#me: you dont need to rewrite every one of your interests

[sirenjose]

So I've been really into your analysis lately and I'm a huge fan now, wanted to ask some questions, feel free to not answer any

1- what was your favourite idv story/event to analyze?

2- your least fav of the latter?

3- are you into anything else besides idv?

4-how do you find the motivation to analyze stuff? I've tried before and it was very draining :')

Thanks for your time, hope you have a lovely day

I'm very happy to hear you're enjoying yourself despite my own low opinion about much of what I put out. I'll do my best to answer!

Hmm I always dislike picking favorites because I'm bad at picking eheh... But the ones I liked most... I honestly enjoy T&I and COA (1-5) even more than the main story. So I think I might pick... Atropos' Ropes for T&I and for COA, thats harder... 3-5 are my faves but I might pick 4 just because of how it felt it had the most story/details given than all the rest. Even the *SONG* had story. I loved it.

Least fave, eh... Orfeo and Zinaida immediately come to mind, though Orfeo I'd say was worse... COA 1 is another primarily because of how DIFFICULT it was for me to figure it out enough to put together an analysis. And I had to rewrite that thing at LEAST 3 times to the point I'm just hoping it's good enough and leaving it alone. Time of Reunion I think is another that comes to mind, mainly because I didn't appreciate how they treated Norton in there, especially in the videos (but at least those aren't canon like the in-game event was). So based on all that, I might say Orfeo if I really had to pick 1. Then rank ToR 2nd and Zinaida/COA1 3rd.

FF14 and Honkai Star Rail especially I'm playing actively these days, but I honestly like a lot of stuff. Like Persona (espeially 4), 999 aka Zero Escape, and Star Ocean Til the End of Time. Least in terms of games.

Hmm... Maybe because the 1st reason I play a game is because of the story, and gameplay is always 2nd to me. If the story and characters are good, that gets me interested. Issue with IDV is we only get bits and pieces. Really need to look deeper to really understand some of the characters. I actually only started analyzing because I challenged myself (partially out of curiosity for the answer) to see if I could prove if Norton wasn't as evil as people thought (based on all the comments I saw when I 1st joined the fandom a long while ago). From there, there was Jose who I wanted to analyze because he honestly had so many plot holes I couldn't (and still can't completely) solve. So I get the most enjoyment analyzing something that doesn't have a clear answer. Which is why I don't always post for every letter. A big part of it is I enjoy history and culture and such, so it's fun for me to learn about different foods, or time periods, or how bad the environment was for miners or sailors back in the day, etc... I dont think I have an easy answer (I can see I'm rambling). Norton I actually only began to like because I was spending so long working on my 1st analysis for him (and my perfectionism made me analyze all of Norton's essences before i could call it finished). Jose was because I love Captain Hook, and then after because of the plot holes that bothered me. Then for others, I think I enjoy making analyses to... try to sometimes change people's opinoions/beliefs. Like with Margaretha or Vera. With Edgar was because I was more interested in his story and him as a character only once I put together all his lore. Sort of goes on from there. I could ramble on but I'm going to get even more guilty. I hope this helps somewhat, but let me know if it doesn't and I'll keep going. Maybe the simple is A) I like history/culture/research, B) I like to convince people that certain characters arent as evil as they think or change beliefs I think aren't quite accurate, C) I like solving puzzles and I love story, D) I already think too hard about literally everything, and combined with my perfectionism, we get analysis

[crayonverse]

might kms (/nsrs) becuase of this fucking danganronpa hyperfx. hfuasgfuaiuwasjkd

#me: you dont need to rewrite every one of your interests #danganronpa: *exists* #me: well SOMEONE has to put sapphics in this game #anyways just. thought about trans girl chihiro and toko dating and exploded /pos #can i get a pin that says “survived chihiro gender discourse” #also did switch sides btw used to be “respect canon >:(((” but now like “canon is chihiro trans fem and shes trying to move past her trauma #ALSO juzo sakakura. i have to think about him forever. oh my god. my boy #ein dangan posting

[ganondoodle]

So your took rewrite. I have a very important question regarding the Zonai. From what I hear they're supposed to be the dragon tribe I think? And that theory with Dinraal,Farosh, and Naydra. People were making theories about them being originally Zonai. Would those 3 have a important role in the rewrite??? I'm curious because I would love to see how you draw them and implement them into the lore. Also I love your demise and hylia! Love your work too so ye that's my question, apologies if I worded this wrong or seemed rude. I am not good with words ^^;;

so, with no intention to sound mean, this is a little awkward for me to answer bc i ... loathe the idea of the three dragons having been of sonau origin

i talked about it in a few rants before but i loved the dragons before bc they were something unexplained and ethereal, spirits older than time that yet still circling the skies unknown if they ever had a purpose, or if they even had to have one, just a part of this world, a mystery i loved bc it was unsolved (personally i liked the idea of them being like the last stage of evolution for the dragons from skyward sword but again thats just me) whenever i saw them i stood there and watched in awe, one of my most favorite things from botw ... or were ..

see it might have to do a little with me not liking the canon sonau at all bc of how they were handled, a big point of that being how they felt artificially shoved into every part of this hyrules history so nothing was there that hadnt been done better or touched by the sonau before already; i get that making that connection between the sonau and the dragons is very obvious and can be interesting for some but i personally hate it bc it just destroys that sense of awe i used to feel when i saw them .. they are a mystery that shouldnt ever been 'solved' or even considered as soemthing TO solve, their mystery being unsolved is what made it GOOD to me

i now have to actually work to still seem them as i once did instead of just some sonau dude eating a god damn stone, again i dont mean this to sound mean about it but i just .... it takes it all away what i once felt about them, oh ... it was just some sonau guy .. its them again .. it wasnt an ethereal ever wandering spirit of never known origins it was just some sonau guys .... oh .... oh ...no ... (good morning i am very brave and when the dragons are revealed to not have been unknown always there spirits ever wandering the world from the beginning of time which was one of my favorite aspects of botw but instead have been just some sonau dudes eating a stone destroying my feeling of awe and respect to them forever i wont cry about it ..)

so .... the dragons (Eldra, Farodra, Naydra for me as im using their german names) do play a role in my rewrite .. but not as people or having anythign revealed about them, im keeping them as i once saw them, as spirits that have always been there (they play a role to repair the mastersword as a reference to how it was forged in skyward sword)

(and the reason the stones cause someone to transform into a dragon was bc those creatures are the most magical beings to exist and the stones are made of an insane amount of spirit energy and if that all gets released all at once there is no way for it to go other than explode or if consumed to twist whatever organism is trying to take it in into a draconic form)

the sonau in my rewrite are not dragon people, tho they do worship them as they are incredibly spiritual, but an underground dwelling species (loosely based on bats and monkeys, with somethign of a deep sea vibe to them) who only appeared on the surface after their population was already beyond saving (the reason for it being that they mined the stones for their tech to such a degree it killed the land they needed to live and as they dug deeper and more intensely for more stones, now more for pure survival than anything else, they both found more of the engima stones AND the remnant of the past that warned of ganondorf, which then prompted them to breach the surface and establish contact with the ones that dwell there; they never did that before bc its hard to get there and they considered themselves to be above any other species spiritually and didnt want to messed up their structures of society - something that changed as they stood on the brink of extinction and had found the warning which then made rauru break their old rule of not breaching the surface)

