#chapter 5 out of 10

[wishmaker1028]

Farewell to You, ch 5

Back with Yoni, she arrived at the location of where Zapdos was located. It had found its new home in an old power plant. She launched a bunch of floating rocks towards the Electric/Flying type. Zapdos used its Thunderbolt to stop the floating rocks but several surrounded it. The rocks crushed in, hitting the legendary bird rather hard. Zapdos cried out in pain. The rocks kept doing that, even though it was low on power. The rocks then turned into strong, rubber rope. The strong rubber rope surrounded Zapdos and brought it into the airship.

Yoni commented, "Well, that was rather easy. I was expecting more of a fight. Next is Moltres and then Articuno. That should flush out the queen and the rook. And then the king itself."

The computer stated, "Now charting a course for Wela Volcano Park in the Alola Region."

That's when the airship took off.

...

A little further down from the old power plant; Clemont, Serena, and Bonnie were still headed that way. They had heard from locals that the old power plant had come back online a while ago.

Clemont asked the two girls, "You two doing okay?"

Bonnie confirmed, "Yes, doing okay."

Serena frowned, "I wish we knew what we were looking for. I know we're supposed to look for Zapdos but is that it?"

Clemont stated, "Well, if Lawrence did escape from jail, he would be in a huge airship."

Bonnie pointed out, "Wouldn't that be a bit obvious...?"

Before Serena could say anything, they saw an altar up ahead.

She asked, "What is that...?" She walked up to it, seeing the lightning treasure in it. She wondered, "What's that?"

Clemont stated, "Not sure but it is pretty."

Bonnie added, "I was going to say that."

Clemont just chuckled. Serena didn't know what it was but something told her to go ahead and take it out. So that's what she did. She showed it to the siblings and to their shock, the treasure started to glow in their presence.

Serena breathed, "Oh my gosh...it's even prettier."

That's when she put it in her bag.

Clemont blinked, "This is odd, where is Zapdos, if it was here?"

Bonnie stated, "Good question. I think we should call Looker and Anabel."

To that, Serena nodded. She brought out her Pokenav as the three of them started to leave the area. Serena went over to Clemont, nervously. Clemont saw how nervous she was and let Bonnie go ahead.

He asked, "Serena, what is it...?"

She blurted out, "Do you wanna go out with me?"

To that, Clemont turned a beat red. So did Serena. Clemont nodded before she could hesitate further. Serena breathed a sigh of relief, giving Clemont a kiss. Clemont returned it, holding the performer close. Bonnie saw them from afar. She was trying not to squeal too loudly. She thought, 'It's about time, brother. It's about time.'

...

Back in Alola, Gladion had gone off with Lillie, Olivia, Kiawe, Mallow, Lana, and Sophocles to find Moltres. Professor Kukuki, his wife, and his son had gone back to the lab. All of them were noting how strange the weather was becoming. First it was hot then it was hailing and now it was windy. The wind even pushed Lana a bit.

Lana groaned, "This weather is not helping the situation."

Mallow stated, "Got that right but there's not much we can do."

Sophocles added, "Especially since Zapdos is missing."

Kiawe said, "In either event, we're nearing the Wela Volcano Park."

Olivia frowned, "Yeah but no sign of the airship."

Lillie commented, "But there's Moltres."

True to her word, the Fire/Flying type was there. It was sitting near the altar. The legendary bird looked at its visitors, tilting its head to the side.

Gladion said, "Doesn't look like it was expecting us."

Lana blinked, "Doesn't it know about Zapdos?"

Moltres shrieked at her, sounding surprised.

Kiawe answered, "Guess not."

Olivia took a step forward, "Dear Moltres, we've come to warn you. The person that once collected you is coming back."

Moltes shrieked at her in a bit of fear. The legendary bird was afraid of this. The other legendary birds and itself hadn't done a lot of training over the years. Just then, the airship arrived. It looked smaller than the one that was described to them.

Lillie was confused, "That seems...smaller than we were expecting."

