#original screenplay i guess

[gugf]

How would you adapted the Lorax for the stage? What changes would you made?

I think, to make a good adaptation of Lorax, you should just embrace the darkness of a story. So expansion of it's themes plays off more naturally. That's, at least, how I decided to do, if we assume that I have a full creative freedom.

I'll borrow some good things from pre-existing adaptation, and make it all work for a theme. Our theme is infinite growth philosophy, greed and corporate culture.

If we'll take this cut idea about boy being greedy, we'll have two parallel arcs. Of a downfall and of redemption.

Boy still lives in a corporatocracy which is run by another person, selling people air. But in this version it's much more grim. The happy utopia it presents itself in a movie, turns out to be just a facade, and in a continuation of an opening number we actually see that this society conists largely of poor exploited people with a health issues, which corporations are also profiting off. Boy protagonist dislikes his life. He dreams of hitting it big one day for himself and his family, if only he had some valuable product to offer.

So, one day he hears about a thing called "trees" which one day used to be a source of free oxygen, and that some old man living in the middle of nowhere must have something to do with them.

Boy, imagines himself as having a successful business, on par with the corporation running his town. And also, decides that he'll push his own air as more "healthy" than of his competitor. At this point he sees trees and solely as a cow to be milked. (I mean, can you blame him? He doesn't even know that concept of nature exists, more over the meaning it has)

He heads to the Onceler.

This movie would largely consist of his story, with boy protagonist changing his views and learning as he listens.

We'll take Onceler's story and largely expand on it. We can also start with the backstory of how he created thneed and cut his first tree. He can even think at first that's it's largely impractical and ugly, but then realize how easy it is to market. I'd like to keep his background and family life really vague, so the audience could see themselves in him (which was the point of the book). As for his face I have two ideas. He either faceless from the start, or becomes one once he became a head of a corporation. I have an old scetch of how this design could be realized.

Back to the story. He decides that the town where he lives doesn't have enough trees, so he heads to the forest. (As he tells the story he reminisces about how beautiful it was, which really makes boy reevaluate the purpose of nature) He meets Lorax, who makes him feel guilty about cutting trees, so Onceler assures him that "he'll cut only a couple, just enough to sustain a small business". But as the demand grows, he becomes hesitant about keeping his promise. When Lorax comes back, Onceler assures him, that he eventually starts replanting, so it's not that bad. Maybe he'll even make a small area for this, but just to shut the Lorax up. All in what Onceler truly becomes invested is his business.

(Boy at this point fully sympathizes with Onceler, he believes that it was necessary, and doesn't really think about consequences)

That's where comes our first breaking point. As his company expands he realizes how impractical it is to compromise and grows more dismissive of Lorax. He starts to excuse all his actions by "company is an an animal, it helps the economy, offer and demand" philosophy and stuff. Yep, that's when "The Biggering" comes. Onceler becomes more ruthless with how he operates his business. If he experiences guilt, he always finds a way to justify it, like in "Mr Onceler" song. We could show it, with how he tries to keep a monopoly. Onceler makes more property private, destroys other businesses, underpays his employees and sabotages his colleagues.

And nature is what it affects the most. Y'now, pollution, living things. Hell, why stop on trees? He could do an animal testing!

(Boy becomes horrified, but still can't fully let go of his plans. He tries to make excuses, and think of ways how he would've run things differently, but eventually finds nothing)

Then comes the second breaking point. While Onceler fully let go of his morals, he sees how citizens react hostile to a growing pollution. Afraid of losing his business he starts to spend propaganda and conspiracy theories about how everything is fine and no worry is needed because he totally knows what he is doing. This is where we can place another villain song. I think of something like "Laplace Angel" by Will Wood, or similar. Just full on "i don't even care how evil i am anymore". So, yeah, Onceler doesn't even try to listen to Lorax, it's all excuses and self-pity at this point. He can even change education and history books by his liking, now he's basically all-powerful! I really like how in the original he starts to live in a very tall building and has images of a clear sky as a curtains. It really hammers home how disconnected from reality he became. Even Onceler himself starts to believe in his lies.

Until... Of course... All is lost. The proof of his wrongdoings stares him right in the face as the last tree falls on the ground. His empire crashes. Not with a bang but with a whimper. As he opens his curtains and looks down, he realizes that everyone has already left. Onceler is fully alone, and didn't even notice. In a wasteland of his own creation he sees Lorax, begs him not to leave, but he doesn't listen. They say each other goodbyes, and he never appears again.

After a long silence boy, finally understanding the situation, cautiously asks if something could be done. Onceler remarks about a seed he has, but initially refuses to give it. He lost all hope. Boy, solidifing his changed view, would argue that if this story made him change, that it'll work for his community, or at least, he'll try to explain. Seeing his determination, Onceler hesitantly gives him seed, and watches the boy heads back to the city. That's where the movie will end. Really ambiguous. To really hammer the point.

#the lorax #dr seuss #original screenplay i guess #trad art #once ler

[hudbannonarchive]

also oscars picks and predictions ig. best actor i'm picking cillian and i obvi think he'll win. i think the slate is kind of weak this year tbh he's giving the best perfromance (rustin notwithstanding bc i haven't seen it) of the nominees THAT said i'd be rooting for leo if he'd been nominated. best actress i'm picking lily gladstone and i'm tentatively predicting her as well. if emma stone wins i'll be disappointed but not surprised. best supporting actor i'm rooting for mark ruffalo i think he gives the best performance tbh but i would take anyone over robert downey jr. who is is my prediction. weakest performance in the category and it's not even close. one of the weakest performances in oppenheimer tbh and there are some bad ones. best supporting actress i'm rooting for da'vine joy randolph and she is also my prediction. best director I'm picking scorsese and predicting nolan. best picture my pick is killers of the flower moon and i predict oppenheimer will win.

#original screenplay my pick and prediction is anatomy of a fall #adapted my pick is the zone of interest and i don't really have a prediction it's a tight race i'll guess oppenheimer #they've been boringly giving a million awards to the same movie the last few years so this could be part of the tidal wave #*

[thebeautifulfantastic]

scene from "pretenders"

since you insist @courageisneverforgotten ;) (no but honestly i was hoping someone would be curious, so i could share a piece of what i wrote today!)

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EXT. OUTSIDE THE BUS/VAN – LATE EVENING

EMBER and CASSIAN are sitting together (or lying on the ground) in silent companionship, both lost in their own thoughts and staring straight forward. CASSIAN stirs, and turns to EMBER with a question.

Cassian: Do you love your dad?

Ember: You want an honest answer?