(i will say that i can get behind the idea that the big skeletons you find in the underground having been of sonau that ate an enigma stone and that is how they knew it doing that for sure, it otherwise just having been part of their belief system as dragons are the most spiritual of all aside from gods)

(... i dont want to think about the reverse possibility tho .. the orignal dragons being dead and the sonau replacing them.. i dont like that even if it made sense ,,,,, ... yet another thing they replaced ... stop that ..)

im sorry if this sounds mean or dismissive but i just ... dont like the all dragons having been sonau theory at all and im kinda glad they dont seem to plan any DLC bc i was afraid it would outright confirm it, which would suck .. at least like this there is still some denialability about it (like all the clothing and dragon themed stuff being used purely for worship on their own)

thank you for otherwise liking my work tho!! i hope this isnt too disappointing for you to hear, in the end the rewrite is primarily a way for me to cope with what i dont like and implement the ideas i have had to fix it for me :C

#ganondoodles answers #ganondoodles talks #ganondoodles rants #yeah that fits #ganondoodles rewrites totk #i wrote some stuff here i havent written before so im tagging it as such #sorry for repeating some things #im not good with words either but i just loved the dragons as they were in botw so SO much #yet another thing totk took away from me >:C

[leafcabbage]

Oh now I'm really interested in what kind of direction you would have taken drdi to if you'd had a smaller audience 👀 is there anything (like, in the past, maybe something you would do if you were to rewrite today) you would like to share, or is it still too personal/stressful?

hello anon! i will answer your question now that i do not have a migraine. maybe that was a sign from god that i shouldn't but im past the part of my life where i draw a tarot spread for every decision i make.

this ended up a little long so heres a readmore

anyway! so like the major story wouldn't change to be clear. drdi isnt super far off from what i would do. there are two kinds of like... differences there would be. the first is changes i would make now that im not as entrenched in the fandom expectations/fanon, and the other is things that i still may not be fully doing because not everyone is as chill as my tumblr audience.

in the first category - i wouldnt have any of SBI as family, adopted or otherwise. id have a lot more variety in ages on top of that, but yeah, phil wouldnt be wilburs dad. im kind of adjusting that as much as i can within the confines of what i gave myself to work with, but its limited. i was never even like... an SBI as a family fan. that was never super up my alley. it just seemed to be the general understanding of them so its what i wrote. i dont know exactly what id do because i try not to dwell too much on things i cant change. id have more phil in general, i shot myself in the foot making him a professor, because every time i use him now im like "fuck. what about ethics." im kinda bummed about everything with phil thus far and i need to pick myself up and figure it out.

as for stuff now... there are things that will always be canon to me that MIGHT be written in if by the time i get around to them the fandom is even More chilled out, but i am hesitant. for one, the trio's relationship would include more. kissing and stuff. gonna be honest here. still a qpr but like im in a qpr and we kiss. just generally would be less worried about what does and does not happen in it. also theres stuff (csa) in tubbos past im really back and forth on including because its a sensitive topic. like to me its canon but i dont know if ill straightforward write it or just allude to it and let yall figure it out. im not sure. theres some other stuff im not gonna include in my answer here but hey any of my pals on here are welcome to ask for more :]

im trying to get less uncertain about including the (sometimes gross!) realities of medical stuff. like ive made big strides in including some stuff for sure, and i think that shows and will continue to show as time goes on, but i guess we will see!

theres plenty of other little things that i go back and forth on but thats what mainly comes to mind! thanks for being interested :]

#cabbage answers #tw csa mention #anon #drdi asks #fic blogging

[astelren]

BSD pregnancy with Kouyou

ೃ⁀➷ TW/CW: Fluff, Implied AFAB Reader (since pregnancy, but i dont use any pronouns or body parts), Bad English, Pregnancy, Koyou being more so a mom, Can be seen as either romantic relationship or platonic, let me know if I need to add more TW/Tags ♡ Minors please interact with me only by liking or reblogs. ➳ Characters: Koyou Ozaki ⤠ Jealousy HCs (Dazai, Chuuya) ⤟ BSD Masterlist (soon!) ⤠ Who wants kids ⤟

Anon requested: Headcanons for koyou Ozaki with a pregnant reader please!!

Ooohh this one was interesting bc im not sure if I managed to nailed this lmfao also since you didn't specify if the koyou and reader are in a romantic relationship or not I decided to keep things very grey so that you can read it in whatever way you prefer💞

While Koyou doesn't have any experience in pregnancy herself, she can understand how troubling the period can be. So if you thought was protective before, now it's completely off the rails: she doesn't let you do any work, especially the type of work that consists in moving stuff or dealing with heavy things.

First months of the pregnancy are easy and she lets you do most things if you feel like it, although you can always sense her glare following your presence. Koyou is just making sure you are alright since you have to be careful with pregnancy, but she doesnt wish for you to feel like a burden or anything like that.

She will also keep your hair out of the way when you are vomiting, and gently caress your back in a soothing manner to help you out. Koyou is nice and gentle with you, she will probably make some tea for helping you to feel better

The more the pregnancy goes on, the more Koyou becomes more strict and careful she becomes: like I said before you can’t most tiring work, and she will demand someone to help you out or to be around you if she isn’t in the vicinity.  

Will also accompany you to whatever visit you have to make, especially if she gets to boss around people who dare to disrespect you or take too much of your time. No stranger will touch your belly without Koyou's approval, unless they went their hand off their arm…

And also whoever doctor dares gets too comfortable for her liking, she has no problem reminding them of their place especially since they are the best doctor in the place, but also deeply connected to the best. Of course, you only get the best of the best💜

But Koyou is so sweet and caring with you it makes everyone jealous: she cooks every meal for you, or asks very well known chefs, gently caressing your belly while murmuring stuff to the baby, making sure the chair is always the most comfortable and with the fluffies cushion, she never rises her voice against you in any possible way, she will even message your feet if it hurts too badly

Likes to spoils you, but that's even before you got pregnant. Koyou buys you clothes that you feel more comfortable in, clothes for the baby, toys, and even starts mumbling about having a nursery room or something like it, while you are probably thinking that you wanted to buy something for the baby too… she wouldn't let you

Takes off some days to take care of you too, and would probably remind you to have a little hobby or something to pass time during the pregnancy period. Koyou would show you many hobbies, would also try some too if you ask her, just to spend some time together

If the doctor allows it, then she is willing to let you go to a vacancy during your last months and even pay for most of it, since you will probably complain if she pays all of it. Not that she minds it, in the end, the vacancy is for you to relax so why worry over how much money you spent? Just let her.

