#beezlebub rewrite

[the-rewriter13]

The sin of Gluttony: Beezlebub

Okay, first off I wanna say: the 'original' 7 Deadly Sins will be guys as to fit the canonical lore as the 'Princes of Hell'. But not to worry, the Kid Sins will have varied genders!

Now then onto the rewrite (btw I can't draw so there will be no art by me for these designs lol):

Character Name:

First Name: Beezlebub

Last Name: N/A

Nickname (if any): Beezle (Mammon)

Title(s): Lord of The Flies, Sin of Gluttony

Alias(es):

Basic Information:

Age: ???

Gender: Male -He/Him/His

Date of Birth: ???

Place of Birth: ???

Species: Sin

Residence: Ring of Gluttony

Generation: 1st generation

Sexual Oriention: Bisexual

Voice/Fancast:

Normal: Alex Kapranos (lead singer of Franz Ferdinand)

Singing: Alex Kapranos

Non True Form/Human Physical Appearance:

Height: 15'2

Weight: (?)

Build: Slim and lanky with a sleeper build, due to the high metabolism for gorging food

Skin Colour: Grey (hex: 8E918F)

Hair Color: Jet black (hex: 0A0A0A)

Hair Style: A mullet, you know like Michael fucking Wheeler

Eye Color: A vibrant, almost toxic green (hex: 61DE2A) with a low orange (hex: FC6A03) flame flickering below the pupil that rises in intensity the closer he is to his true form and he has black sclera

Facial Structure: Hollow and emaciated/gaunt looking, with a sharp jawline, deep set eyes and a hawk nose

Scars or distinguishing marks: Hexagon tattoos around his eyes (both pairs, a smaller version for the smaller eyes), replicating the design of a fly's eye(s)

Extra: Medium-sized fly wings that sprout from his back, an extra pair of arms & a smaller pair of eyes that are above the actual set of eyes

Typical Clothing: Black cargo pants,a pastel orange (hex: FF9661) & dark pink (hex: 990049) argyle sweater & a white collared shirt

True Form Physical Appearance:

A large fly with a crown made of bone that grows out of its skull, the eyes still retain the toxic green colour. The wings are a soft gradient of pale orange to white while the body of the fly is ink black

Personality Traits:

Positive Traits: Beezlebub is an all-round rather laid-back person. He's confident and rather witty, wanting to make a good environment for people around him with his playful and enthusiastic attitude.

Negative Traits: Despite his desire to have a warm & comfortable environment associated with himself, it's slightly for his own purpose as Beezlebub isn't above peer pressure or forcing self-indulgence upon a person due to his feeding off others' self-indulgence. This gives him a sometimes sinister and pushy attitude, enthusiasticly cheering you on as your body screams to stop. His impulsive behaviour can also cause problems for both those around him at the time and himself, often causing reckless danger

Background and History:

Parents: God? I mean idk tbh

Siblings (if any): The other Sins, his favourite is Mammon

Current Occupation: He currently lords over the food industry, not very original I know, alongside having a partnership with Mammon in entertainment

Career Goals: ???

Hobbies and Interests:

Hobbies: Beezlebub enjoys partying, especially the types where you go place to place. He's also interested in farming certain things, his latest farm in his HQ is an ant farm (well, Hell's equivalent to ants, demon ants I suppose (I may make a little fact sheet about them lol)), he loves his ants very much

Interests: He loves music, his favourite genre of music is pop while his most hated is ochestral and operatic as it reminds him of Heaven and enjoys sending Ambassadors up to Earth to learn more music, also particularly enjoys musicals his favourite is Heathers!

Relationships:

Marital Status: Beezlebub is in a happy polyamorus relationship with his wife Calliope* & husband Micah*

Romantic Relationships (if any): His wife and husband

Friendships: Leviathan, they both indulge in their roles together, Leviathan growing envious of certain things and Beezlebub uses it as an excuse to self-indulge

Closest Friends: Mammon as Gluttony and Greed can go hand in hand, although they can buttheads every few centuries or so, they're not perfect but are the closest of the Sins

Dislike/Despise: Currently, Beelzebub is at a sorts with Lucifer due to the Pride Sinners running amok in his Ring, worse than normal anyways

Strengths and Weaknesses:

Strengths: Playful, confident, enthusiastic, ambitious & spunky

Weaknesses: Reckless, impulsive, gossipy & impatient

Goals and Ambitions:

Short-term Goals: Continue self-indulgence & up his business prosperity- eradicate the Pride Sinners that are causing a ruckus in his Ring

Long-term Goals: Reform with the other 7DS

Fears and Insecurities:

Common Fears: Fear of ducks

Insecurities: Perfectionism

Quirks and Habits:

Quirks: Rather twitchy hands which causes him to tap tables in meetings & other social interactions, Beezlebub also chews his fingernails when either impatient or anxious. When angry, his wings flutter and a buzzing sound emits from him

Habits: Every new moon he goes out to party with varying people, self-indulge in whatever takes his fancy at the time (obviously)

Moral Code: Chaotic good (for a Sin lmao)- he wants to see his Ring prosper and is willing to help the residents of said Ring if a situation calls for it

Favorites:

Favorite Foods: Nachos

Favorite Books: He's not one for reading, rather prefers the action of movies or shows

Favorite Movies/TV Shows: Watching Vox's channel and Hell's equivalent of Ramsey's Kitchen Nightmares

Favorite Music: Pop!

Favorite Color: Purples

Favourite Activities: He quite likes gaming, keeps him active and you can get addicted oh so easily which certainly helps

Dislikes:

Disliked Foods: Rice & pickles

Disliked Activities: Not the biggest fan of meetings as they consume a lot of time where he could be getting work done

Pet Peeves: The sound of static, he dislikes people chewing with their mouth open & background noise such as people talking (however Beelzebub enjoys music as a background sound, and that's it. Just music)

Miscellaneous:

Talents or Skills: Particularly good at playing the electric guitar & beer pong lol

Associated Song(s): Everybody Talks by Neon Trees, The Cult of Dionysus by The Orion Experience ft. ORION & Linda XO

Motivations:

He aspires to one day take revenge on Heaven (as do the other 7DS, it's kind of in their DNA lol)

*The names of the angels present are custom as the 200 hundred fallen angels are unnamed

Let me know if you think there's anything I should add or have any criticisms! I'm open to any constructive criticism :)

#beezlebub | half-way hotel #half-way hotel au #half-way hotel #hazbin hotel critical #hazbin hotel criticism #hazbin hotel critique #hazbin hotel rewrite #beezlebub rewrite #beezlebub redesign #beezlebub #7 deadly sins #hazbin hotel

[penguinofspades]

If Viv wanted to make one of the princes or whatever irredeemable she should've picked Beelzebub (and on that note Miss Sparkledog should be a separate character like Cerberus or something).

Each of the other sins can have good aspects of them, but Gluttony by its very definition is overindulgence. It's "too much" and all of the other sins only get dangerous if you indulge too much into them:

Lust: Too much Passion

Greed: Too much Desire

Sloth: Too much Patience/Not enough Care

Wrath: Too much Anger

Envy: Too much Admiration

Hubris: Too much Pride

It would make more sense than whatever the fuck canon's trying to do.

#anti helluva boss #helluva boss criticism #helluva boss critical #helluva boss rewrite #beezlebub #seven deadly sins #i could go on about the seven deadly sins for days lol #anti vivziepop #vivziepop critical #vivziepop criticism

[skyeblue8]

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-> First things first, for whatever reason there is no yellow font options on this site, so I'm just gonna be using orange and pink to make these headcanons look more distinguished. And secondly, sorry for the long time delay, but with school starting back up & a new flare up of profound mental issues, I haven't been keeping up as much as I wanted. But I'm here now, so let's get started! Okay? Okay.

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Gluttony's Environment:

🍭 Okay, to tell y'all the truth, I honestly think a lot of the canon visuals for the Gluttony Ring already fit to world perfectly as is. Well most of them, anyway:

🍭 In terms of the whole Beehive/70's American decor theme, I actually like it as it fits the whole Beelzebub style as well as highlights a time in history where people liked to party and overindulge in a crackload of drugs/alcohol/etc.

🍭 And, upon further inspection of the background, I like the idea of the Ring essentially being consumed in a whole dome that's prone to color changing depending on Queen Bee's emotions and/or the change in the time of day. Depending on which is in more effect at the time.