[Cassian waits in silence, knowing she’ll give an answer. She sighs, conceding.]

Ember: I wish I could say yes. I’d like to say yes, but I don’t. I’ve asked myself this question before, and the only answer I can ever give myself is no.

Cassian: Is it like… there’s something holding you back? From loving him?

Ember: Oh. there’s always something holding me back. All these excuses, or at least they feel like excuses. See – it’s different with him. Like, I know I love my mom. We fight all the time, but we make up, and we forgive, and we hug each other. I wouldn’t put so much effort into resolving our conflicts if I didn’t love her. That’s how I know: we’re willing to deal with the shit as well as the good things. But with my dad… it’s like we’ve been in this one ongoing fight since— I don’t know, since he left us, or maybe this is how it’s been for most of my childhood. But we don’t— I don’t even have the dignity to admit that I’m still fighting. Maybe he doesn’t feel that way. But I do. For me, we’re still in the thick of it. This isn't a resolution, it’s a truce. Or it’s all a lie, another old lie we tell ourselves. 

Cassian: So… why do you keep trying, then?

Ember: Because, I want to love him. Sometimes. Or at least because I feel like I should try to. I wish I could. [She throws up her hands in frustration] By all accounts, I should love my father! It’s— I feel guilty if I don’t. I used to love him, anyway. Now it’s all gone to pieces. 

Cassian: And you kept seeing him all this time, even though you didn’t want to?

Ember: Well, child support sucks, so I had to for a couple years. But then after I turned eighteen and I didn't have to see him once a week anymore, I realized I didn’t want to stop. I kept hoping that maybe, if instead, I was going to be seeing him because I chose to, things could be different. Better. Real. 

Cassian: And were they?

Ember: No. I don’t know. Maybe a little. Anyway, not enough to make any real difference. 

[They sit companionably in silence for a moment.]

Ember: I think about this a lot. Like, what if he died?

Cassian: Who, your dad?

Ember: Yeah. Like, what if, just all of a sudden, he was gone. Would I even miss him? How would I even feel about that?

Cassian: And?

Ember: All I know is… I’d feel guilty, and then I’d feel relieved, and then I’d feel guilty about feeling relieved. I’d regret stuff, sure… but it’s not all my fault, is it? If he really wanted to have a good relationship with me, he’d have done more to fix it. Right? So— so maybe, maybe when I feel guilty for not loving him, it is all my fault and I have no excuse, but maybe he doesn't know how to love me. What am I even supposed to do about that? Maybe that’s why it’s so hard to feel anything towards him.

#behold my original blorbos having one of their many discussions about family trauma #ember's story is definitely not inspired by mine At All (...or is it?) #(this scene was heavily inspired by something i wrote in my diary once so...) #but yeah here you go! #this is formatted as close as i could get it to an *actual* script format but not exactly because tumblr doesn't allow me to center text :( #but you get the picture i hope #oh also! i never write stories in order so this is NOT the opening scene! #the way i see it right now i'm guessing it would be somewhere in the first third of the movie #belle writes #my screenplays & scripts #s: pretenders #ember james #cassian

[aguacerotropical]

been reading The Vampyr and about penny dreadfuls (an essay compared them to fanfiction which is interesting) and im reminded of my own writing. I always aim for poetic realism bc i genuinely love stuff like drive my car, shoplifters, 400 blows, tarkovsky, marie howe, josé emilio pacheco, etc etc. like HighBrow things

but really i almost always fail at poetic realism, unless its poetry. And i lost my interest in my own poetry awhile back, unfortunately.

Anyways my most successful work of writing was a comedy screenplay about ghosts harassing a nighttime fast food worker. I think i have to embrace the fact i like, enjoy and are better at the weird, the pulpy and the ridiculous over anything else

#Anyways imma post the VnC fanfics soon :-) #i actually really like them and appreciate getting back into English prose bc im rusty af #I write English like its Spanish lmfao bc Spanish enjoys long sentences #Modern English prose Does Not #I wanna do Spanish short stories but im way better at screenplays for some reason. #Ive written several but no actual original short story in my existence which im Ashamed about but never #Been able to fix #Anyways rambling :-) #Also Piñera is weird and pulpy and i guess thats why i love La isla en peso so much

[lordsardine]

.

#there's still really 8 chapters left of my story huh? #and we're already at 93k at 13 chapters huh? #.........huh. #miscellaneous #awh is 118k #dfu is 160k (tho it was originally 210k when i first finished) #i feel like it Needs to be shorter than 160k but i guess we'll see #editing is always easier #hm #well i finished chapter 12! so feeling really good about that #want to start chapter 13 but also need to write a few pages of my screenplay #i'll relocate to a cafe for that. then pick up ingredients for dinner #woooo

[reiniesainyo]

IN BETWEEN. charlie bushnell x reader – 03

03 | ENCHANTED previous | next | masterfile

SYNPOSIS. when a girl's co-star is good to her and now she wants it more than everything in between. (smau)

A/N. i'm going through a rough / stressful period and i find this series and writing it very therapeutic so here we are! this chapter takes place around episode 7 release, i'm not really inclined to write about the filming in between for some reason (unless you'd be interested)

liked by walker.scobell, thelnarchives, and 262,287 others rickriordan With the release of the new PJO series on Disney+, I'm happy to announce that to celebrate I've partnered with some of your favorite authors and close friends of mine to present to you all a new look into the lives of our favorite demigods!

WHAT IT MEANS TO BE A HALF-BLOOD will go online for free this February 20, 2024!

Click the link in bio for more info! PS: A sneak peak from our writers on the other slides

thelnarchive ... WHAT THE??? i have to manifest a chapter for my girl, manifesting a chapter or more please or even just one mention ↳ iamcharliebushnell YOU DIDN'T KNOW EITHER?????

user1 HOLY SHIT HOLY SHIT????

user2 1) more stories about characters and 2) WRITTEN BY OTHER AUTHORS???? WHO COULD BE IN THIS PROJECT ↳ user3 i'm manifesting a story about tahlia and jason as kids oh my god

iamcharliebushnell imagine releasing a whole anthology to celebrate? that's the best author right there

user4 ohhh we're eating so good

walker.scobell another book and there's still not enough percy jackson in this world keep it coming i love your work ↳ aryansimhadri Imo too much percy maybe some more grover ↳ leahsavajeffries wrong there should be more annabeth

dior.n.goodjohn the gc going wild with this news

🃏 @CHILDOFHECATE what are your guys guesses for the stories in what it means to be a half-blood??? 🗨 32 comments 🔁 150 retweets ❤️ 456 likes

user1 a jason and tahlia story about them as kids, just a delve into their childhood

user2 more stuff on luke and rina, as individuals and as a couples- like i totally see a luke perspective on some situations or a conversation they had being in the book ↳ CHILDOFHECATE honestly i think it'd be so cool if they went like contemporary and also gave us maybe a poem or transcript / screenplay of a conversation between luke and rina

user3 stories about annabeth, tahlia, and luke's time before camp maybe fighting monsters together or just trying to survive ↳ user4 watch me cry over this one

user5 i just see a lot of delving into the lives of the original trio and also like the original supporting characters to like tahlia, luke, rina, even rachel

user6 grover's childhood! i really wanna see that or some parts of the story from his perspective

user7 Angst.