This work belongs to @/astelren, do not repost, translate, copy, rewrite or share on tiktok without my permission. Reblogs are appreciated and encouraged♡

#heLLO IM BAAACK (for who knows how long lol) #kouyou ozaki x reader #kouyou ozaki fluff #bsd kouyou x reader #bsd kouyou fluff #bungou stray dogs x reader #bungou stray dogs fluff #bsd x reader #bsd fluff #bsd kouyou ozaki x reader #bsd kouyou ozaki fluff #enough tags welp #also i need to adjust a lot of things here uhuhe #🌹 ── my.writing #🌹 ─ bsd.writing

[ashtraythief]

Hey! So ive been a long time reader of ur underneath verse (since like.. 2018? Maybe even 2017?) and i just wanted to drop by and tell u how much im enjoying rereading ur writing! Like in general i think this is one of my fav fics series just bc its so extensive and well done and thought out and fleshed out so well it works so well? Like seeing all the different angles and the way u choose to frame things is really fun for me and kinda inspires my own writing in some aspects.

Ive never read the whole thing all in one go before so ive decided to do that right now and im just about done with the pied pipers song - more specifically willys chapter. And i kinda needed to let u know that ur series really stands out to me just bc of how many glimpses into other characters and all these different povs of the same thing like on it stands out on a technical level but then ur actual writing of these things is so good and compelling and like as an outsider pov bitch it hits the spot for me so well? Like ur writing is never stale and its always interesting.

I specifically wanted to take this time to mention that i really love willy and winstons characters and how u went about it. Like im ngl the way u wrote them kinda makes me want to cry tears of happiness for them bc they have found ppl who appreciate them and they have connections with other ppl but then the bittersweet tang of jensen and willy is kinda fucking me up rn /pos djjdjdjd like in general u really do the bittersweet jensen is stuck undercover angle really well and it HURTS so good

But yes i dont really have a good concise message or comment to leave beyond the fact that i keep stopping every few sentences to get up and jump bc im so excited about what im reading i need to get rid of that excess energy lol so sorry if this is all over the place and a really messy message! I just really wanted to let u know how much im enjoying reading it all rn. Thank you so much for sharing ur writing with us and for continuing to write for this series its so fun!

omg nonnie, I'm kinda speechless here (this is the second wonderful message in two days so I'm kinda overwhelmed. is it send wonderful messages week somewhere??)

I just am so grateful and this message made me so happy. never apologize for maybe not having a five point outline lol, this is amazing.

The underneath verse has always been my fandom baby, so praise for it is already amazing, but the pied piper fic and Winston and Willy epsecially, it just makes my heart so full. Ten years ago, they definitely started out as stock characters of mob drivers, because I didn't think this fic would get so big, but then it did, and Willy especially became a real character. a) because I knew he'd fall in love with Jensen too, as anyone does really and b) because I looooove the bittersweet undercover Jensen shtick where I write from other character's POV and the reader knows how wrong they're getting it but they don't *mu har har* (yeah I'm a little mean sometime. sorry?)

but in all seriousness, the Willy chapter, I'ev been working on that for months. And I kept adding things and rewriting things and trying to get it perfect even though I know that most people who read the story mostly care about Jared and Jensen (which is totally fair and understandable), but I care about him and there are a few people out there who do too (and I love you for it, so much), but with Willy, I just wante to do this /right/. I've come to love him so much, and he's come to be so important to Jensen, it felt like he and Winston really deserve their own story told even though that's kind of ridiculous because they're not real, but they're a little real to me now. All this to say, nonnie, this comment and your appreciation of Willy means so fucking much to me. And my poor alpha reader who read like four drafts of this (seriously, M. is a saint) and my beta readers who then had to beta four iterations of this. To know that this effort is appreciated this much honestly make me cry a little (I am not having the greatest time right now, so I cry easily but the point still stands. Thank you.)

This message was actually such an energy boost I'm currently trying to fix the next timestamp, lol so I'll have something to post next month. You're a true treasure, nonnie <3

#anon ask #underneath verse

[fablecore]

i was curious what you thought of the live-action One Piece now that season one is out! personally, i have the same compliants as Geoff of Mother's Basement (youtu.be/43K-H_dtQ9g?si=2n0MLLPmdw0vARk7) where, personally, my main compliants were (1) how clean some of these well-worn outfits and set-pieces were and the bigger one was (2) how Garp was altered but i, like Geoff, have my hopes that s2 can fix that by showing that this is the experience (mostly part from Mihawk) that changed Garp into more of the Garp we see in the manga. "a high 8 or low 9 out of 10" indeed. overall, i think its okay as an adaptation! i like Sanji's perviness being toned down, i dont mind most of the shuffling and changing because it is an adaptation with timeslots and seasons unlike a limitless manga with arcs however long it wants. i can understand if you or others dont like the live-action adaptation though! i just like that it was a good gateway to help me turn some of my friends into One Piece fans, less scared of how BIG One Piece is now the live-action has given them a limited taste, towards the manga or the OnePace.net-editted version of the anime (though i do still plan to have them watched some of the anime-only filler that is fun lmao maybe ill throw a sleepover or something, idk, i just like how OnePace fine-tunes the padded-out pacing problem the later One Piece episodes have) thats the main plus of the live-action adaptation to me

but im curious about your thoughts if you have any?? its okay if you never plan to watch it, i know a few other fans like that and i dont mean for my wuestion to be all peer-pressure-y or anything ♡

i've never heard of onepace until now! i'm in the same boat, i've been watching opla with my sister who's kind of interested in starting one piece but is also intimidated by the anime's episode count. maybe we can watch onepace instead. thanks for letting me know ☺️

i've only seen the first two episodes (but don't care at all about spoilers and have seen a lot already). i didn't like the first episode, zoro particularly, but the second was fun! well... it was camp. combined, i would give it the verdict of "aggressively okay" but this isn't a judgement on anyone who liked it. if you did, i'm happy you had a good time. i just have cinema brain.

what i liked so far: helmeppo's >:O face and his puma trainers. the vfx team in charge of luffy's rubberyness. buggy's "surprise, shithead!" nami's den den mushi earpiece/cellphone.

the rest:

zoro’s zombified no energy go girl give us nothing monotone. 😐 <- why did they tell him to make this face in every shot

they cut the scene where luffy gives zoro his swords back and replaced it with helmeppo ass

