuvering Gear: 6/10

Offense: 9/10

Defense: 4/10

Cockiness: 10/10

Titan Kills: 

Solo: 11

In team: 21 (is this ok ?? i assumed since she was 2 years older, p good at fighting, and in the scouting legion, that she would have a higher kill count than say, mikasa, even though she’s an ackerman, because mikasa is 2 years younger and hasn’t been on that many expeditions)

H: Sure! The 102nd would most likely have a pretty high kill count,seeing as a lot of battles happen after their training.

Grad Rank: 1st (ahh is this ok too? i thought since she was in the 102nd squad, and her family was in the military, that she could be 1st since there aren’t any y'know titan shifters or ackermans in her squad)

H: Also fine! The 104th was a special case--standards likely wouldn’t be as high in other training corps.

Grade: A

background:

lina’s ancestors moved with most of the world to germany inside the walls, the only safe place on the eartha lot of her family died on the way, only two survived along with a few other people - a wife and her husband, alanza and lucas santos - not much older than 18.

when they made it to the walls, they were given a small, one bedroom house inside wall maria, shinganshina district as they were one of the last people to arrive.

after a few years, they had a child together, and his name was to be victor. they taught their native language, portuguese told him to teach it to his future children to keep their country alive.

lucas decided to enroll in the military and joined the garrison to try and keep his family safe, but he was tragically killed when an abnormal titan flung themselves on top of the wall and ran along it, crushing the garrison underfoot.

it was eventually killed, with the help of one of the first elite teams and the scouting legion. lucas was one of the soldiers tragically killed in the attack and alanza was left to raise victor by herself.

when victor was a teenager, he too joined the military - scouting legion - despite his mothers wishes. he managed to survive, however, long enough for him to be promoted to team leader - and for his arm to be bitten off in a mission, not long after his promotion. he was discharged by the military and met a girl by the name of hanna.

it was love at first sight, and they married only a few months after they met - after all, they could die at any time. alanza was soon a grandmother to a child of the name sofia.

by this time, the schlitz/santos line had become quite legendary in the walls, due to their skill and unwavering determination to help mankind. this cycle of the generations was continued until it got to maria and dedrick - lina’s grandparents. their father, abe, had been brutally eaten alive by a titan. due to this they were both firmly against any of their children or grandchildren joining the military in fear of their safety, and so the cycle ended. that is, until lina was born from delmira and adelchi - maria and dedrick’s daughter and step-son.

as soon as abe saw her face he knew she would join the military despite anyones wishes. as lina grew up, abe’s prediction slowly came true - she idolized the military due to their unwavering bravery and optimism that humanity would win the war between them and titans.

she was often caught sneaking out of her house to watch the scouting legion coming home from missions, cheering them on despite the crowds nervous and dejected muttering. so it was no surprise when, on her 12th birthday, the first thing she asked for was to join the military. (that lil shmishirt)

she persisted until her grandparents were brought to her house the next day from their home in wall rose. they told her of all the dangers, and yet she still persisted. they finally agreed - but only because lina’s father said he would join with her.

as soon as the words came out of his mouth, a loud bang rang out that shook the floor and caused panicked screaming to be erupted from outside. lina’s family rushed through their front door, only for them to be met with a crowd of people sprinting past, yelling and screaming.

they pushed through the crowd and found themselves at the back of another crowd, all staring up at the wall. a giant titan, over 50 metres tall, was standing behind it - looking down at the people of shiganshina with a blank expression, its hand clutching the wall. steam came off of it, increasing the temperature of lina despite how far away it was.

her family was frozen, huddling together and clutching each others hands. maria - lina’s grandmother - was clutching the cross and figures of wall maria, rose, and sina attached to her necklace and praying.

the titan moved its foot back and kicked the gate, sending it splintering all over the town. titans waiting behind it were catapulted forwards, crushing citizens and soldiers along with the multiple boulders.

lina’s family turned and ran as fast as they could. despite being old, lina’s grandparents were fit and kept up with her family - delmira dragging lina by her hand.

they made it to the docks in wall maria just as the last boat was leaving. delmira, with lina in tow, immediately began to shove her way to the front to plead with the soldiers to let lina on board. they denied her request and delmira whispered something to lina. they hugged each other as long as possible before delmira broke away and disappeared into the crowd.

luckily, the guards were distracted by the giant horde of people trying to break through. lina ran up the docks, as far away from the crowd as possible, and found herself level with a boat - it looked full to the brim. lina looked to the next one and eyed it apprehensively. stepping back a few paces, she sprinted as fast as possible towards the ledge. pushing herself off of it. her hands reached out to the edge of the boat, but the side of the boat was slippery and her hands couldn’t get a grip in time.