liked by iamcharliebushnell, aryansimhadri, and 320,372 others thelnarchives celebrating with the half-bloods

iamcharliebushnell when you're so excited over new lore you go and have dinner to talk about it ↳ thelnarchives this means so much to us

user1 YN IN THE SECOND SLIDE OH SHE'S GOREGOUS

user2 her face card never declines ↳ user3 it even has like benefits and a perfect credit score

dior.n.goodjohn fans first cast second ↳ thelnarchives this show has more more dressed up than my wedding

user4 this cast is so cute it's crazy

walker.scobell the 3rd pic >>> ↳ iamcharliebushnell oh so true ↳ i.am.andrew.alvarez a banger photo ↳ thelnarchives phone hijackers.

user5 the little black dress is doing so good for her, if i saw her in public i would've fainted ↳ user6 i can't believe i live in the same city as this girl like we breathe the same air???

leahsavajeffries i'm sat for the release, we're sat ↳ thelnarchives this is MY superbowl

aryansimhadri i feel excluded out of the 3rd photo ↳ thelnarchives that's okay because you're one of the girls ↳ iamcharliebushnell wait that's not fair

user7 aryan being part of the girls is so real and charlie wanting in is so cute

#luke castellan imagines #luke castellan x reader #percy jackson imagines #percy jackson and the olympians imagines #percy jackson #percy jackson and the olympians #percy series #pjo #pjo series #pjotv #heroes of olympus #luke castellan #charlie bushnell x reader #charlie bushnell #charlie bushnell imagines #smau #pjo smau #pjo tv show #percy jackson tv show #percy jackon and the olympians #percy jackson smau #pjo au

[lizardsfromspace]

Watching people go dramatically "Glass Onion is in ADAPTED screenplay? What is it ADAPTED from???" but like. It's a sequel. Under the rules it's adapted from Knives Out

People act like this is some arcane rule but if you look in the credits of original sequels you'll see "Based on Characters created by...". In this case Benoit Blanc. It's silly when it's the same writer writing the same characters but I guess it makes sense if it's new screenwriters being handed characters created by someone else since they are adapting those past writer's work

#oscars #film #movies

[david-talks-sw]

BONUS stuff from the AOTC screenplay...

1. Yoda probing the Dark Side.

In an earlier draft of the Attack of the Clones screenplay, Scene 51 (which I've already talked about here) ends with this comment by Mace, where he explains what Yoda is doing up in his quarters, followed up by Scene 52, showing Yoda meditating:

And it turns out, this is actually a mini plot point in this draft!

Since Qui-Gon's death, the Jedi are actually on the lookout for the remaining Sith Lord, waiting to sense even a trace of him... but then this happens.

And, like, nobody saw it coming! What the hell!

So that leads to this other cut scene (originally set right after Obi-Wan tells Anakin that Padmé "was happy to see us"), Scene 12, which features an evening conversation between Mace Windu and Yoda.

When Yoda says "the dark side of the Force clouds everything", that's not just an expression to say 'he doesn't know'.

The Dark Side has tainted everything around the Jedi, and THAT'S why the Sith have an advantage. Because they're used to it. They were 'born in the dark, molded by it'.

As a result... in this situation, they're the only ones who can foresee the possibilities of the future, while the Jedi are pretty much walking blind, in a fog.

It's not just that the Sith Lord is a master politician and the Jedi are politically inept. It's that, right now, he's the only one who can truly see the future and roll with it, while the only thing the Jedi can do is go forward, have their guard up and hope for the best.

Which a concept explored in the non-canon comic Sithisis from Star Wars: Visionaries (which, if I recall, was created by Derek Thompson after his regular interactions with George Lucas and a 45-minute interview with Ian McDiarmid)!

2. "Sifo-Dyas", aka Sidious

Okay, so some of y'all probably already knew this tidbit. I did, but didn't know it was in this draft of the script so it was a fun surprise:

Sifo-Dyas was originally a pseudonym used by Darth Sidious.

Throughout the script, his name is spelled "Sido-Dyas" (which sounds a lot more like "Sidious").

And when it comes to the mysterious Sido-Dyas, the Jedi talk about him like they've never heard of him before and full-on say he's an imposter.

At some point, there ended up being a typo in the scene where Obi-Wan talks to Lama Su, and the word was mispelled "Sifo-Dyas" and eventually Lucas decided to make him a different character.

Also the Tyranus who hired Jango Fett is referred to as "Darth Tyranus", in this draft, which I guess was changed because it was gonna be to obvious.

But it does indicate that after TPM, they concluded that Darth Maul was the Master, not the Apprentice.

3. Are Yoda and Padmé friends...?

Okay so there's this moment here:

Yoda taps Padmé with his cane!

Thus CONFIRMING that poking/tapping/hitting people with his cane is Yoda's love language!

Seconds later, there's also this line where Yoda tells Padmé to reign the selflessness and politics back and accept their help:

First off, I'm just picturing Padmé just casually kneeling so she can be at Yoda-height and I'm dying!

But also, like... he calls her "Padmé". They're on a first-name basis!

To me, that's gotta be an implication that in the 10 years between TPM and AOTC... I dunno, Padmé visited the Temple while Anakin was off-planet or just met Yoda at a meeting, and now they've formed a bond and they're pals.

If that's the case, then their Ilum mission in Clone Wars (2003) takes a whole new aspect.

And if we're rolling with this idea... how much of Padmé did Yoda see in Luke?? None? Some?

I think it's a case of when Luke is screwing up royally "he's just like Anakin ffs" and then the few times he's actually listening "nice to see you inherited some of your mother's sense!"

Bear in mind, these bits of dialog never made it on the screen but they did make it to the "final" version of the screenplay published in The Art of Attack of the Clones. So if I had to guess the reason for deletion, it was probably for pacing purposes.

Bonus:

Yoda introducing the younglings in his care is such an adorable thing.