Gladion threw a pokeball and out came Silvally. Kiawe did the same, sending out his Alolan Marowak. Olivia brought out her Lycanroc. Sophicles brought out his Togedemaru. Lana brought out her Primarina. Mallow brought out her Tsareena. Lillie was tempted to bring out Snowy but decided against it. She didn't know much about battling anyways.

Gladion was the first to attack, "Silvally, Multi-Attack!"

Silvally launched the attack as the floating rocks came down. It managed to destroy a few but more surrounded it.

Kiawe commanded, "Shadow Ball!"

Alolan Marowak did as it was told. It covered Silvally, to which Gladion was grateful for. Olivia went next as more floating rocks came down.

She commanded, "Stone Edge!"

Lycanroc fired its Stone Edge. It destroyed the floating rocks but there were some starting to surround Moltres. It was using its Flamethrower to get out of danger and its Aerial Ace.

Sophicles commanded, "Pin Missile!"

Lana commanded, "Disarming Voice!"

Mallow commanded, "Trop Kick!"

All three of the attacks destroyed the floating rocks but it wasn't enough. Moltres was being surrounded. The attacks kept coming but it was of no use. The rocks turned into a non burnable rope and surrounded Moltres. It flew back up to the airship. Wasting no time, the airship was out of sight.

Sophicles admitted, "T - that is not good."

Kiawe grumbled, "Anyone wanna call it in...?"

Olivia offered, "I will."

Lillie had gone over to the altar. 'What was Moltres hiding...?' She thought. That's when she saw the treasure. Lillie took it as it started to glow in her and her friends' presence. 'What in the world...?' She thought, putting it in her bag. Everyone called their pokeballs back to their pokeballs.

...

Back at the party, everyone had been informed that both Zapdos and Moltres were taken. But Ash was relieved that Serena and Lillie had the treasures. Though he was a bit curious on how the treasures glowed in the presence of his friends. He thought, 'Maybe they are Chosen Ones too! Or maybe Lugia didn't want me to do this on my own.' Looker had advised the teams to go to Shamouti, just in case.

He finally spoke, "Alright, we need to address the Weavile in the room. We still don't know where Articuno or Lugia is."

Ritchie spoke, "I have a theory. Articuno may have gone to the highest point in the world to hide. Think about it, the higher the altitude, the more snow you'll get. It would be the perfect place to hide."

Duplica winked at him, "Yeah, there's my beau! Always thinking!"

To that, Ritchie blushed. Sparky laughed a bit. Mini Dit did the same, still imitating him.

Misty teased, "Unlike some people."

Ash shot her a look, "Very funny, Mist. Very funny."

Before Pikachu could say anything, his ears perked up. "Pika? Pi pi pi?"

Pikachu turned on its heel as a porthole opened out. That's when Misty's Togetic came out of it.

"Togetic!" It said, happily.

Piplup and Buneary were both curious of the Fairy/Flying type. But Buneary was being more shy.

Dawn asked, "Where did that Togetic come from...?"

Brock started to say, "Could it be...?"

Misty whispered, "Togepi...?"

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Wishmaker1028: This chapter is a bit longer than usual but I wanted to keep going here. Hope you all enjoy! Please read and review! And always think outside of the box!

#fanfiction #pokemonanime #pokeshipping #ashketchum #pikachu #misty waterflower #brockslate #dawn #piplup #pokeshippingweek #pokeshippingweek2023 #chapter 5 out of 10 #farewelltoyou #pokeshipping week 2023

[ruporas]

kiss the pain away

#vashwood #trigun #trigun stampe #vash the stampede #wolfwood #nicholas d wolfwood #ep 10 was crazy bc vashwood was literally the plot goodbye #i like how the most intimate moment between these two was in the goddamn sewers #i feel like that alone symbolizes so much in their relationship. im half joking BUT ITS JUST LIKE #the SPONTANEITY the PRIVACY they get in such an open Space while being literally chased / hunted after.... #and vash is out here showing his scars.............. and ill always lose my mind that they gave this spotlight to wolfwood instead of #meryl and milly like in the previous versions. i dont know how else to read this other than that wolfwood is the romantic interest of stamp #it makes sense even aside from this scene. u know. wolfwood was technically the damsel in distress in ep 5-6 and vash saved/helped him. #and who stayed in the bedroom with vash................. #who rushed to his side when he got shot...... with that worried ass expression.... #i dont have anything smart to say at all im just gushing over vashwood thru stampede bc its just so blatant. and its great that its blatant #bc it was blatant in trimax too. like so blatant. the romance was written in every chapter they showed up together #god #ive never witnessed a pairing more canon without being spoken as such its soooooo much theyre so much #ruporas art

[l0ganberry]

👀👀👀

you will have no idea on how fast I was to jump in on drawing this suggestion.....