🍭 My main issues really come down to more minute things like the color scheme and the plant life in this Ring, as a lot of it is too green and... earthly. For the general color scheme, I'd only headcanon it to be yellow/gold, black, and hot pink with some orange for the sunset vibe. Not much of change, though I feel it highlights the Bee/bug theme better.

🍭 As for the plant life, I think it clearly makes sense to have the Ring be flourishing with it for distinction purposes, to highlight the food/producer aspect, and of course, because of the insect citizens here. To make it more native to Hell, though, I think the plants themselves should have a wide range of variety from inanimate, to partially sentient, to full on talking and communicating.

🍭Take the plants in the canon Sloth Ring, and the talking plant in LGSOH or Stolas' plants...

🍭 Almost all of the sentient plants are carnivorous in some way, and while there are a few domestic ones that won't eat their owner, they still might eat strangers, guests, or even their owner if said owner mistreats them.

🍭 I also see a lot of the inanimate plants being made out of food, too, like cotton candy, taffy, licorice, etc.

🍭 The typical plant properties for the more sentient ones aside from talking mouths & blinking eyes, of course, would probably be something like some of them looking sweet at first glance and then devolving into full-on monsters. Some could even carry miniature Gluttony-native parasitic insect demons or possess some kind of glue-like coating that traps people.

🍭 Moving on, the Ring is the largest agriculturer producer of food in Hell, owning a great deal of restaurants in and out of the Ring.

🍭 And, unsurprisingly, it is the soul mass producer of Beezle Juice - the strongest and most addictive alcohol in Hell.

🍭 Now we don't know much about this stuff other than hellborns drink it and, apparently, it can turn mortal fish into giant monsters:

🍭 I personally headcanon it as being a massed produced, heavily addictive substance coming from the Queen Bee herself, with varying side-effects depending on who's consumed it.

🍭 For instance, high-ranking Hellborns clearly won't be too affected by the juice. At best, they'd just be immensely drunk. High-ranking sinners, ie. Overlords, can drink way more than the average sinner, but are still at some risk if they exceed past what the power level they have can hold.

🍭 Lower-ranking sinners, on the other hand, if they drink far too much than their bodies and/or general power-ranking can handle, their bodies start the withering process a lot faster with the added bonus of essentially turning into those zombie mutants from Adventure Time.

🍭 In this event, it'd really be no different from being a withered husk of a sinner, only you'd be oozing this stuff from your body, becoming a temporarily new producer of the juice, while others attempt to cannibalize on you as a result. Since you're only a husk, you likely wouldn't die until the Drones found you and either ate you or returned you to the Queen herself to be eaten.

🍭 I also want to believe that too much of Beezle Juice may cause some sort of hard-core hallucinating and the physical melting of your organs and insides into a viscous, honey-like substance.

🍭 Anyway, back to the layout, aside from the "Hives" which would likely be the party domes spread throughout the Ring, and Bee's own house, I headcanon a great deal of the buildings, both residential and a few private owned ones would be in cool lava-lamp-esque shapes with similar colors of yellow, orange, and pink that just fit the overall theme of the Ring.

🍭 And for the sake of variety, I'd also want some half tree buildings and structures throughout the Ring, you know, like in Zootopia and Elemental, but obviously not green. Maybe orange and pink, or something like that.

🍭 Also, for really no other reason, I feel that most of the ground-scape of the Ring would be in a cool transparent, walkable glass with rivers of colorful Beezle Juice moving beneath it.

🍭 All around there would be special vents that emit the scent of Beelze Juice, it doesn't completely effect people like a direct intake would, but it would put you in a mild state of euphoria, and maybe even in a constant state of hunger. Really, delicious food smells will be prevalent within this Ring.

🍭 Gluttony would no doubt be full of exotic foods from other Rings, the most popular kinds being from Wrath since it involves hunting giant, murderous animals that taste delicious but may operate on Pufferfish Rules. (If you know, you know).

🍭 Closing out the environment section, I believe that, as a new age development (more on that, later) the Ring operates on a need for feeding on Despair as well as general Sinners' souls, due to canon Bee somehow being able to feed on "the vibe" at her parties. (Oh, and Gluttony is the co-creator of Belphagor's Happy Pills [name may be changed]).