Just in general, this scene is great. George Lucas had this to say in the AOTC commentary track:

"This is a chance for me to play with that more mischievous side of his character and get away from the 'official, serious Yoda' that ends up [...] on the Jedi Council, where he really isn't allowed to be as fun and tease people. In this environment with the kids, he's able to lighten up a little bit, which I really wanted to do for his character. It's much more what his character is in the other movies, especially in Empire Strikes Back."

But also... like Yoda is hyping up the younglings! Is that a thing?

Did Dooku & Yoda have competitions and introduce their respective clans like hype men? I'm picturing a scene where Yoda's like:

Yoda: "To a competition, the mighty Bear Clan challenges the Thranta Clan!" Bear Clan younglings: "GROOAAAAH!"

And Dooku is like:

Dooku: "The gallant Thranta Clan is ready to clean the floors with the Bear Clan whenever you want!" Thranta Clan younglings: *POSE MAJESTICALLY*

Glorious...

#I may have had a bit too much fun with this post #star wars #attack of the clones #aotc #yoda #dooku #sifo-dyas #sidious #padmé amidala #padmé #mace windu #george lucas #jonathan hales #script analysis #bts tidbits #long post

[81scorp]

Constructive criticism: Raya and Wish (2023)

Ah yes, Raya and the last Dragon and Wish... and a bonus

Raya and the last Dragon

Taking place in the fictional country of Kumandra, based on Southeast Asian culture, the movie follows the warrior princess Raya as she seek the fabled last dragon to save her father and the land of Kumandra from evil spirits that are known as Druun.

Critics gave the film positive reviews; some critics praised the imagery and depth but criticized the limited Southeast Asian representation.

The movie is very good on a technical level, Visually impressive, fun characters and the story is good... until the third act.

It`s message doesn`t really fit into it`s narrative. It tries to fit a square shaped peg into a round hole.

If I could wish upon a star that I could travel back in time and do some changes to the script I would like to make one small change.

Namaari giving her "This is just as much your fault" speech and Raya acting as if she`s right

The biggest downside in this scene is Raya`s reaction to what Namaari says, looking at her own reflection in her sword as if to say: "My god, what have I become?"

How I would do it: Raya and Namaari fight. Raya gets the upperhand, disarms Namaari and is about to strike the final blow... but then she looks at what`s happening around them, the city is falling apart, killing Namaari is not gonna solve this. She drops her sword.

Raya: "My original plan was to steal the gem. It was Sisu who convinced me to talk to you. She believed in you. And for a moment... so did I."

Then she leaves to save what still can be saved of the people of Fang.

Namaari looks at her own reflection in one of her twin swords and has a "My god, what have I become?" moment.

I guess I could stop here, but I want to change one more scene.

Raya giving her gem piece to Namaari

In the scene where they are all in the pit trying to fight the druuns with their gem pieces and Raya realizes that they have to put the pieces together, it would be better if Namaari gave her piece to Raya before she gives her piece to Namaari.

Namaari would then step backwards and let the Druun take her. The others would then give their pieces to Raya, stand next to Namaari and be turned to stone. Raya tries to put the gem back together, nothing happens, she places herself between Namaari and the others (Tong, Boun, Little Noi and the Ongis), puts a hand on Tong`s arm and a hand on Namaari`s shoulder as if to form a bridge between the two. (Symbolism!)

Then the dragongem starts working, everyone gets unstoned, the dragons return, Kumandra is united and everyone`s happy.

The end.

Yes, I know. Raya needed to learn how to trust, but Namaari needed to show that she could be trusted.

Wish (2023)

Disney (the company that owns your childhood) was turning 100 years old and decided to give itself a big pat on the back by making an animated movie that would celebrate it`s legacy.

The film received mixed reviews, with praise directed towards the vocal performances, the animation and references to the wider Disney canon, but criticism levelled at the plotting, songs, and screenplay.

People were disappointed in Wish because it was supposed to be a milestone, the movie made to celebrate that the Disney animation studio has been around for 100 years! It just couldn`t live up to the hype. But if you take all the hype and great expectations out of the equation and just view it, not as this BIG thing it was intended to be, but just, as the movie it is, it`s... just OK.

Later when the art book of the movie came out and people saw what could have been, many youtubers decided to do what I have been doing since 2015, and do a little constructive criticism of their own. With so many rewrites of Wish popping up on the internet and my history of playing script doctor, it only seems logical that I too throw my hat in the ring and submit my own Wish rewrite.

So... if I had a fairy godmother who could Bibbidi-Bobbidi-Boo me back in time to when this movie was written, this is what I would change.

People willingly giving their wishes to Magnifico

It would have been better if Magnifico took peoples wishes from them without their knowledge. It would have made him a better villain. He could take peoples wishes when they are asleep.

Asha

I`d dial down her quirkiness a little. Personalitywise she could be an ambitious overachiever, kinda like Hermoine, with an adorkable side.

Valentino

Does everything he says have to be something comical? I like jokes but not all of them landed. It was like his funniness was mandated. Dial down the number of jokes.

Some of the songs

It`s not that the songs are bad per se, some of them just don`t fit into the scenes where they are used, like "At all cost".

They should either have :

A: Given Julia Michaels more time and let her be more involved in the production. (Howard Ashman was very involved in the making of The Little Mermaid.)

or

B: Hired people experienced in musicals. Maybe the people who wrote the songs for Wicked, Hadestown or Hazbin Hotel?

Magnifico needing a book to be evil

The biggest problem this movie has is that it couldn`t decide if Magnifico should be a redeemable, three dimensional antagonist or a classic Disney Villain, so it did both and the results were underwhelming.

I would have made him a twist villain, but instead of waiting for the third act I would reveal it near the end of the first. He would be a charismatic leader, great at fooling people that he has their best interests at heart, who`s paranoia gets the better of him.

To Starboy or not to Starboy, that is the question.

At first I wasn`t gonna bother with the whole Starboy thing since it`s not really an issue. The movie`s biggest problem lies in how they wrote King Magnifico. However, a while ago I saw a video on youtube by ColeyDoesThings who talked about what the movie could have been if they had gone the Starboy route, and she made some compelling arguments. So for this rewrite I`ve decided to go with the Starboy idea.

Starboy`s personality could be a lot like Aladdin, a little bit like Peter Pan with a pinch of Flynn Rider. A bit of a contrast to Asha. I did not change change Star becase I thought it was necessary, but because I thought it sounded interesting.

I would also make Hal and Bazeema gay and have them kiss eachother in the end.