"a man needs to be strong. but he also needs to be good.” you are going to cut off a pirate rookie's arm and then obliterate his ship and crew later 👍

what is this whole thing about being "morally good" and "one of the good guys" and "a good pirate" it's ICKY

justice for silly winky vain nami. how are they going to do the personality shift into broody serious arlong park nami when she's been broody and serious the whole time

nami spent like 30 minutes unlocking one (1) locked cage. i guess it's because she and zoro needed to talk/get some exposition in, and i'm not going to suggest a better option because i don't want to rewrite half the script. i just found it amusing because normally it's "suspend your disbelief when a character does something amazing for the plot" and not "when a character is noticeably worse at something they really have no business being this bad at. for the plot"

i'm starting to think that zoro and nami lost core personality traits because the writers wanted them to be luffy foils instead of their actual characters

i did hear taz was the best/most charismatic actor out of the straw hats. i'm assuming this is because they let him be sanji instead of making him into a luffy foil since they have enough luffy foils

cameraperson's love affair with low angle closeups and fisheye lens. i don't hate it (it's camp) just pointing it out

i'm literally so serious about mackenyu's insufferable zoro voice. whenever i hear him talk in that joyless southern california kardashian vocal fry my blood pressure shoots through the roof. who made him do that

even though i have issues with the writing, i think objectively opla has done a decent job of pleasing fans. i'm not one of them but i know there's a lot. but on a technical and artistic level... deep sigh palms pressed together listen... i was hoping for spellbinding artistry from the showrunners. beautifully lit scenes, beautiful camerawork, excellent technical chops, lingering shots of luffy's bruised knuckles, the slightly frayed fabric on zoro's swords, a super close-up of a log pose with the crew talking behind the compass needle, their bodies distorted by the glass. fingerprints on kerosene lamps. barnacles on rotting wood. a searingly hot-blue summer sky (super saturated in post) over shells town or wherever. i wanted lush gorgeous rich interesting artistic ideas from the directors and cinematographers. i haven't seen any of that so far, and what i have seen doesn't compel me to watch more. i'm not saying the actual cinematography was bad! just. okay. it was okay.

(but also some of the nighttime/underlit scenes are bad. put a dang key light on your actors 🤺)

concluding thoughts: at the end of the day, if netflix wants to keep throwing millions per episode at tomorrow studios, i'm fine with overlooking mediocre filmmaking and storytelling. i want everyone in the production crew to get their bag. i hope this show runs for another 50 seasons and is powered by union labor forever and ever until the end of time amen

#letters #opla #opla spoilers #the live-action confuses my sister and she doesn't really like it. but! she likes watching me react to it #so i'll probably be strongarmed into watching more. at some point. #i drop media fast when i lose interest. it'll be difficult to keep watching when the first two episodes have been so dissatisfying #well not dissatisfying... that's the wrong word... maybe uncompelling....?

[bettsfic]

Hi betts! Ive been finding your posts really motivating, they make me want to write more and more. So id really appreciate if you could give me advice for this problem!

I just dont know how to revise! Or maybe the problem is that i dont know how to write drafts that need revising.

Basically what happens is that i write a draft as fast and messily as i can. And then i reread it, and i really like it! So when i get around to fixing it up, i end up chopping out things just based off of vibes. And then i read that version, and i hate it! It shows a lot more technical skill for sure, and it coheres a lot more, but i feel that its completely lost its voice and style. I tend to write in fits of emotion, and i feel like any revising outside of that mindset just sort of... strips the text of its sincerity?

Where do i go from here? Its not easy to practice revision when its so disheartening!

When i attempt to write badly, it either turns out good enough that im scared to change it, or bad enough that im not interested in it anymore.

How do i revise a draft without removing the things i like about it? Do i just need to get better at identifying what i like about my work?

that's an interesting situation, anon. i guess my immediate question is, if you like what you write, why do you even want to revise?

in the 50s, the beats popularized this idea of "first thought, best thought," which basically means what goes on the page is what belongs there, and the first words that come to us are the right ones, not because they're good, but because they're first.

for your own purposes, for the sake of discovery, i think this is a great mentality. the process of invention is the purest practice of creativity. you're putting things on a page that weren't there before, and if you're doing that in a way you find satisfying, and if you're pleased with the results, then i think you should keep doing it. it seems to me like your willingness to revise and your ability to say, "no, i liked it better before," will naturally develop into a more dedicated revision practice. eventually you'll write the thing that makes you go, "wait a minute, that's not right," or maybe, "i like this, but it doesn't quite honor the story i want to tell." and those are the seeds of revision.

don't get me wrong, i'm a firm believer in revision. but more than that, i'm a believer in letting your joy guide you in any creative process. revision should feel good. you should want to revise. you may not always be eager to revise, but you should feel strongly enough about the nature of what you're creating that making it better will make you feel better. but if you don't want to revise, then you shouldn't feel obligated to.

still, if you want to get a sense of what revision can do to your work so that you can experiment and grow, i would recommend writing something short, maybe a thousand words or fewer. then put it down for a week, and rewrite it without looking at it again. put that down for a week too. then rewrite it a third time without looking at either previous draft.

when you have all three drafts, try to look at them with a discerning eye. which one overall is best and why? or if you can't tell, go through and highlight all the sentences you like and count them. whichever story has the most highlights wins.

sometimes revision isn't always about making something better. sometimes it's about approaching your work so many different ways that you've conceived all possible angles and chosen the one that's best. sometimes the first thought really is the best thought. but sometimes it's the fifth thought, or the tenth, or one that someone else has to bring to your attention. i think if you broaden your definition of revision to be "considering every way this thing can be written," it'll help guide you toward a process that works for you.

#writing advice #revision #.

[cloudysarts]

Hum Hi, just wanted to know how your boyf and you are rewriting the show ? I'm a hazbin hotel watcher (not a fan, It's meh, i just really like the songs-) and i really want to learn a bit about how you guys would make it better, if that's okay ?

i appreciate the interest!!!! but honestly theres . so much changed i dont think i could possibly sum it up in a tumblr postjksdfhjk

ill give you the highlights of things that got changed in the rewrite (tw for talk of abuse dynamics)

a lot of small character things get changed. everyones design gets a major re-do, and vaggie's name has been changed. its 'Vega' now <3

the idea of sinners being confined to the pride ring is literally the dumbest shit ever. like no wonder youre fucking overpopulated, youre cramming all the people into one sin that most of them dont even fit under???? so we made it so you go to the ring of the sin you indulged in most in life, and that sin determines your color palette. red is wrath (including people like alastor and nifty), pink is lust (angel, valentino), greed is yellow (husk, vox), pride is purple (vega, velvet << i refuse to call her velvette), gluttony is orange (cherri maybe?), sloth is indigo (no ones here yet), and envy is green (sir pentious).

heaven, charlie, and the hotel are on a bright, sky blue palette. its supposed to encourage sinners to reach for the sky! charlie and vega wear this blue, and alastors recruits (husk and nifty) wear red.

obviously everything about angel and valentino are getting a major overhaul. their abuse arc was portrayed in such an awful, fetishized light it literally makes me sick.

the whole idea of heaven not knowing how a soul gets there? dumb as shit. were going with a more common interpreation of hell being a place where you have more freedom, but so does everyone else, and that freedom comes at the price of safety and trust. and heaven is a place where freedom is heavily restricted behind a lofty rule book. theres a reason hell is overpopulated; getting into heaven can be demanding, and the exceptions sometimes seem unjust.

husk x angel is,,,,,,,so so bad in the show. its so bad. they have 0 chemistry and angel is so victimized (even when HES in the wrong) and husk is forced to coddle him and it makes me so mad. but me and my boyf were CONVINCED we could make it work. in the rewrite, husk and angel have a complicated relationship at the beginning. angel is continuing val's cycle of abuse and husk is the only one willing to call him out on it. he doesnt baby him or comfort him and instead gives him a much needed wake up call, and slowly angel starts to be more respectful of boundaries because he realizes hes terrified of doing whats done to him to someone else. its rocky but theyre getting there.

the writing is really super bad but theres not much we can do about that . its not entirely the shows fault for the shitty pacing but were stretching every event out coniderably.

i could keep rambling but wed be here all day so im gonna call it there ^^" i hope this was coherent

#no tags because i dont want this breaching containment too much #but thats my take. happy hazbin finale day. #i will be watching

[cinnamon-bunni]

hm... 4, 7, 11, 12, 17, 21, 22, 24! happy new year, bunni!