lina scrabbled for a grip, her fingers of her left hand slowly slipping off as she began to fall, but before she could, her wrist was snatched up by a calloused hand.

she looked up to see a friend of her mothers, adelmo weber, holding onto her arm. he pulled her up and onto the boat, despite the outrage that burst from the lips of the citizens that there wasn’t any space left on the boat, and even though she was just a child, he should have not saved her.

lina looked back just in time to see the crowd of people frantically running away - towards wall rose - from a titan, nearly 10 metres tall, picking them up and eating them like insects. the manic crowd drew level with lina’s boat, and she made eye contact with her grandma - at the back, out of breath - as she was snatched up by the titan.

lina screamed loudly, screaming at her grandmother to fight, fight the titan and get to wall rose - but it was futile.

the titan bit maria in half and let her severed legs fall to the ground as lina finally reached the edge of the boat, stretching out her hand to her grandmothers half-eaten corpse and the rest of her family.

the crowd was surrounded by titans coming from both sides and they were all massacred.

lina slumped down to the floor of the boat, and cried until she could cry no more. she slept until they reached wall rose.

H; Holy crap, all of this when she was 12? Poor kid! She probably has a lot of left-over trauma and stress from that day: PTSD, anxiety, possibly some extreme paranoia and OCD-like tendencies to check over and over that everything is okay.

the arrival of the boats was not received well by the residents of wall rose. they immediately began to riot about food shortages, overpopulation and that the titans would be drawn to the bigger population of wall rose.

lina exited across the drawbridge with the swarm of people who was on her boat, and they were promptly greeted by being pushed back by the citizens of wall rose.

they said that the other boats were too full, and they would not have enough room for all of the people on lina’s boat. the people onboard rioted immediately, calling out where would they go, would you be so heartless as to send us back - until they were silenced by the garrison and military police separating the brawling crowds.

they told all the refugees to go to the town square, where the people of appropriate build and age would be enlisted to the military with no choice, while the rest would go to work in the fields.

lina was enlisted despite being only just 12, and so began the start of her journey.

H: Woah, that’s young, even for SnK! Was she the only recruit of her age? Was she the focus of unwanted attention because of it? I have a student one year younger than the rest of the class at school and he’s always being picked on by the teacher (who I hate but that’s another story).

-trivia:

knows portuguese and when she is angry she slips in and out of it (for example, you are todas as dicas i hate eu estou para te you) also when she is tired or distracted she does too (i quero sleep por how tempo até as lights) this is because although her first language is english/german, her family spoke mainly portuguese at their home

H: My parents’ first languages were French and Arabic, and they do this all the time too! Nothing really important, I just wanted to add that. :)

she has the loudest, most boisterous laugh ever - although nobody has ever properly heard it

lina snores so loud she often kept the rest of her dormies awake

biggest sweet tooth ever - even though she rarely gets to eat anything other than beef stew and rations

H: This might not have been intentional, but people who experience traumatic events as children usually end up keeping childlike qualities with them for a long amount of time. Having a sweet tooth or sleeping with toys is not unusual for someone who went through what she did.

she has a bit of a portuguese/brazilian accent, mixed with english/german

lina cuts her own hair

her name means the heroes river, or river of light

SUMMARY-

H: To be honest, this character’s pretty airtight! There’s not much you really need to change on this one. She’s believable but still interesting enough to be a main character. Overall, great job!!

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[ochelps]

writing prompts #2

“can i stop pretending to listen now?”

“no i will not adopt a duck for you”

“i am not wearing a matching outfit”

“i don’t believe in exercise”

“i’m feeling very holy today” “you just got shot. now is not the time to make jokes”

“i wonder which one of us will die first. don’t worry, it’s a rhetorical question, i know it’ll be you”

“if this ghost don’t kill you, i will”

“it’s 4am, where did you buy bagpipes?”

“yes i have breasts, can we move on?”

“you walked all the way from canada?” “i had time to kill”

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Oc Help

Can Someone Draw Me A UnderTale OC Name Brandon G Moss Age 13 Hair Brown Monster Race Golden Skeleton Weapon Golden Sword Clothes Yellow Leather Jacket White Shirt Blue Jeans

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Reminder ~

Hey guys, mod tabby here! Posting this as a simple reminder that the ask and submission box is always open! Send in any questions/characters/ideas to us and we'll gladly answer and critique them as best we can!

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OC Review Esmerelda

Disclaimer: Please keep in mind that we are not here to harm, we are here to help. Any criticism given is believed to be necessary and not an attack on the creator. Any jokes made are simply for humor’s sake and to lighten the mood of the criticism.