I enjoyed it too well....

If I was gonna test on adding sharp teeth to Dogday.... I gotta add broad shoulders right?? That makes sense. But I really did enjoyed this a lot.

Even if I rather prefer him without teeth. With teeth makes him more....... like an actual dog to me. I really like it but I still gotta love the innocent "no teeth" look.

Thank you @shiorimia for this awesome suggestion that quickly drew my attention. I hope you really like my drawings!

For the rest of you, I still haven't forgotten. I'm just taking my time and balancing with the outside world things. Like family, school, etc.

But I am most certainly drawing the rest that are in this >post<

(You may add more suggestions if you like. Just be patient since I'm not usually a fast artist. I realize that.......)

#I'll probably do about 2 suggestions tomorrow to get some out of the way and to be enjoyed #i'm not joking about my sketchbook. #i got my big new one for Christmas and about like 6 (less that 10 but greater than 5) are just of Dogday #i probably need a sketchbook for only JUST Dogday at this point. #There's other things that I draw besides this loving dog but.... I can't help it #It's just..... him!!! #God I wish he was real #Anyways #rambles #artists on tumblr #traditional art #dogday #drawing suggestions #cute #poppy playtime fanart #poppy playtime #dogday poppy playtime #poppy playtime 3 #dogday fanart #poppy playtime chapter 3

[distraughtlesbian]

literally the best part of this whole stupid book iwlove weird obsessed horndogs thee villain archetype of all time. he’s so silly. “we could’ve had a life together”, he says to his lesbian ex-neighbour who he’s just shot with a crossbow bolt meanwhile her girlfriend who he’s also just shot is half dead across the room. god i love it here he said me and the bad bitch im going to fumble

#WHAT A FUCKING FREAK IJBOL!!!!!! #MORE PSYCHOSEXUALLY OBSESSED WEIRDO VILLAINS PIXELBERRY I KNOW YOU HAVE IT IN U. #their villains are usually so cringe and one note at least this one is memorable #mind you this could have used more buildup. up until like chapter 19 he still had the benefit of the doubt #his ass was NOT beating the twist villain allegations but the fucking freak allegations were a whole separate beast #and he could be presumed innocent in those. like sure i guess these are just average fanatic werewolf hunter antics. #like EYE had my suspicions. him sending that frat bro to sexually harass mc was a fucking freak move #but like in general he was coming off as someone who was just a normal amount of concerned about a friend of theirs falling in w a cult #like girl why am i following my cringe fwb into the pool house to be all ‘babe this isnt u :(’ #i dont CARE i wanna go engage with the twist antagonist who at this point my mc still thinks is kind of normal/their friend!!! #but alas that’s just pb for you. we WILL NOT stick a landing ever. they make all the new writers swear to never write a villain that makes #sense or is well foreshadowed. ONLY side characters who you would never suspect bc they have like 5 lines in the whole book. #like you’ll never be duffy veilofsecrets you’ll never recapture that magic. #anyway. markus choicesalpha the fucking weirdo cringefail stalker incel loser you could have been…kermit looking out rainy window dot png #maeve speaks #playchoices #choices #pixelberry #choices alpha #channing lowe #markus barnes #side note this whole thing probably has a Much different vibe with a male mc #but as it is it’s like ijbol. channing is cringe and emotionally unavailable but how could you POSSIBLY compare to a buff werewolf bitch #he is so completely not a contender that its comedic to me. you think WE could have had a LIFE TOGETHER? #even if my mc had never ever met channing SHE IS A LESBIAN!!!! SHES GAY DUDE STOP IT LOL #and with a female mc and male channing its like yeah whatever average incel number 10 billion. wow youre going to kill me bc some other guy #is hotter than you? eyeroll. at least channing canonically gives great head.