Plot

Asha prepares to interview for the job of Magnifico's apprentice on the day of her grandfather Sabino's 100th birthday.

When Asha is around, her mother and Saba put on a happy face for her, when she leaves they become a bit apathetic. This is something that many people in Rosas over the age of 18 (who have had their wishes taken) do.

She leads tourists through the town as she sings about what an amazing place it is and what an awesome king they have in "Welcome to Rosas". She rehearses for her job interview with her friends,

There are three wishes that the king refuses to grant:

Wishes about killing people.

Wishes about making someone fall in in love with someone else.

Wishes about bringing people back from the dead.

If you wish to become a magician you`ll have to become the king`s apprentice (and you don`t have to be 18.)

Queen Amaya shows up and takes her to Magnifico. At first it goes a little shaky because she`s nervous but then it goes well and Magnifico thinks she is worthy to be his apprentice.

They sing a duet, but not "At all cost". It is a song about optimism and ambition, about what a great student/mentor team they`ll make. The chorus could go:

Magnifico: "With you as my student!"

Asha: "With you as my guide!"

Both: "Great things will happen with you by my side!"

Something like that.

The interview is over and Asha leaves Magnifico`s study.

She is excited. She gets to work with the king! The most awesome king in the world! She does a dorky little victory dance. Valentino shows up, he snuck into the castle with her. Asha starts chasing him, she doesn`t want him to break something expensive, she really wants this job!

Valentino sneaks in through a door to a big (and probably forbidden) room and knocks down an ancient scroll. Asha picks up the scroll to put it back where it was, then she notices the title: How to remove someone`s wish.

Remove? The king grants wishes, he doesn`t take them!

She tries to convince herself not to read it, it`s not meant for her eyes, it`s classified, but her curiosity gets the better of her. She reads in the scroll that the spell should not be used on people under the age of 18. The individual who has had their wish removed becomes docile and free of aspirations, and in some rare cases, even lethargic (just like Simon). They will feel like something is missing from their life but are not able to put their finger on what.

She refuses to believe this. This can`t be true! Magnifico wouldn`t do something like this! He`s a good king!... Right? There are magical orbs of light floating in the ceiling, she takes a ladder and climbs up so that she can get a better look at them. One of the orbs shows a woman that wishes she could fly, another a woman who wishes to sail the seas, another a man who wishes to climb a muntain, and one of the orbs shows... her Saba! It is true, the king takes peoples wishes from them!

She climbs down, puts the scroll back and leaves the room quietly with Valentino under her arm.

She`s about to leave the castle through the main gate when Magnifico shows up. He tells her that there will be a wish-granting ceremony later that evening and he wants her to be present. Asha is nervous, but not a "OMG! I`m meeting my hero!" kind of nervous, but a "Hope he doesn`t figure out that I went into a forbidden room and saw things I shouldn`t have seen" kind of nervous. He seems not to notice, but at soon as Asha leaves the room we see that he did.

Later that evening there`s a wish-granting ceremony, a woman gets her wish granted, the people cheer for Magnifico and Asha sits there next to the queen, stiff and nervous.

Later that night: Asha tries to tell her family the truth about Magnifico, but they don`t believe her. Distraught, Asha runs away and makes her own wish on a star as she sings "This wish". (Not a bad song, but it could have used better lyrics in some places.)

Starboy appears and surprises Asha who smacks him with a branch. (Meet-cute!)

Magnifico senses Starboy's arrival and sees it as a threat to his power.

Starboy doesn`t really grant wishes per se. He`s only as helpful as giving the means, but it’s up to the wishmaker to put the work in order to have their wish fulfilled.

Starboy's magic brings the forest to life, giving voices to the animals, plants and Valentino. They sing "I`m a star", but with better lyrics. (No "we're all shareholders" or "Get that through your system. Solar!") Asha, Valentino, and Starboy embark on a mission to recover Sabino's wish. She wants to save all the wishes, but if she can only save one she`ll have to focus on Sabino`s.

Tension rises in Rosas, Magnifico makes a public appearence and promises a great reward for any information relating to the strange light phenomenon. This makes Simon react. The residents of Rosas begin questioning his rule for the first time. Magnifico gets uncomfortable, leaves and sings "This is the thanks I get" (But sinister, not upbeat, and no "I let you live here fo free and I don't even charge you rent").

Asha returns Sabino's wish and he is overjoyed to have his memories back and sings "A wish worth making", playing his lute. King Magnifico bursts into the family's home, having been informed by a mole that Asha was responsible for Starboy's arrival. He crushes her mother Sakina's wish as punishment, rendering her overcome with grief. Starboy tries to defend her and is spotted by Magnifico, who vows to capture him. Asha and her family flee with Starboy. Sakina can barely stand after what Magnifico did to her wish, so Starboy uses his magic to give her the strength to walk. Sabino and Sakima hide somewhere safe while Asha goes back to Rosas to free the other wishes.

Magnifico turns Simon into a knight, not in a public wish-granting ceremony though, but in his study.

Later, a brainwashed Simon is walking the streets with the company of other knights, searching for Asha and the rest of her friends. Asha sees him and looks for a place to hide. She finds her friends` hideout, not because of Valentino`s butt, but because of his sense of smell. She rallies the rest of her friends, Queen Amaya shows up and joins them.

Asha and her friends start making a plan.

Meanwhile: King Magnifico has made a staff, Amaya shows up and tells him what Asha and her friends are planning.

Gasp! Queen Amaya is a villain! (Dun dun dunn!)

She and Magnifico sing an evil duet villain song which is kinda similar to "With you by my side".

Asha`s friends infiltrate Magnifico's study to open up the ceiling and free the wishes while Asha plans to distract Magnifico. She and Starboy hides in the woods, she is nervous, Starboy tries to comfort her, so they talk a little. The talking leads to feelings being revealed which leads to singing. They sing "At all costs" and dance a romantic dance, first on the surface of a lake, then high up in the sky. (Thanks to Starboy`s magic.) Starboy gives Asha a magic wand to use as he leaves to help her friends, he then notices that he is getting weaker. Magnifico arrives, he and Asha fights. Magnifico turns out to be Simon disguised with an illusion and he breaks Asha`s wand, Asha finds a way to knock him out using the environment to her advantage.

Her friends almost free the wishes but are betrayed by Queen Amaya. Starboy tries to stop her but she pulls out a dagger and threatens to kill one of Asha`s friends, Magnifico shows up and zaps him with magical chains that he can`t break free from.

Asha returns to the city, is caught by Magnifico, finds Starboy in magical chains and finds out that Queen Amaya was just a mole. Magnifico darkens the sky with clouds so that the people won`t be able to wish on stars.