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Submission

Storyline/Canon: Set in an alternitive universe to the earth exists Kepler, a world controlled by God. It is unknown if God is a man, woman, animal or plant and is even assumed that he could be the moon in the sky; All that is certain is that he exists and from this knowledge births many different religious followings inlcuding The Order (most relatable to Catholics), The Luna Cult (if anything most relatable to the roman practices of worship) and the Monk Brotherhood who have turned away from God to seek their own path (most relatable to Buddhism) and a multitude of other smaller followings. the story focuses on Esmerelda Brackburn, a young priest taught by the elders of The Order on how to use the gift called Gods Radiance (the ability to smite thy enemy and heal thy friend etc etc) and now sent off on a pilgrimage to Evropa she meets two Luna Cultists, Heta and Elisha, with an important mission.

All joking aside, I this that this concept is cool. I like the various religions, and I think this is a great base for a plot. I would like to hear more about it.

There is magic of a sort but it is not labelled as magic; instead it is called Gods gift and is inside every human. there are variants of Gods Gift; Gods Radiance (The power to heal), Luna glow (This is a mix of Telekinesis and Nature strangely enough) and Gods Curse (The ability to shapeshift but users are stuck in a half-form and have no control over when it happens)

I also like the idea of magic, because it brings a fantasy element into it that can be fun to play around with. However, I do want to warn you on not getting too over powered. I am not sure if you mention restrictions or drawbacks (more than those listed) later, but you need to be careful. The only one that seems to have a drawback is the Gods Curse (which, go figure, has curse in the name), but that may make your Ocs who have Gods Radiance and Luna Glow too Over powered. If you make a lot of people powerful, it will balance out, but if you only have a few people who are majorly powerful (for example, if you had Gods Radiance with little to no drawbacks, your main OC of Esmerelda, would seem over powered if Gods Radiance was rare), it will seem unbalanced. I also hope later I get more information on how one learns Gods Radiance and Luna Glow, because I would hope it takes a long time to master. I would also like to be informed on how it works, because “smite thy enemy” is kind of broad and is giving me a lot of images. Also if it is the gift of healing, why can you also smite your enemies?

Known as the Good Word, everyone at the age of 2 gains the ability to speak their native languages and understand others so no language barriers instead everyone sort of speaks with an accent of their native tongue. Also American, english, Russian etc are languages of their own they do exist and they are spoken.

Thank you for clarifying what languages are allowed here. I do think however perhaps 2 (unless there is another aging system or that is a typo) is a bit early. I would push this off into later years I think.

 ·         Esmerelda Brackburn

 Name

 ·         Full Name: Esmerelda Brackburn

 ·         Name Meanings: Derived from Emerald, it symbolizes hope and the future, renewal and growth. It is a Seeker of Love and a Revealer of Truth, inspiring an ongoing search for meaning, justice, compassion and harmony. Obviously she isnt all of those things but her parents believed she was a ray of hope during times of darkness and debt.

After hearing your reasoning, I think this is passable. I am not a huge fan of the name myself, but I think that the meaning behind it (parents naming her for hope’s sake) makes sense and makes the name fine.

·         Nicknames: Ezzie (By Heta and Elisha as a way of shorting her name) and Twinkletoes (Mainly by Heta) and Esmere (By her Parents and the elders of The Order).

This is fine

·         Officially referred to as: Esmerelda

 ·          Sex: Female

 ·         Sexuality/Gender: Bi Demisexual (She only harbours romantic interest for those who she has an emotional bond with)

HON YOU DON’T NEED TO EXPLAIN DEMISEXUAL TO ME (my people!)

·         In a relationship? : (Much later on) yes she gets married

 ·         With whom? : Rose (not entirely certain on last name yet)

 ·         Details: (how they met, etc.) Whilst on the road they come upon this strange cursed (With Gods Gift) assassian known as Rose. She appears to be following them the entire story and jumps into the fray when Esmerelda is in danger, and eventually Rose asks Esmerelda out. Her old Convent elders are the ones who marry them.

 ·           Age: 28

It is very refreshing to see an OC who is over 16.

·         Immortality? : No

 ·         Aging specifics: Luna Cultists age much slower than other humans, those of The Order tend to live well into their 90's while Luna Cultists have been recorded to die at around 300. Living to this age requires intense sacrifical rituals, not for the faint of heart.

Alright. Im glad you explained this. How long do people with God’s curse live?

Species

 ·         Species: Human

 ·         Info: She is a human of The Order so typically lean and muscular and are either white or black. Luna Cultists are pale skinned with hints of blue and purple as well as enlarged canines and pointed faces.

 Personality

 ·         Pros: fiercely loyal, compassionate, intelligent, optimistic and ambitious

·         Cons: Stubborn, Inbetween Shy and Wary, Naive, Argumentative, Gullible and Cowardly.

 ·         Cons (s/he) works on: She works on her cowardly ways but she is pretty much the damsel in distress that has her two friends and Rose running after her.