[tatersdoesstuff]

havent been arting in a while but inspiration struck when i reread read At Your Service by @snailberries and nightaspira :] the visual was so good i had to draw it

#critical role #fcg #frida #taters does art #loveletters #gang this fic is so ding dang good #go read it #banger au #dress may not be the most accurate but i had a blast interpreting it #i was also kneedeep in art block??? #yet when i read chapter 5 the ideas just slammed me #so shoutout to you guys for getting me out of art block????? #fun ass piece 100/10 would do again

[imwritesometimes]

in one week it will officially be one year since I finished a fic edited it & posted it hahaha 😵‍💫😖😞😑

#and like. it kills me that. I had this whole fckn idea for a 5+1 recently for one of my north star ships #and I got the notes all done and had the ideas and even dialogue snippets and could see the scenes #but I just. could never make myself get farther than the notes. ever. I couldn't ever get to actually writing it. at all. ever. #and now I've been sick & bedridden for a literal week and I still haven't done ANYTHING with it #before I would have worked on it! I would have worked non stop! I literally cannot be out of bed for longer than 15 minutes #I would have written another 10 chapter idiots to lovers with a whole intricate plot to weave a romance around #that no one asked for #but now #nothing. #to be fair to myself tho I have been so sick I couldn't even activate my new giga pet #I had to quit playing sims cause I got so sick I couldn't go to my desk. the show I was looking forward to debuted and I can't watch it #cause I'm just fuckin dead. wanted to get the new t0mb raider re-release but I'm so sick I couldn't play it #but it's killing me that I can't make myself write. it is like. why won't you do this? you LIKE this? this was once ur fave hobby! #and I'm just also very tired of being confined to bed for a week and I'm going a little nutty can you tell??? #erin explains it all

[laurzzz]

I'm slowly re-learning how to write longer chapters again and I think Chapter 3 for MO might go over 10k like the 2nd one lol

#talks talks talks #majestic oppositions #anyone remember when my ambitious ass was like.. 'hm yes. i'll write 30k per chapter since i'm only planning 5 chapters' #this is why i got burnt out by the time i reached chapter 3 /lh #ack its 10 pm! i must sleep now #need to get up real early tomorrow #i'll answer the new asks as soon as i have time again!

[pokemonruby]

playing ff rebirth and getting intense whiplash every time sephiroth appears or is mentioned because i genuinely forget he's a part of the storyline at times, he feels like he has transcended what it means to be a fictional character and exists more so like an abstract concept.

#just having a fun time helping chadley with his world intel and petting baby chocobos and then rufus asks me to assassinate sephiroth and #i'm like Oh yeah. that's the guy we're chasing. sephiroth. The burger king foot lettuce guy #riley rambles #he is my favorite final fantasy character but i also forget that he is in fact a final fantasy character. #in other news i am trying ever so hard to comprehend queen's blood but i had to tap out of the tournament because i am Stupid. #and i did not want to be held up on this ship for 10+ hours getting my ass beat over and over again because #dumb 23 year old does not understand deck-building #but red deserved that win. he really did. #i am also 24 hours into this game & still on chapter 5 so needless to say i am enjoying myself immensely.

[dallonwrites]

the first chapter of lover boy is really intense on an emotional level because So Many Things happen in quick succession it's like beau barely gets a chance to breathe and process it. meanwhile RR opening chapter is just felix and dorothy arguing in a laundromat.