Gluttony's Residents:

¤ Okay, so, quick heads-up, I've decided to do a bit of retcon of some of my previous statements of Hell's citizens, most notably the Hellborns and the imps, sharks, succubi, etc. and the class portrayal. More will be clarified in a post following this one with the later edits being made to the other headcanon pages, but I just wanted to let y'all know. ¤

🔸️ Hellborns: Candified Imps [Concept Inspired by @dramokin impsona] Essentially like normal Imps but based on candy w/ many having lollipop based tails and a few having wings, though they're still all around powerless

🔸️🐝 Queen Bee's Drones 🐝 : This comes in a set of three...

1. Party Drones [Or "Bee's Bitches"] - These are smaller versions of Bee that don't completely look like her (usually have different color schemes with eyes on their wings like the Pixiez from that Bratz movie, but her sigil is on their bodies). Typically female or feminine-leaning, they manage the parties throughout the Ring and on Earth (without the angels'/the sinners' knowledge) to maintain the despair increase they get to bring back to Bee herself. They're usually taller than the average sinner, and a bit chaotic & egotistical due to their position.

2. Defender Drones - They mainly serve as the Bee's means of defense, or rather, intimidation against those who specifically take valuable things from her. There aren't many throughout the Ring as they all stay exclusively near her. They're, again, usually like her in the idea that they're bee demons, but they don't look too much like her.

3. Hellhound Hybrids - A newer development that really coincides with both of the aforementioned Drones, the hybrids are typcial Hellhounds mutated into bee-hybrid creatures to serve Bee more efficiently. The first ever hybrid, I headcanon would be Vivzie's Bee, who she keeps as both a pet and a (sort-of) daughter.

🔸️Sinners: Every other demon who ends up within Gluttony. For any bug-based, candy-based, etc. citizens who end up here, they simply won't resemble the Drones or Imps due to their differing body structure, possible color scheme, and their lack of a sigil on their bodies. (I know Beelzebub technically doesn't have a sigil but we'll just say they do here and go from there)

🔸️Hellhounds: Created in Gluttony by their ancient (possibly enslaved) Leader Cerberus, the hellhounds are the lowest of the low in both the Ring and throughout Hell as their seen as literal slaves. I believe they can essentially hold the souls of humans when on Earth and come with custom disguises (that cost extra with purchase of them), but since no Sinner/Hellborn typically goes up to Earth without a Sin's power, permission, or knowledge, there's no point for that for many of them and so they're usually used as servants).

🍭 In terms of hierarchy amongst the citizens, the obvious thing would be that the appointed Drones of Beelzebub are at the top simply because she depends on them the most. The Party Drones are ranked slightly higher due to being more useful, hybrid or not, but all the Drones are still greater up the scale than everyone else.

🍭 After them comes the sinners, then the imps, and of course, the Hellhounds.

🍭 There's truly not much left to say except that all the citizens here, save for maybe the poor Hellhounds, indulge every waking moment down here partying, day and night. Of course, I believe I mentioned the consequences of Sinners overindulging over long periods of time and what the people, namely the Drones, will do once they reach rotting status, so I'll just end it here until I decide to come back and make some edits.

Hope you enjoyed! Until next headcanons! 😋

#helluva boss critical #vivziepop critical #helluva boss criticism #helluva boss #helluva boss critique #hazbin hotel critical #helluva critical #hazbin hotel critique #hazbin hotel #helluva boss rewrite #Gluttony #beezlebub #spindlehorse criticism #spindlehorse critical #Skye Blue's 7 Sins

[almacambiondaughterofsaleos]

“Bee” Should Have Been The Daughter Of Beelzebub And Cerebrus Instead Beezelebub Herself

If you wanted to keep the design and still have her be Tex’s girlfriend, you could have had her just be the daughter of Beezlebub and throw in the fact she’s the daughter of also Cerebrus but due to the stigma of being in relationship with lesser demons her mother wouldn’t acknowledge her publicly as her daughter and that could cause strife between them. This could mean that it would make sense that Bee’s a “bee/fox” hybrid 

I also feel that Bee felt more like contemporary of Charlie rather than someone who felt she was a colleague of Lucifer. This design would fit more of a chick who is a 20 something who likes to party. And in my opinion, her mother could let her do her own stuff since she tries to keep her out of the light and has her powers to make the most awesome parties because of it. She still be classmate/childhood friend of Charlie who hangs when they have the time. She could also care and love Tex because he is one of the few people she thinks she can be reliable and have conditional love since her own mom doesn’t even want to publicly acknowledge her. 