Asha (to Magnifico): "I believed in you! I thought you were a good king!"

Magnifico: "I`m not a good king. I`m a GREAT king!"

All hope seems lost, Asha starts to sing the reprise to "This wish", her friends and the people of Rosas join her and their singing makes Starboy strong enough to break free from his chains. The breaking of the chains creates a shockwave that knocks Asha, Amaya and Magnifico off the tower. Starboy, still weakened, only has enough strength to save one of them, so he saves Asha.

With Magnifico defeated, his spell powers down as a new day dawns over the kingdom, with the citizens, Asha's mother included, are able to get their wishes back, afterwards, Asha is soon confronted by a regretful Simon, who understands if she doesn`t want to forgive him, but she does as she understands why he did it.

Starboy keeps getting weaker and has to go back, he gives Asha a new wand and the two of them say good bye. She wonders if she`ll ever see him again, he tells her that he`ll be the second star to the right.

With urging from her loved friends, Asha promises to help others earn their wishes as a Fairy Godmother, aiding everyone in making their dreams come true.

Post-credit scene: One year later: Asha is walking to the wishing tree in her fairy godmother outfit. She walks past a grave stone. Sabino is sitting in the tree playing "When you wish upon a star" on his lute. A tear rolls down Asha`s cheek. After Sabino has played the song he disappears as if he was a ghost. We see that the grave stone that Asha walked past earlier was Sabino`s. She wipes away her tear, looks up at the second star to the right, takes out her wand and teleports to some place where she might be needed.

And that`s how I would do it. Not great but hopefully not bad.

I cut "Knowing what I know now" because it was getting a little tight between songs. It would be hard to fit that song, Magnifico and Amaya`s villain song and "At all costs" so close to each other, while still maintaining a good narrative flow.

At first I wasn`t gonna turn Queen Amaya evil because I couldn`t come up with enough evil stuff for her to do (that I could fit into the plot without making it worse). But then I made her a villain because it would make things harder for Asha and her friends, which would make the movie more interesting.

But like I said before, the movie`s biggest problem is not that the Queen wasn`t evil, but that the writers couldn`t pick a lane when deciding if they wanted to make Magnifico a three-dimensional antagonist or a classic Disney Villain.

And now... a Bonus

One more thing about Frozen 2

Turning Kristoff`s Lost in the woods into a cheesy 1980s rock ballad musicvideo

I was gonna have this in my Frozen 2 CC but forgot and didn`t remember until after I published it. Since I don`t wanna go back and edit it I`ll write it here.

This scene is admittedly entertaining and if you don`t care about tone as long as it`s entertaining it`s fine.

But funny songs works better for funny characters and what Kristoff is singing about feels sincere, which clashes with how the song is executed.

The 1980s rock sound: Lose it.

The visuals: Have Kristoff walking around in the woods, seeing things that, to him, looks like Anna: a pile of rocks, a pile of leaves, a cloud in the sky. Stuff like that.

Probably an unpopular opinion.

It is of course very easy for me to write these because I have the luxury of hindsight. And unlike the filmmakers I didn`t have a movie studio full of corporate suits breathing down my neck, focus grouping the movie to death, forcing in unnecessary changes and pressuring me to get it made before a deadline.

Why do I write these?

For several reasons. I`m nitpicky. Sometimes the movies I criticize aren`t bad, I just like my own ideas better. Sometimes the movies I critize are bad. I care about good storytelling and it`s a fun excerize in creativity and script doctoring.

But also because I have a lot of of free time.

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Other movies on my Constructive Criticism list that you can look forward to

Supergirl (1984) Jonah Hex (2010) Dragonball evolution The Spirit (2008) The Dark Knight trilogy

And as usual: English is not my first language, so if my writing doesn`t seem to flow naturally, you know why.

#editorial #constructive criticism #written stuff #disney #raya and the last dragon #disney wish #wish rewrite #wish reimagined #81scorp

[captcutshaw]

So I've been re-reading the Withnail screenplay (don't ask me which number re-read this is) and I thought I'd list some of the things that don't make the film (things that I find really interesting anyway because special interest go brrr). List below the cut with some screenshots (there's a copy of the screenplay for free on Internet Archive if anyone is interested!)

• After they've run away from the "perfumed ponce" guy, Withnail complains Marwood didn't pick up his scarf

• During the phone box scene they were originally going to be cramped into the phone box together because..... it's cold....? Ok gay people

• The fencing scene, which was scrapped in favour of the bull scene. Never forget what they took from us

• It's revealed that Monty did indeed assume he caught them going at it when he walks in on them in the middle of the night. Not sure what he makes of this, seeing as how at this time he's under the impression that Withnail has rejected Marwood...? Does this not apply to sex?? Mr Robinson what does it all mean

• Some scrapped Marwood thoughts whilst they're at Monty's house:

• Before they set off to Penrith they go to get the car fixed but alas they're broke and can't afford it. Doesn't help that Withnail insists they spend the money on (you guessed it) alcohol

• Pretty small detail but during the first Danny scene Marwood is making a cup of tea for himself and Withnail, rather than getting dressed

• Withnail calculated the amount of shit needed to stretch from London to Casablanca?

• They bicker over who gets to have the bread crusts, which is cute but if you asked me I thought everyone agreed the crusts are the worst part? Clearly just goes to show Withnail and Marwood are built different

#withnail and I #withnail & i

[grimmbitty]

Work in progress for my Shazam story. ⚡️

This is a scene towards the start of the story, right after the prologue actually. It’s the scene where Billy’s social worker is trying to explain to him that she’s running out of foster homes for him to go to and is trying to get him to behave.