4. Total number of words you wrote this year That's hard to find tbh....I didn't end up posting a lot of fics, so i dont only have to just check my statistics on ao3, but all of my possible fics ive written this year in my wip docs as well. the total i got was 58,171 words (~35k of it being WIPs and not posted)! so definitely not as much as i wrote last year which was (i think over 100k), and also not including all of my notes ive written. i did not do a lot of writing this year, so hopefully next year i'll wrap up all of my big fics and post them all <3

7. longest completed fic you wrote this year Again, i did not write a lot this year, much less finish them lmao. if you were to ask about uncompleted fics, we would have a different story--but alas, the longest completed one was Once More, With Needles, sitting at 4,414 words!

11. fandom you enjoyed writing for the most this year hm....obey me, I suppose. its hard to say really, but enjoyment from writing specifically, i'd have to give it to obey me. what can i say, the cast is just really fun to write (even when levi is impossible to write, like what the hell man i have rewritten your part in my undead fic like 3 separate times and am continuing fixing it, like what the hell man i trusted you and then you dont behave for me). like this year specifically i realized how much i love each and every character--those like lucifer reminded me as to why i love the game and the characters, and people like mephisto and raphael randomly won a spot in my heart. theyre all just so so fun to write <333

12. favorite character to write about this year lucifer!!! even though i only have like, one fic that features him thats out and finished lmao; hes such an interesting and complex character, yet is one whose mind i can easily slip into when i need to write when its his pov. idk, sometimes i find myself struggling to write characters like levi or even asmo sometimes--mainly from my own failures to pay attention to their canon interpretations and making them not out-of-character--but lucifer is surprisingly one i can always rely on to be easy and fun to write!! he is angst galore and so emotionally constipated, hes great <3

17. fics you’ll continue next year Heart Melts for sure!! i originally wanted ch3 to be out before the new year, but ive been drafting and redrafting all of my future chapters (i am trying my best to make it a psychological horror in order to match the tag that i put on the fic, but idk if its going to live up to the hype that people have for this fic ^^;;) so i sadly didnt get time to finish it. maybe by the end of January ill have it out--heres to hoping its done by then! and maybe i might continue Dirty? I didn't even update it this year lol--its def one i dont wanna leave discontinued, as i have all of the chapters planned out, but i just have many other projects that i wanna focus on and also i really wanna rewrite it, so ive been debating doing that first or just to finish then rewrite it. in a perfect world, i'll update that one too lol

21. most memorable comment/review I have two that come to mind!!! in all honesty all comments make me sooo happy, but these ones specifically is just,,,idk man, they just hit a certain way that itches that scratch in my brain that needs validation lmao i love rereading these all the time <3 theres these comments for Messy Makeup:

(make me go insane from them saying i wrote multiple fics that were their favorites <33) and of course there's this banger of a comment from @/snugglebunnies!!! idk if youre reading this but thank you thank you thank you for inspiring me so much with your fics!!! i love them so much, and this comment was just incredible! from the fic Heart Melts:

(love when people leave quotes, no matter how long or short!!!! such deep analysis is what i live for!!!!) and of course, sending out so much love to everyone who leaves a comment on any of my fics, no matter how big or small they are <333

22. events you participated in this year i didnt participate in any events this year! i tend not to do events tbh, theyre not really my style, as i dont do well with due dates unless i have months in advance lol;; usually i might do one, maybe two, events a year, but those are usually simple gift exchanges or something. nothing caught my eye this year, and ones that did i just didnt have the time to do, sadly. but! i do plan on doing the sonic big bang next year, which will be my first ever "bigger" event ive been in! exciting, but also really nervewracking as ive never posted sonic content and idk how well i'll do staying on schedule. but its still something i really wanna do (have a great fic planned for it!) so i still wanna give it a shot and do my best on it lol

24. favorite fic you read this year from this year is really hard to say--i think all of my favorite fics were found last year lmao so its a struggle to think of one. @heleentje's BOTW fic Moonlight has been a fantastic read (even though i havent finished it yet;;; i promise will soon!!) and just hits all of the right notes for me!! The batman fic Performance Piece is also definitely up there for me, as it captures so well what i want in my own writing when it comes to writing characters, especially when it comes to inner-dialogue (i might just go back and reread that one again lmao)

as of posting, i have about twenty minutes left before the new year. so happy early 2024!! 🥳🎉💝

#unrelated but. after writing so much simeon pov for That Fic. i want nothing to do with him anymore. i cant stand him or solomon right now #(but im barely halfway done so. oh well lmaoo) #favorite fic you read this year #thanks for the ask! #fun to answer all of these thanks for so many lol <33 #bunni mumbles #ask game #happy new year damian!

[patrocool]

i would love to hear about pekka rollins:( torture fic, honey in your ears, spice in your mouth, slaz crack fic, and trying to change!!!

ooooh okay, so!!

pekka rollins:( torture fic is a rewrite of one of my 'verses from band-aids on our bullet wounds (chaps 21, 25, and 31 i think?) that has been expanded a Lot. it is now 15k words with 6/18 planned chapters written entirely. its @randomcat1832's fault that it is now so long. in this fic, kaz was taken by rollins and tortured for six months. he ends up blinded and Very Fucked up and traumatised, the the fic is over the course of roughly a year after being rescued as he slowly heals and becomes himself again. also trans kaz for the win:)

honey in your ears, spice in your mouth is a companion to my sick fic, and i hate myself every day that's dealt that i couldn't comfort you, where kanej have a fight, inej leaves on the wraith, and kaz ends up getting deathly sick, all in kaz's pov. honey in your ears is inej's pov of all of that!!

slaz crack fic is uhhhhhhhhhhhhhh well. if you know me irl please dont read this. the fic is basically what if,,,, the slat,,,,,, fucked kaz,,,,, and also inej was there

trying to change is a short lil thing inspired by the mother mother song of the same name. it sits unfinished bc i thought it was bad but now reading it, i think it could actually be an interesting start to something. i just,,, dont have a plot for it. but basically, kaz is beating himself up for not immediately becoming Better for inej post-ck

snippets under the cut!

pekka torture:( fic

TW: implied past torture, extreme trauma response, a bit of racism, violence, poor mental state, all around Bad Time, and its in 2nd person!