#i used to have a problem with the lover boy first chapter bc i was like #i know what needs to happen thematically and i know the main plot beat that needs to happen to push it forward #but i didnt have any actual like. action to move to story to that place #in a way that had a causal chain #and now im like um!!!! is too much happening #anyway my other writing problem i realised via this chapter is i worry sooo much about the idea of coincidences #like the idea of just 'letting' something happen...in lb mainly two characters being in the same place at the same time #im like there has to be an intricate explanation for all of this which like yeah thats good to think about #but i also think coincidences are an important part of plot bc first of all coincidences happen #but its also not just the coincidence its the decisions the character s made that got them to that time and place #why they made those decisions and what they do afterwards etc.... #anyway! i dont know where i was going with that #RR chapter one.....ngl....its SOOO bad lol #like structurally. the prose is fine #but its been 3 years and 5 different opening scenes for that novel and NONE of them hit #but that's a problem for future me #the thing is most of my ideas now come with an opening but RR never came with an opening just the concept #because the rest of the novel slayyyyys #actually i think out of all 3 my favourite atm is the third book LOL #update literally 10 minutes after writing these tags i have an idea for a new RR opening team that i want to sink my teeth into #6th time's a charm!

[apollosgiftofprophecy]

ever watch a movie that changes your brain chemistry so much you are now determined to get those brain-chemistry-changing chemicals into your fic?

that's me with the ballad of songbirds and snakes and my hunger games au.

i need a lucy gray to haunt the narrative. i need the parallels between snow&lucy and katniss&peeta. I need a tigris to watch how snow falls.

I need a ghost to haunt the narrative.

I need the parallels of love.

I need a sister heartbroken over the fate of her brother.

And I have the perfect options in mind.

Ghost? Check.

Parallels? Platonic, but check.

Sister? Double check :)

This is why I outlined this fic before writing it so if something game changing came to mind I can easily fix it >:)

And oh boy. TBOSAS was a game changer.

so excited >:)

#hunger games au #the odds are never in our favor #my fics #ALDER BE COOKING #ofc my hyacinthus fic hasn't been neglected btw! #it's about halfway done. 5/10 chapters (currently writing 5th chapter!) #got to see tbosas in theaters today so i'm back on my hunger games brainrot #and IDEAS came to me #ohohohohoho do i have IDEAS #writing third chapter of hg au atm #vibrating #i nEED to read the book now but I DON'T HAVE IT WHAAAAA #and my library HAS IT CHECKED OUT WAAAAAAAAA #everytime i go in there IT'S GONE #BAAAAAAAAAAAAA #agonizing #pure agony

[dinosaur-mayonnaise]

ok but can we talk about what a wildly different experience it was reading the manga from watching the anime?

with the manga we were waiting months to find out who was alive and who was dead which is tense and nerve racking in its own way but the anime? everything on top of each other, flipping back and forth from scene to scene, flashing lights of one order, rapid music, the sound of a ticking clock getting louder and more disorientating - all to come together in the bang of chuuya's gun and suddenly go quiet?

yeah. i think bones deserves a standing ovation.

#don't get me wrong the manga is amazing #and i totally get why it takes a month for every chapter to come out #but the anime was INTENSE #this last episode especially #it was SO intense #bsd #bsd season 5 episode 10 spoilers

[syrupyyyart]

So many good asks for AskMotley that I have long answers for. It's getting to the point that it's just a second place to post full comic strips lol

#i have like 5 asks scripted out that are just mini contained chapters at this point smh #i should have opened motley askblog a long time ago. this is a 10/10 way to talk about ocs honestly #not art

[asummersday]

on a scale of 1 to 10 how bad of an idea would it be to try to write and post chapter 6 by the time i move out of dorms (next week)

#im currently putting my stuff away and getting ready to move out #its a small dorm so i dont reeeealllly have much to pack honestly #thank god tbh im already stressed enough as it is #i have a 5 hour train ride to get to the airport and THEN a 10 hour flight home #so if hypothetically i could get it done on the train... #idk if chapter 6 will be very long. idk now big mama's in the plot so i'll have to focus on her at some point #why oh why do i keep deviating from my outline #all i know abt chapter 6 is how its gonna end bc it leads right into the angsty bit of chapter 7 >:) #so honestly. it's up to the writing gods whether or not this turns out to be a small chapter or a bit more plot-heavy #summer post #ataimw

[ach-sss-no]

no fear

one fear

i looked at the patch notes. there's some attempt at optmization clasps hands together I am very much anticipating going in and finding out if anything works better and if anything new and hilarious is broken

and there is such a big long list of bug fixes for drastic game-breaking bugs that i mostly never encountered after 2.5 playthroughs. i'm starting to think i have just had exceptional luck when playing this game

a selection of my favorites (the ones that sound funniest out of context)