These are very quick sketches however, I think it’s probably for the best because one of the hardest things for me to learn is how to incorporate storytelling into my art lol. Which is funny because I enjoy both writing and drawing. So yeah,,,,

But anyways,, again not really sure how I want to tell this story? Like at first I was set on a screenplay for sure, but then I was like,,, maybe I should just write it as a fanfic? Because I’ve had nights where I’ve written 8,000 words in one night,,,, but those are rare. But ALSO also I really do enjoy the visual aspects of a comic,,,, but a comic would for sure take me the longest and require the most focus,,,,

I’m still not sure at this point, but I guess I’ll have to decide soon if I want people to eventually be able to enjoy my take on Billy Batson’s origin story,,,,,

Also please excuse any typos it is 1AM for me while I’m working on this LOL

Anyways thank you byeeee~ ✨

#captain marvel #captain marvel dc #fawcett comics #shazam #shazam 2019 #dc comics #billy batson #shazam:cobl #digital art #digital illustration

[bonesandthebees]

Please please PLEASE write more original work if that's what you want to do! Everyone here is here for your writing and not what you write and honestly I'd be so down to read Original Bee Content >:DDDD

-❄️

aww thank you snowflake, that seriously means so much to hear

I think the thing that frustrates me about wanting to write original work is that right now the original work I'm focusing on is the glass rewrite (I'm only a few thousand words in bc I keep second guessing everything I write but I'm trying). but if I do finish that I am fully intending on publishing it, and I don't really know/want to risk anything with the publishing stuff by posting snippets of it online for you guys to see so I can't share it waaaaaa

however I do have an idea for another original thing that I don't really care about publishing? like, the idea itself was meant to be a screenplay, but I'm still very new to screenwriting and don't want to focus a ton of energy on learning that craft rn so I suppose I could write random slice of life type snippets with the characters in prose just to get a feel for them all and post them here if you guys would want... knowing me I probably won't do that but idk just spitballing here. could be fun!

#ask #snowflake anon

[jesuistrestriste]

also i have smth i wanna speculate abt/make predictions abt regarding challengers + the plot hmm

spoilers? idk…

(also i mention a couple nsfw concepts from the trailer super briefly)

i’ll put a lil break in the text below just in case. and im gonna mention smth from the original screenplay (not any major plot points, just some details)

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ok so

i think it was said by luca guadagnino (the director) that he was going to make this film a love triangle where “all sides touch”, which i feel like means that there’s either gonna be some sort of <sexual tension/sexual encounters> or <romantic feelings masked as jealousy> between art and patrick.

in the original, written screenplay, there is none of that. art and patrick are merely rivals (friends to enemies), although i guess it could be read as some minor sexual tension.

either way!!

there’s a scene in the trailer where zendaya’s character tashi is shown like this:

and it’s right after the scenes where art and patrick are shown taking turns kissing her and her neck..

i think w the position of her body, ppl would assume that they r going down on her? but her eyes are looking more upwards/straight ahead, as if she’s watching something.

i have a feeling that tashi gets both guys all riled up and then tells them to kiss each other or smth while she watches. like.. what else would be happening here??

and in the same shot in the trailer, she is shown briefly kinda smugly smiling while she watches whatever is in front of her, which i feel like would make sense for her character bc she likes to feel in control. she wants to know that she’s the one with the power in the dynamic, and she has no problem outwardly showing/expressing it. i feel like it would make sense for tashi to ask the boys to do something like that in front of her, bc it would make sense that her character enjoys seeing just how far two guys would go to get her to like them.. or like, see how far she is capable of pushing these two guys who seem to idolize her. IDK!! i’m just thinking abt this concept.

my brain is rotting and i sound a little insane but whatever.

#i said what i said #no shame #tashi duncan the woman that u are #challengers movie #challengers 2024 #mike faist #josh o'connor

[newsies1992fan]

We have an early version of the Newsies 1992 script, but its not the original. Here's Bob Tzudiker and Noni White speaking about what they originally planned.

Noni recalls that the original script called for Jack Kelly’s love interest to be a fellow “newsie,” a girl named Charlie and at the end of the film they were to go off together on a train bound for Santa Fe, New Mexico. Bob interjects at this point to tell us that the train was cut for budgetary reasons. Noni laughs and says, “They (filmmakers) said you want a train??”

Noni says, “When we originally wrote (the story) with Charlie the girl who was the love interest of Jack she lived in a house of ill repute with her aunt and her aunt did not want her to go into that life and so she was really trying to shield her from it. As soon as we sold it to Disney I said to Bob, guess what Bob, goodbye to the house of prostitution. This was a family film and it was just not going to fly. That was changed to Meta Larkson (a cabaret style singer).”

It is also interesting to note that the original screenplay had the “newsies” hanging out at an African American juke joint, which Disney replaced in the film with a soda fountain.

What soda fountain though? Am I just dumb? I don't remember a soda fountain.

#92sies #jack kelly #newsies 1992 #newsies

[samasmith23]

Kamala Khan's death in Amazing Spider-Man (2022) #26 leaked NOT once... but TWICE in a row!!!

It looks like someone at Marvel RRREEEAAALLLYYY wants this whole publicity stunt of killing off Ms. Marvel (aka, Kamala Khan) to FAIL super hard considering that the pages for tomorrow’s Amazing Spider-Man (2022) #26 have been leaked not once, but twice now! And now we sadly know exactly just how Kamala dies…

Umm… last time I checked, Kamala has a healing factor. Sure it’s nowhere as powerful as Wolverine’s (and it does require Kamala to eat a lot in order to replenish her energy reserves), but unless that sword is powered by some kind of magic bullcrap which completely shuts off her healing factor, this makes zero sense! Kamala literally healed from a bullet wound to the stomach in her opening arc, and even survived having an entire building collapse right on top of her (just barely, but still)!

Also, it feels so random and arbitrary to have Kamala randomly use her shape-shifting powers to pose as a body-double Mary Jane, especially since she’s not utilized them a lot due her opening arc centering around Kamala becoming comfortable in her own skin after previously trying and failing to resemble her idol Carol Danvers (therefore overcoming her personal insecurities and internalized Islamophobia).

Plus, last time I checked Kamala's only since then shape-shifted into a couch, James Rhodes, and a scary cartoon face.

While it does feel somewhat in character for Kamala to risk her life to save someone she barely knows as part of her characterization as a superhero, the actual execution of it feels incredibly at odds with her past character development (whether it be struggling with her fears of death and mortality in Magnificent Ms. Marvel, or already receiving validation from her family, friends, and dozens of other superheroes, including Peter Parker, so why does she need it from him again when she dies?!).

Based on these leaked pages, I get the general impression that Zeb Wells originally fully intended to kill off Mary Jane here since all throughout his Spider-Man run he’s heavily hinted at it and foreshadowed it with that Paul guy (seriously... WHO THE HECK IS PAUL?!) and their two kids (who are apparently actual mystical constructs or something…), and that mystical supervillain wanting “the Scarlet Woman’s blood” (I know the phrase "Scarlet Woman" is specifically meant to refer to MJ’s red hair, but it is also unfortunately a derogatory slang term for a sex-worker). But maybe Marvel editorial told him to rewrite his planned death of Mary Jane at the last minute as a desperate effort to promote the upcoming The Marvels movie (which Wells shares a co-writing credit for the screenplay of), or Wells wanted to subvert reader expectations but did so in a distasteful manner?