(The reasons for these are because she is a very understanding character, one that you can sit next to and talk about your problems . Her cheerful nature rubs off on even the grumpiest old stiff and all that time reading books in the convent have paid off, but although she is book smart she is not street smart. This is her first journey outside her own settlement and it defintely shows. She has not had to deal with "Humanities Evil" Before but on the road dressed in an expensive outfit she is the perfect target for any muggers, and she certainly wont fight them being the coward she is. She leaves the fighting to the other two and prefers to stay in the back offering emotional support and only occasionally medical attention.)

I would just be careful about being a damsel in distress, because while its okay to have that type of OC, it can be easy to overdo it, and the OC can go from being likable to irritating to others.

Height: 5'3

 Weight: 11 stone or 160lbs

This weight is fine!

 Hair:

 ·         Description: (style, texture, etc) Silky Beach wave style goes just below shoulder length.

 ·         Color: Dirty blonde with streaks of brown.

 Eyes

 ·         Color: Chocolate Brown

 Skin

 ·         Texture: (include tattoos, scars, acne, etc.) Multiple scars running all throughout her body from training and time on road.

 ·         Color: Light Caramel

 Muscle Tone/Body Type

 ·         Body Type: in bewteen a Ectomorph and a Mesomorph. (Muscular but is a little chubby around the waist)

 ·         Extra Features: Nope

 Internal Anatomy

 ·         Illnesses: Has Asthma

 ·         Disabilities: No

 ·         Eating Habits: Eats a lot of fruit, cheese and breads.

 ·         Diet: Non-Existant

 Psychological Health

 ·         Phobias: Emetophobia - Fear of Vomiting. Stems from eating far too much and embarrising herself in front of a large crowd by Vomiting on one of the Elders. Since then she avoids alcohol and doesnt eat from 9pm to avoid sleeping on a full stomech.

I would like to note that a phobia is much different than a large fear. I would say hers counts as a heavy fear instead of a full on phobia. Perhaps our fault for not having a fear section, but we don’t have one for the same reason that we don’t have a “like” or “dislike” section—they’re often too long and random (ex: spiders, certain people, storms, etc….)

·         Trauma: Nope

 ·         Telepathy: Nay            

 ·         Powers: Gods Radiance (Shes slightly above average in healing but thats about it)

With her age and level, this is fine.

 Preferences And Lifestyle / Characteristics

 ·         Clothing: A long turquoise dress adorned with gold with light blue snakeskin gloves that turn black as they reach the hem, Simple blue cloak with gold hem . Shoes are purple sandles that aren't viewable as the dress reaches her feet.

 ·         Favorite Color:  Turquoise

 ·         Least Favorite Color: Dark red (The colour of blood)

 ·         Normal Outfits: She usually only wears her Turquoise dress but she does have a brown vest and pants to wear with a hooded cloak when she washes her outfit.

 ·         Accessories:  A large greenish blue cystral staff.

 3.      Backstory: (Expand upon their story entirely here) Esmerelda was born in Avustralya to Merchant Jack Brackburn and Priest Aria Brackburn where she lived with them traversing different villiages and visiting her auntie, uncle and obnoxious son (who plays pranks on her) who own a farm in the outback. At the grand old age of 9, Esmerelda leaves her parents to join a convent the other side of Avustralya, where she stays for 19 years learning the teachings of the books, singing hymns and harnessing the power of Gods Radiance. After a while the convent sends her on a pilgrimage to Evropa to learn about the true world (and keep her away from trouble) and finally after 4 months at sea she arrives at the foot of a settlement known as İspanya, entering into the town and spending all the money the convent gave her in an hour on an outfit. She leaves the town and meets Heta and Elisha on deaths doorstep. She heals them as best to her ability and the duo tells Emere of their mission and so begins the events of the story.

This is fine. The only thing would be if it is natural for people to leave at such an early age. If not, I would need an explanation on why she left so early, as that might lead to “chosen one” sort of deals which often gets sue-ish fast.

I like the humor here though with her spending all of her money.

4.      Just thought I'd add it here since I didnt think it would fit in anywhere else; Instead of a king, Presidant or general leader there is a group called the Disicples containing representatives of different religious groups. together they discuss important matters and the most pressing matter; War.

Most importantly, the story although it is about God existing, it isnt a hardcore religious story, it is Fantasy themed Action/Adventure book with Monsters based on sins etc. Also although I try not to be, it may be biased towards Catholics seeing as I am actually one

Thank you for the extra information. The more information the smoother the review goes! I would also honestly attempt to be CAREFUL about not seeming biased. It can be easy to do that when you have a connection with something, but try to remember to give everything fair judgement.

Overall I think there is just minor tweaks needed here and there. I would love to see more of the Ocs or hear more about the story.

Thank you so much for your submission! Thank you!

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