Most of the townsfolk think Inej is your nurse. You know you should be angry and you think you are, but it feels muted. Distant. As if behind a thick curtain, or perhaps on a separate floor of a house.

(As if you were still in that cellar while your heart was out of your chest, far, far away while Pekka was too damn close–)

You consider using the knife strapped to your arm underneath your sleeve to take a stab at some of the particularly nasty commenters, but it feels more like a learned behavior, a routine you can fall back into rather than an urge in the moment. You think you might be so used to violence that it's become your default, and you hate that you even have to resort to your default when you should be angry. You should be furious–

But you’re not. You’re just numb.

-

honey in your ears, spice in your mouth

Once the letter was in her hands, Specht subtly nodded towards her captain’s quarters. He knew as well as she did that whatever was on that piece of parchment was important– and likely sensitive information.

She didn’t need to be told twice.

She barely even registered Wylan’s wax seal as she cracked it open to Jesper’s familiar scrawl.

It didn’t say much but what it did made her stomach plummet in the worst way.

Wraith,

KB is sick. Raging fever. Called-me-Jordie-again-and-didn’t-seem-to-know-he-was-wrong sort of sick. Don’t know for how long, finding medik.

He keeps mumbling your name.

-J

Within half a bell, the Wraith was heading towards Ketterdam with a vengeance with only the little dinghy sent ahead as a warning.

Tell him I’m on my way, was all she wrote on the return note.

-

slaz crack fic

cw: nsfw lmfao

No one understood Kaz like the Slat did. No one knew what he needed like it did either.

Kaz couldn’t stand the touch of another person, the very thought of skin against his repulsed him, but he was still a man with certain urges and, well. The Slat didn’t exactly have skin, now did it?

-

trying to change

tw: implied parental and child death (kaz's backstory), self hate

“What’s wrong?” She asked, looking him over carefully– he felt her eyes lingering on his still scabbing knuckles and the stiff way his leg was laid out. 

I missed you, he wanted to say. I didn’t have you by my side. I couldn’t do even the one thing you asked of me. I’ve failed you at the very simplest of things, things that Jesper had managed within days of knowing you and yet I still have nightmares about. I can’t do this, I can’t be what you want. I can’t be the man you want me to be– I only know how to be the monster the Barrel made me into.

He turned back to his books. “I’m fine,” he said, stiff as dry wood.

“You’re not,” Inej said, her words cutting through him like a knife.

(Like a plow.)

Kaz swallowed down a lump in his throat and his eyes found the date of the most recent log in his book. He hadn’t changed, and Jordie would never get the chance to. Because that was what it was really about, wasn’t it? That’s what it always was– he couldn’t even just move on with his life. He was forever stuck in this limbo between dead and alive, crumbling under the weight of his dead forever-13-year-old brother.

#sorry this is so long lmfaoo #thank you for the ask!!!!! #asks #wip #soc

[aurora-313]

I got interested at Bleach again recently, and sadly, some of my favorite characters in Bleach is very minor characters, include Kaien and Masaki. I came across your fic just about a week ago, and thank you for the great works. I think I read each and every one of your fic at least four times last week. I never knew I needed some good Ichigo-Kaien cousins relationship, and your works scratched an itch I never knew I had.

So, how long do you planned to write your works? Most Bleach fic writers hate lost agent arc (I dont like it either, but the concept of fullbring is good. I just hate Ichigo's final fullbring design), and you jokingly said something about BB!Kaien flirting some of the female quincies on other asks. Nepenthe starts even before turn back the pendulum arc, so it may take a completly different course of actions from canon. The twin fic, you said it will go under a rewrite, didnt even started soul society arc. I am just curious how long I can enjoy your fic.

And I admit I am curious about how Kaien will play out in some of the anime only arcs. I am manga only reader, and I dont really watch anime in general, but I am seriously considering to watch the anime arc only episodes. Im pretty sure that you will skip those parts, but can you show us what do you think of them?

I'm glad you're enjoying what I've written so far.

Kaien is a criminally underused character and he was one of my favourites for a good long time. I genuinely believe he and Ichigo would've gotten on extremely well, and that Kaien would've been the big brother Ichigo never realised he needed.

For Black and Blue, obviously its going to be canon divergent by virtue of Kaien's living status and his speed-running Ichigo through 'How To Train Your Hollow'. Events will not marry up to the canon timeline. At least not completely, Aizen will face the music - that's a given.

Truth be told I actually dislike Thousand Year Blood War. And in my story, several character's fates set in stone. Many of which run heavily contradictory to the events of TYBW, so I'm electing to ignore that arc. If I touch the Quincy conflict... I'd probably rejig a lot of lore for my narrative.

Tangentially, regarding the flirting with a Quincy joke? BB!Kaien already has an endgame love interest. Hilarious as that would be, they are not a Quincy.

Lost Agent Arc is... one that I've grown to appreciate as I've gotten older, but back when I was reading Bleach week by week, I found it completely insufferable and I spent most of my time bemoaning 'Hurry up and give him his powers back, Kubo."

Though, frankly, I never bought why Ichigo had to lose his powers in the first place, especially when the Hyog had established weaknesses within it which would’ve allowed victory by attrition. And Duex Ex Final Getsuga hits a wrong note with me no matter how you slice it. You can’t describe it as anything other than an ass pull and hand of the author at play.

My conclusion as an adult looking back; Lost Agent, I sit comfortably on the fence. Its okay. Not offensive, not inoffensive, just average. That being said, I have touched on Ginjo Kugo's existence in BB, so that might be another thing I'll have to explore as part of the epilogue. Or in a side/sequel story.

However. My dislike for TYBW aside, I do intend to write independent What-If scenarios for certain events that take place; Kaien's reaction to Ukitake's sacrifice, what Sternritter I'd of had him fight. Things of that nature.

My intention for Black and Blue is to conclude the Winter War with Aizen's defeat and have the Zanpakutou Rebellion arc (anime only) function as a winddown with some rejigging to make it fit into BB's narrative. Then a 'Where are they now' epilogue some years or decades hence because after this hell, these guys have earned their happy endings.

Once More To See You Again I'm focusing on transforming it into a cohesive narrative with some liberties taken with worldbuilding. Rather than have Rukia be persecuted for creating a Shinigami Substitute when there's clearly provisions for one; she pleads guilty to interfering with the Cycle of Souls and reassociation with a reincarnated soul. In OMTSYA Rukia is trapped in a catch-22; Report the Shinigami substitute which reveals the reassociation and end in both their executions, or request a transfer, which leaves a substitute undocumented and unsupervised and end in both their executions. Dealing with that conundrum is going to be interesting. :)

(That, and I didn't like Kaien's aspects fighting each other during Ashewallen. Especially considering how Ichigo's aspects only ever desired to protect him.)