Fixed a conditional blocker that caused Gollum to die if restarting during the beetle conflict. Increased the chase radius for the “Cruel Woman” chase to prevent save games where the player cannot keep up anymore. (never got this one but I came close oof) Fixed cog wheels spinning in random directions. Fixed nervous hands achievement behavior. Fixed a Game Over screen in the tutorial when restarting from the main menu during the chase sequence. Fixed a softlock in Shadow Mountains when jumping off a cliff during a checkpoint. Halls of Grond & Execution chambers - fixed and adjusted rotating wheels. Gollum Groom is now covered correctly by translucency while still respecting DOF and refraction. (his what) (Is this a mistranslation) (EDIT: I have had it pointed out that 'groom' is the word for rendered hair/fur so this is referring to Gollum's hair rendering! I did not see any markedly horrible issues with the hair outside of this one cutscene where it is briefly, obviously on the wrong layer or something but I also don't have all the visual effects enabled. I find it interesting that these notes are using so many 'untranslated' terms like 'groom' and also what are obviously the level names used by the team and not by the finished game. I am starting to think they don't have a PR person) Fixed possibility to end the Sewers without killing both orcs. (does this mean there's now a pacifist route or are you supposed to be required to kill the orcs & people were managing not to???? I didn't test this bc i just always murder every killable orc 😅 ) Solved the issue of no sound in the cutscene of Cook's death. (lmao i saw this but I just thought it was supposed to be like that/they didn't have any budget left to record a death noise) Fixed German conflict menu choice being displayed as French. Fixed blocked progress after the throttle tutorial when restarting from a checkpoint. Fixed Gollum floating at the beginning for Chapter 2. (?!?!) Fixed a softlock in Outer Gardens where Gollum would be detected immediately after spawning. (Aaahh. This I did encounter on 2nd playthrough and I don't remember how I got out of it. I think I restarted the level which was not a huge deal because the checkpoint was close to the start of the level) Fix for wall running not always triggering correctly. (This I probably did encounter and just thought I was hitting the wall at the wrong angle, because I frequently do just botch this) Riverpath fixed invisible 2 elves’ issue at the end of the level. (I DID GET THIS ONE ONCE and it was so funny, I think I have capture footage of it, I hope I do) Fixed fluctuating groom (?!?!?!!) when the game is paused. Adjusted the wrong Grashneg scale in Sewers. (don't think i ever saw this, am picturing Giant Grashneg) Fixed infinite Game Over screen in Construction Low when sweeping through a specific checkpoint. (definitely did not get this one. I would remember that.)

#blob plays gollum game #infinite game over #Had so many difficulties posting this and making simple text edits #I would tentatively say that Tumblr might in fact work worse than this game #LIke it's special kind of text editor where I hit ctrl+x and nothing happens and i don't know why not #I still have to record chapters 5 through 10 for LP #but i'm past the borked ileth chase they mentioned and will Not be checking it out again #i still have some parts of the game that were updated to get through! such as sewers #and i think i might have capture footage of my last playthrough to compare grashneg scale. i hope so #*checks* yes i have it!!!! that's where i started recording last time #wheeeeeee

[vermillioncrown]

Fuck you and your writing. What the hell. How tbe fuck did you make a tasteful brothel scene, how the hell did you manage to do all this shit. This chapter was fuckin heart wrenching. I wanted to see WWX get fucked up and then he did and it wasn't satisfying, but it was good writing and i liked it regardless. God. How the hell did you do this shit. What the fuck.

:^) thank you, i hit my target :^) :^)

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because i really, really cared about getting the exact flavor of this chapter right, so much so that it took over a year.

the brothel scene is so important in what it means in the fic, which is more than showing that zyx fucked. or that zyx fucked a girl for real. or to do some questioning of sexuality.