#helluva boss #helluva boss rewrite suggestion #cerebrus #beezlebub

[goodomensjail]

I don’t think the book of life is actually a thing we need to worry about…

Some of you may know before the series premiered and I saw the early screening, I thought the book of life would be a really big deal

However, now watching the series start to finish twice the only person who actually makes the book of life threat is Michael and they are a bit flustered when they talk about it with Beelzebub

Beelzebub takes it at face value who then relays it like a game of telephone to Crowley, who writes it off as not a thing (said it to scare the cherubs). If we are to assume that Crowley once had higher status than Michael, which most of the season is alluding to him being the previous supreme archangel (now whether that’s Rapheal, Lucifer, or if “Gabriel” is just a title not a name and Angel Crowley was “Gabriel”) I think we should take Crowleys initial response with more face value.

Beezlebub remember at this point is trying to bribe Crowley into finding Gabriel with a title as Duke of hell, which we now know, was for selfish and loving reasons. Same for the book of life, it’s a threat to get Crowley moving to find Gabriel. An empty one.

Shax we realize is low level and fairly incompetent and only relaying what she heard from Beelzebub. Again, not reliable.

The next time we hear about it, it’s again Michael being bratty about their status, and metatron comes in and shoots them down that they don’t actually have that authority

So what proof do we have at the book of life is at all important to the plot moving forward, really? Michael appears to be an unreliable narrator who is making up threats to seal their status in the power vacuum with Gabriel gone.

We have a Crowley who seems to know a heck of a lot about how heaven runs thinking at first it’s “not a thing”, and only taking it seriously because of his love and fear for Aziraphale

And then we have metatron who doesn’t straight up say that isn’t real, so okay.

Anyway, it could still very much be ✨a thing ✨ and metatron doesn’t say it doesn’t exist, but upon a second watch, I don’t think it was anything more than an empty threat and another red herring, and I personally am not subscribing to theories floating around that it’s going to be some big revelatory rewrite of season two.

And that doesn’t mean it was pointless to the story, writing about the book of life, did exactly what it was supposed to do. It got Crowley back helping Aziraphale even against his better judgment, and his own wants, in a mirror of what the final fight was going to be it doesn’t matter that it didn’t come back around or it wasn’t a gun that fired. It served its purpose narratively as a threat, even if an empty one.

Anyway, thanks for joining me on my TED talks, where I vaguely allude to posts but don’t actually want to comment on them because I do want everyone to have fun….

#good omens #good omens spoilers #gos2spoilers #gos2 spoilers #go2 spoilers #good omens meta #good omens speculation

[labyrinth-runner]

tagged by @nobie

RULES: write one song for every letter in your url and then tag as many people as there are letters in your url

UGH ITS SO LONG and I have Way too many Ns. Tagging whoever wishes to do this

L-Lament for Thorin by Eurielle

A-abcdefu by gayle

B-Be My Leia -The Dollyrots

Y-You Don't Know Me- Cast of Victorious

R-Resolutions-Tufts Beezlebubs

I-I See Fire (The Celtic Women version)

N-Nobody's Hero-Black Veil Brides

T-The Last Goodbye-Billy Boyd

H- Holding Out for A Hero (The Medieval Version)

R-Rewrite the Stars- The Greatest Showman

U-Underground -David Bowie

N-Never Stop-MOSAIC

N-No Reason-Beetlejuice Cast

E-Epiphany-Trans-Siberian Orchestra

R-Ride, Witcher, Ride-Joey Batey

[darkmarkets]

The Horror of the First Draft

(Or, is that a manuscript in your pocket, or are you just wasting your freakin’ life?)

There is a vast difference between short story writing and novel writing. Think of it as the difference between pot and heroin—sure, it’s perfectly easy to just write a short story now and then, maybe just a bit on the weekends (you can quit anytime you want) but it really just opens the door to more the more hardcore stuff.