I honestly don’t know... but if I had to guess I’d probably say it’s the former option since Marvel previously killed off Doctor Strange and the Scarlet Witch before resurrecting them a few months later to hype up their upcoming MCU films, plus the Spider-Man offices in particular are notorious for their editorial mandates and interfering with writer’s plans at the last minute (just look at how they recently forced Nick Spencer to settle on retconning Sins Past out of existence instead of One More Day like he was originally building-up towards). And do I think that Zeb Wells himself is an Islamophobic misogynist because of this? Probably not... especially considering I don’t know the guy’s personal politics (maybe he's a swell person IRL) and editorial mandates are likely at play here. I do think that killing off Kamala in such a random and distasteful manner is still a bad look and does give off those unfortunate implications. However, based on what I know I feel that this is more a case of judging the actions as bigoted (whether they were intentional or not) instead of labeling the person themselves as a bigot.

But regardless of whether or not the decision to fridge Kamala Khan is the fault of Zeb Wells, or Nick Lowe or someone else over at Marvel Editorial, I do want to make one thing perfectly clear... DO NOT... I repeat... DO NOT SEND ANY OF THEM DEATH THREATS! Like, I've already lost count of how many people I've encountered on both Twitter and Tumblr who are seriously outright calling for both Wells and Lowe's blood in response to these leaks.

And since the issue is being released tommorow, I feel the need to reiterate that harassing creators and sending them death threats is NEVER acceptable under any circumstances, and that doing so makes you no better than the kinds of supervillains that Kamala regularly fights against! We can criticize a bad story WITHOUT becoming supervillains ourselves! Follow the advice of @atopfourthwall here for heavens sake people:

Now this is hopefully going to be the last time I discuss Amazing Spider-Man (2022) #26 here on Tumblr as I have zero plans on giving any actual money to the issue myself. I may consider reading the Fallen Friend: The Death of Ms. Marvel one-shot, if only because it's being written by several of Kamala's past creators G. Willow Wilson, Saladin Ahmed, and Mark Waid, so I trust them to be able to salvage something decent out of this whole fiasco. But that's it. I do plan on releasing a future post which provides an in-depth analysis about the ways in which Ms. Marvel comics have discussed themes of death in a much more nuanced and respectful manner, but I have no idea when it will be released.

Until then folks... vote with your wallets. Please do not cave into the outrage machine and feed into the publicity stunt that this whole mess so obviously is. Don’t give tomorrow's issue of Amazing Spider-Man any more attention than it's already received. Instead go support all of Kamala's past adventures to show your love and appreciation for the character if you do not own the graphic novel collections already. And most importantly... for the love of all that is holy, DO NOT attack the creators involved with this terrible decision and especially DO NOT send them death threats!

#ms marvel #kamala khan #amazing spider man #marvel comics #spider man #peter parker #women in refrigerators #zeb wells #john romita jr #g willow wilson #saladin ahmed #mark waid #nick lowe #editorial mandates #linkara #atop the fourth wall #R.I.P. Kamala Khan #invincible iron man #brian michael bendis #james rhodes #tony stark #muneba khan #nick spencer #the marvels 2023 #mary jane parker #who the hell is paul?! #Youtube

[ihasafandom]

Carnage re-write P1

So I woke up today with Words in my head and instead of assisting with any of my ongoing fics my brain has decided to re-write Venom 2: Let There Be Carnage ://

So I guess we’re doing that. (Originally a quick outline; cleaning it a bit and posting on Feb 6 for @symbruary's Fix-It day)

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The movie had pretty effects and a decent soundtrack and some good action, but what it lacked was the heart and comedy of the first film (and the good good deep Venom voice, why is he so squeaky and annoying now??? (T o T) )

I’m not a comedy-writing person, and I’m not gonna be doing an actual fic or screenplay for this, so I’ll be keeping to the heart part. What gives a piece its heart I thnk are its emotional throughlines. Each character and relationship having their own story where they change from how they are at the start to how they are at the end, and having that story be concretely present and observable as the movie/book goes on.

There were hints of that in Venom2 but a lot of them fell flat, didn’t go anywhere, or didn’t have a satisfying change.

For example: both Eddie and Venom are frustrated with their relationship for X reasons. They fight, they separate, they do things on their own, but when they come back together they haven’t resolved any of the reasons that they broke up in the first place. Everything’s just magically better for no reasons and we are supposed to intuit that they are good for eachother and that they have improved as partners but we never really see that happen. Just a forced capitulation on Eddie’s part and the same traumabonding and extreme circumstances that made them work as a team in the first movie.

Another thing that sucked was how they dumped the uniqueness of certain characters and plots and emotional beats from the first movie to retread the same old tropes from everything else. Dan was unique and widely beloved in my parts of the fandom for not being a jealous jerk. He admired Eddie’s journalistic work, he dropped his dinner to do doctor work without complaint, he trusted Anne, and he didn’t fall into the stupid romcom plots even when Anne brought them up. Focused, intelligent, useful, kind, caring. A breath of fresh air. Entirely unlike how he acted in the second movie.

So let’s fix that.

Situation at the start of the movie:

Eddie is depressed, frustrated, and stressed. He is not used to being the self-control in a relationship, and is trying really hard to keep to his morals. He also needs to make enough money to keep them in food and home. He is lonely; he misses Anne and Maria and people in general since a large part of his solution to Venom is isolating them in their apartment so that they don’t eat people and don’t look crazy in public. He is spending all of his time and energy either trying to do work or keeping Venom entertained, controlled, and fed. He also might need some mood-stabilizing meds, he seemed heckin ADHD and/or autistic in the first movie.

Venom is stressed, bored, and starving. It is not used to not being able to do whatever it wants (bar keeping its head down around other symbiotes higher on the pecking order), it is not used to having to cooperated with a host, it doesn’t understand Eddie’s morals, it doesn’t understand Earth, it doesn’t understand money, it doesn’t understand human relationships and society. It needs higher quality food (mammalian, more variety, more human-specific chemicals since it’s bonded with a human), it needs enrichment, it needs to understand more about what its new situation is.

They both need to communicate and understand eachother and learn to find a balance that will get them both what they need. They also need a support system and an income stream.

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#carnage #let there be carnage #venom #venom let there be carnage #venom: let there be carnage #venom LTBC #V:LTBC #VLTBC #venom movie #carnage movie #venom 2018 #venom (2018) #sony venom #fandom #klyntar #symbiotes #symbruary #fit-it #fix-it #fixit #fix it #rewrite #venom rewrite #writing #meta #meta fic #My Stuff #symbruary day 1