That will last until at LEAST the end of Soul Society. But I do have ideas for interactions with the Visoreds, other Arrancars and how Hueco Mundo would go down. Let's face it: Neo!Kaien vs Aaronerio!Kaien would be a delicious match-up and great character exploration.

Nepenthe was inspired by Cywscross' Swinging Pendulum (but really, what Bleach Time-travel story isn't these days?) - but I wanted to take all the usual time-travel clichés attached to Ichigo and play them completely straight. Rather than pretending, Ichigo does legitimately have amnesia. Rather than hiding his power, Ichigo was injured in such a way that he needs to regain his powers the old fashioned way. Effectively, I dumped him in the past with a clean slate and I look forward to seeing how he adapts to living with and as a Shiba.

But to answer your question: So, how long do you planned to write your works?

For as long as people keep reading and commenting on it, I suppose. :)

There's a criminal lack of Kaien content. I aim to rectify this.

#kaien shiba #ichigo kurosaki #my writing #bleach #bleach tybw #bleach arrancar #bleach au

[ganondoodle]

read about all the armor set pieces i never bothered to fin before stopping to play to make sure i wasnt missing any potential useful info and came across the thing that im guessing is the reward for the shrines given its description and i just

kinda sank back into sadness and desperation bc of how much i dont like it and im fearing they are just gonna mess it all up even further

i said it before but i have a seething hatred for how totk hurts botw in retrospect, like wow i liked the mystery of the sonau but never wanted an answer to it, i liked the mystery of who the ancient hero was bc of its strange depiction and man did i not want this kind of answer, some things not having an answer can be more interesting than having one, cant we focus on going forward instead of looking back further and further, it was fine with the shiekah but at the end of botw it felt like a relieved sigh of "ok the past is gone and done, now we can built a better future and move o-" NOPE LOL LOOK BACK EVEN FURTHER THERE WERE THE COOLEST PEOPLE EVEN FURTHER IN THE PAST OMG YOU GUYYSSS LOOKS HOW COOL THEY WERE AND ALSO FUCKED IT ALL UP LOOOOOK LOOOK

like in general i have nothing against introducing a new species/nation to zelda but the way they did the sonau is just nothing but frustrating to me, coming out of basically nowhere and suddendly being shoved into EVERYTHING, everything shiekah, basically erased bc ACTUALLY the sonau were here first lol and they were so much cooler and better in every aspect dont you DARE even THINK of any other boring old group central to the better game of the two (botw)

like i get it they are the new cool thing but they feel so much more suddendly FORCED into EVERY aspect of both lore and world and how everyone absolutely obsesses over them its like the devs were so scared of the player not being interested in them that they felt the need to make every second NPC obsessed with them just so they can constantly shove in your face how interesting they are (like i think they way this was done just made me even less interested/more annoyed, sorry, their design is neat yeah but i really dont care, you failed to make me care and TELLING me to care wont change that), the ancient shiekah felt so much better integrated as a natural part of the world without being annoying about it and i just ....

i worry about whats to come, both for possible DLC, or worse even another game pretending to be connected to it or just .. in general ... especially given how successful totk was and still looks like its only praised outside of my bubble of like minded people

i now got alot of people interested into my totk rewrite but now im worried ... isnt my energy and time better spent on something else .. especially if they are just gonna make it all worse anyway/mess with it more, like after seeing how much totk disappointed me yet how successful it is i doubt it will get better again

#ganondoodles talks #zelda #totk #ganondoodles rants #sorta #i guess the fear of losing my hyperfixation after the new stuff drove my enjoyment of it into a brick wall is back #like it happened with all other special thingies i had #i was so into everything and then theres a new thing that makes my feelings about it do a complete turn into the opposite #its not there yet with zelda ...... im so afraid of it happening to it too #it didnt have to be this way :( #i dont wanna lose my special thing again #never been this long and this strongly invested into something #...

[sethdomain]

I would love to know about your miraculous rewrite!!

Tell me everything!!

that would be too long. but, can i will use this as an excuse to talk about how Butterfly, ladybug and Cat miraculous power work in this rewrite and the miraculous in general.

Ladybug miraculous

so you know how ladybug miraculous power is creation? i just really dont think it make sense that it can miraculously fixed every problem like nothing ever happend, i just dont think that make the story interesting, like wow something is destroyed! but you really just dont care if you know everything is literally fixed and resurrected afterward, i just think it make the story has no stake and boring as hell, so the fixing it thing would be a removed power cuz its op and make thing boring as hell. i want them to be more careful at their hero work, and that there is consequences from their careless collateral damage.

Since the main idea power of ladybug is creation, i was thinking, what is the limitation on what it can make, and then i have a fucked up idea, what if it can create anything including eiffel tower, body part, corpse, and anything you want in the world! the only thing it cannot make is a living breathing creature(ex: animals, human). so in conclusion, Ladybug can create literally ANYTHING, except living breathing creature.

The miraculous has a limit to create stuff, the more the power it is used the more energy it will take from the user. the size of the item the ladybug miraculous user created can heavily exhaust them, so unlike canon it can create multiple stuff instead of only FUCKING ONE. but in some cases like making organ or any body part, there are many specific thing that can take so MUCH energy although their size is not gigantic. using too much of this power can exhaust the body of an user that cause them to faint.

The user also need to have a clear vision of what they want to create! if they dont it might cause the miraculous to make the item that is not desired by the user itself.

examples of a situation

 user: okay i want a gun (in mind: dont think about dick! dont think about dick! i want gun!!)

*you can imagine what it summons*

in this rewrite i will keep the purification thing cuz i simply like the idea, although it seem a little odd that ladybug can do this one specific thing... listen i just really like the purification process!! the only difference is in the animation, instead of becoming a normal butterfly it will instead become a butterfly that is made of light that fly and disappear through the sky.

Cat Miraculous

Cat miraculous power is surrounded around the concept of 'destruction', so the power is still almost similar like the canon itself, it destroy and turn thing to ashes, but instead of instantly turning literally everything to ashes, it DOES NOT DO THAT.

this will be a little nerf to the Cat miraculous but instead of being able to turn big ass shit instantly to ash, instead its just splotches of ash destruction. but trust me this nerf is literally needed because there is an added buff balance to the cat miraculous, instead of just lame one-time-use, the user can use it multiple time, the concept is similar to the ladybug miraculous, it still exhaust the user.

although its just splotches of thing turned to ash, the cat miraculous can still, if the user want, can destroy big ass shit. the user can control how big the decay destroy area is, but the bigger it is the bigger the energy consumption is, and to control it is very tricky too because it also depend on the user emotion. if the user feels a very strong emotion, it can cause massive destruction around them potentially damaging those around them, so it really is fucking tricky, you gotta keep your emotion at check so it doesnt hurt anyone.

unlike in miraculous, Cat miraculous can destroy an akuma, the only difference to ladybug way of purification is that it literally make the akuma butterfly crumble to dust. now you might be confused, does it mean anyone can destroy the akuma butterfly? i will answear that in our next section!