(which i think i had to go through the five stages of grief when someone excitedly talked about it like having sex means someone is no longer aspec like... every day i am confronted by the fact we all coexist with vastly different perspectives on reality, and these realities are all true to some extent, sigh)

it's also not about being edgy and buying hookers, getting drunk, and all that.

so without using prostitution, nightlife, and sex as a prop and just being real with it, i hope that it doesn't come off goofy, edgy, or objectifying. the perils of trying to convey complicated feelings without therapy speak in-fic, and being really honest in someone's motivations and reactions (bc, unavoidably, it IS an SI).

the brothel scene and its whole fallout was so important, in fact, that i rewrote the entire order of the chapter. originally, the scenes were supposed to be in chronological order. logical, but it just felt like a boring recounting of events. sure, the events are fresh and we wanna see what zyx-mess happens next, but it's just a bunch of 'and then, and then, and then'. works for interlude chapters (ch8, ch15), but this really isn't one.

seguing, i learned a lot from how i wrote bil. dbd will never be as lean as bil, but it reminded me that when i drafted the fic, i focused on certain developments and ideas for a reason. also, since it's a chapter that doesn't involve too many canon characters, which let's be real that's usually the reason we stick around these kinds of fics, it needed to have purpose and be clear about what feeling it's trying to convey

even at the cost of simplicity in order of events

it would have been so difficult to keep the type of upset that zyx is feeling through a chapter that spans months, develops two interpersonal relationships, has a big oopsie, in chronological order without a too-angsty tone. too many periodic reminders would feel jarring and obtrusive, and exaggerate it. and that's also just not how zyx (i) deal with upsets, thank you adhd

and like, doing that for 10k+. (eternally i thank my readers for their patience and willingness to read so much bc people don't read fanfic for deep analysis and extra hw...) that's too much.

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the second most important scene is the wwx duel, you got it. (i'd lump the lxc duel there, too bc those two are kinda related)

(sometimes i worry i made wwx too annoying. but then i talk myself back--it's always perspective. wwx isn't doing more than he already did in canon. we just have someone who can articulate how they feel about what he does, and he's not the main narrator of dbd.)

we get to a very clear demonstration of zyx as a character--it's more or less "i have no mouth and i must scream". here's your chance to be violent. you know you want it. do it. act out, make yourself heard.

zyx doesn't do it.

and you know what? i will be honest, truly honest here: i am sorry if you can instantly clock why zyx is the way they are, because for real 'recognition of the self in the other'.

lack of satisfaction--when you know what you wanted all along was for something to have never have happened at all, would punishment (displaced punishment) satisfy you? would it fix you? sometimes it helps, just for a moment. but i've answered this question enough times that i know i'd rather have never had to ask that question in the first place.

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tldr: it's because it's a chapter about emotional honesty, and i as the author was really fucking honest and tried my fucking best to convey that.

#inquiry #Anonymous #on dbd #this chapter had so many caveats attached to it #1) make it make sense #2) no therapy speak #3) avoid weird sexuality pitfalls #4) the no man's land of thought->words of bilingualism #5) don't trauma dump tho #6) be fr with yourself like frfr #7) but make sure self-penchant for trivializing and joking about problems doesn't destroy the seriousness of the vibes #8) create and strengthen interpersonal connections within 1-2 scenes #9) figure out pacing to keep interest #10) setup for future plot threads #11) cut the unimportant descriptions or ones that are too omniscient #12) word choice. always word choice between dialogue and narration #anyways it's done and i'm trying to do the 'it's for the best faith reader' thing so hard #i was very paralyzed for the longest time and now i realize i was subconsciously trying to address the bad faith reader too often #sometimes you need to use them as an obvious hole-poker in your arguments #bc how i write different povs is an implicit persuasive argument that someone's perspective makes complete sense in their reality #but anon fr thanks for showing up #i hear loud and clear that the ch gets at least a passing grade against its rubric

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I love you Albus "The Road to Hell is Paved with Good Intentions" Dumbledore

#i will write this fic- i *will* write it #i've already mapped out a fair bit and started the first chapter #albus dumbledore #(it's time travel harrydore) #(hello to the ~5-10 other people in that tumblr corner) #also- the obligatory notice: #this blog is not jkr friendly