Butterfly Miraculous

why is this miraculous so op, literally why, i though cat and ladybug miraculous is the most powerful one whyyyyy.

so instead of making anyone be able to become anything at all, it will instead be like a literal wildcard. any person that is akumatized, will get a random power that the inner person soul wants, who know this person can have a fire power, an ice power or turning people to that weird red and white girl, but at most it will all be a d tier power, but at rare cases it can get probably a good A tier power. it is still a mystery on how this miraculous work on giving people power. 

the butterfly user know what power the victim had the moment they’re akumatized, this is when the butterfly akuma has to work together with the akumatized victim and help them with their power and plans.

to nerf it again, the butterfly miraculous cannot akumatize hundreds of people a fucking day and it still can only akumatize people with strong negative emotion. the more it akumatize people the more it will take a tool on the user body, it can cause fucking death.

the butterfly miraculous has a strange time limit. 

Miraculous in general

Miraculous in general will gave the user a superhuman strength, at first it will only be at superhero form, but later it will transfer to the user actual indentity without hero forms on.

most miraculous user can get traits of the creature the miraculous is based, because what the hell do you expect of me? iam a furry.

now you might ask does kwami exist? kinda yeah, but they dont have a physical form and you know they’re there, but they arent there there. aye shout out to that one person that gave me this idea! very galaxy brain

there is still a time limit to the miraculous power, but unlike canon it doesn't goes beep! beep! and then boom ur costume gone, nope! instead you can still put it on past the time limit, but it will strain your whole body that can cause a weakened stake, puking blood, or literally death if you put it on so fucking long. just imagine that suit slowly sucking the life forces outta you because the power has no energy left so it take yours to substitute the lack of energy.

does miraculous need anything to recharge itself? yes it needs fucking rest, dont use it, it will recharge itself.

also once a miraculous has been used, it will bond itself with the user, the only way the bond can be broke is if the user fucking dead

Miraculous still disguise themseve in a form of accessories, it adapt in every ages they’re in and can take in any shape the user desire them to be! like example this user want it to be a ring, so will it be a ring! this will also patch up a plot hole in the show :/

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okay so if i miss anything, give me a break and send an ask, i’ll patch thing up, my brain is like running 100000 per miles helpp.

if you had any feedback and what you think of these i would love to hear it :p

#the amazing miraculous rewrite #mlb #miraculous ladybug #rewrite

[chihirolovebot]

Okay, first, take as long as you need to answer this. I know times are tough for you right now, so please, take you’re time :). It’s just been on my mind for a while but I haven’t had the chance to ask since schools starting soon so I’ve been busy, and I wanted to ask before I forget. How do you write at the right pace? Like, how do you not make a scene take too long or take too short of time- especially with dialogue. AA, okay just wanted to ask. IM SO HAPPY YOURE FEELING AT LEAST A LITTLE BIT BETTER. Remember to take a breather and stay properly hydrated and fed, and rest as much as you need. GAH THIS WAS LONG SORRY- much longer than it needed to be.

HI no ur okay this is a rly interesting question actually. i fear i am the wrong person to ask because several times i have had a plan for a chapter set up, then ended up splitting it into two chapters because one scene took up way more words than i anticipated. BUT.

plan chapter by chapter. this helps me so much because if i dont have a plan i end up freestyling and meandering, lingering on one thing too much or too little etc. plan out what ur characters r going to do in that chapter, what theyre going to talk about, who theyre going to see, what theyre going to feel. but ONLY the stuff thats important to the plot. so like, something i would put in my plan would be 'y sees roadkill and feels nothing, put emphasis on them become desensitised to violence' not 'y goes to a zoo and feels sad' when this has nothing to do with character or plot progression.

i try and estimate how long a scene is going to take but it is hard. an important thing to remember is that if a scene gets away from you, go with it. you can look back in a bit and see if there's anything you want to cut down or rewrite, but in the moment, just write. even if you decide the scene needs to be slimmed down, you can move the fat into another scene!! i have done this many times, moved conversations that pushed my word limit into another chapter where they fit better.

in short. have a list of things you want to set up, establish and accomplish as a plan. write your scenes around these; every line and description and dialogue should be in service of something in the plan, which helps the writing feel less like fluff and more meaty. i'll attach a screenshot of one of my plans for a recent sleep awake chapter if that helps any!!

especially if ur planning a long dialogue scene like i am in this. conversations can get away from you really easily, so always have a plan of what you want to establish, and you can build around that, otherwise you WILL end up going on an irrelevant tangent.

i really hope this helped some. at the end of the day, you'll write what feels right, and you can edit it as much as you want after that. dont think too hard about pacing, i dont!!

#dear venus.

[brewing-radianite]

good morning (it is 4 am)!!! (if it’s bad, it’s bc it’s 4 am and i’m not proof-reading it again at 4 am) 

the first chapter of my brim/sage/viper longfic has been posted: 

“How do you take your coffee?”  now up on Ao3, with the 1st chapter bearing 7k words. rest assured not every chapter will be this long, but i had a Lot i wanted to put into this one bc there’s a lot of scenes and parallelism to set up for later on.

more info under the cut:

so! firstly, thank you for checking this post out. anyone who has followed me for a while knows this longfic is a concept i’ve been wanting to fulfill for literal months now LMAO it’s kind of nice to finally say it’s been officially started! 

that being said, here are some things to keep in mind:

this story is LONG. 30+ chapters. which means things can be slow sometimes, but that’s also the nature of this fic; i want to emphasize and punctuate the slower and calmer styles of falling in love i believe this trio to have. honestly? i’m kind of very nervous about doing this correctly and in a way that is at all interesting to a reader but... there really is no better way to learn to swim than to just dive in... 

i’ve mentioned before this story is rated Mature for a reason. there is no porn or nsfw content, nor severe gore or graphic depictions of like crazy violence, but there WILL be canon typical scenes (fighting, gunfire, stabbing) and other mature topics (nightmares, PTSD, profanity, partial-full non-sexual nudity) so yeah. i’ll also give individual warnings per chapter just to be on the safe side, but like by this point i’ve mentioned it already 3 or 4 times so you know what to expect p well. 

and lastly, i really have no idea what updates will look like anymore. i’d definitely like to update more than 2-3 times a month (perhaps more with the shorter chapters too bc i assure you i am not making every chapter 7k+ words!!!) but i’m also a student and working part-time, and i have other fics to do too! so things will be CONSISTENT but dont expect a new chapter every week. if i ever do go like 3+ weeks without a mention of the fic though, i’ll definitely try to let you all know there’s a delay and/or when to expect things to clear up for me. 

this really is my first like... major longfic. i have never written a story beyond 3 or 4 chapters and as we’ve seen it takes me sometime to progress those LOL so your patience would be appreciated and please understand if i need time to rework or rewrite things along the way! it’s a big project that i have a very specific vision for but i’ll do my very best!

and thank you 

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