And, once you’re chasing that novel-writing dragon, there’s no going back. Soon you’re getting up early or staying up late, plugging away half the day at your obsession, constantly fixed on nothing more than getting to those blessed words “The End.” It will be weeks, months, sometimes years before your lust is slaked, before you’ve bled enough over the page to actually call it finished.

But then, after you’ve thrown yourself on the sacrificial altar that is your novel, you wake up one morning and realize; the whole thing is crap.

There are few things more horrifying. I’ve been there. If you’ve ever finished a first draft of a novel, chances are, you’ve been there, too. Not necessarily because either of us are bad writers (well, maybe I am, but my delusions keep me going) but mainly because of the one universal truth that all writers must admit to themselves before they get to Novelist Nirvana:

First drafts always suck.

Always.

That’s not to say, of course, that first drafts never get published. Oh, there’s a lot of first drafts out there, infesting the market pools with their oily bile, turning black the hearts of readers who just laid down eight whole dollars for a book that was supposed to be entertaining, dammit. I’ve read one or two myself, and, I’ll admit, they turned me to the forces of evil.

But, don’t worry; it’s not so bad. Even if just looking at that first draft makes you want to throw yourself off a bridge—or get a slimy agent who will somehow manage to use the right incantations to Beelzebub get your draft into print—you have accomplished a wonderful thing. You have a draft! A First Draft means you have passed a horrific hurdle, climbed a dire mountain. You, my friend, are officially a Novelist.

So, I give you my condolences. I hate to say it, but there’s no turning back at that point. You’re doomed. Doomed to toil forever in that vast, maniacal obsession that is novel writing. Now you’ll languish forever in the purgatory of formatting and finishing, query-writing and polishing and dumping hundreds of dollars at your local copy shop to print out submitable manuscripts. Now you'll have to rewrite. (Oh, sweet Beezlebub, not rewriting!) It’s a horror I wouldn’t wish on my worst enemy.

Oi. A heroin habit would probably be more useful. Sorry I had to be the one to break it to you.

EDIT: 3.14.10

So, I was hungover the morning I posted this, and rushing to finish my dark incantations to Beezlebub, so I neglected to mention something:

Yes, we're screwed as novel writers. But, once the horror has dawned on us, and we're faced with the realities of toiling forever in our miserably doomed states, there's only two possible options. We can stop...

Or, we can plunge recklessly forward through the murky swamp that is our own twisted literary dreams. We can wade through the muck to get to that glorious reprieve that is a Good Novel, by sweat and blood and tears, and by the screams of a thousand dishes never washed and the howls of a thousand TV shows never watched.

And, really, once you're hooked, that's the only option. To plunge recklessly forward.

I'll see you guys in the swamp.

Lorna D Keach

#The Horrors of Horror Writing

[hydr0phius]

Beezlebub (about Mary Wardwell’s face): That face is haggard.

Lilith: [*decks him with her crown*]

Caliban: I personally, do not mind that face. It makes you look like an actual Queen.

Lilith: Nobody fucking asked, clay boy.

This is canon, and I am screaming. Path of Night reads like cracky fanfic, I shit you not. The amount of meme references in this book, I-

Shajsjjsjsjhasj.

#chilling adventures of sabrina: path of night #caos #caos lilith #caos caliban #caliban #beezlebub #sabrina spellman #chilling adventures of sabrina #watch me rewrite all of lilith's scenes sjsjs

[finitevoid]

i think i mentioned this awhile ago but that idea i had to rewrite the core 4′s parents fairytales except they were the heroes was kind of genius. i have no idea how i would do aladdin or sleeping beauty but i had IDEAS for snow white and 101 dalmations

carlos was a washed up 20-something in the early 80s, down on his luck and his money, rooming with his girlfriend evie, and running from his past, not processing it. eventually he comes upon a dog, a ratty, injured stray, a black labrador, and he takes her home despite not having any money for her. he names her beezlebub. beezlebub gets pregnant, cruella gets involved, carlos faces his past, you know the drill

#talking* #i wrote ie. 5k of it months and months ago. might e smtg to revisit #wrote like 5k of it*

[pearlll09]

@whumptober2019 day 19 is asphyxiation!

It’s only kinda ineffable husbands today. Fic under cut.

The view might have been nice if Crawly wasn’t terrified. Falling for an eternity when you don’t know when or if you’ll reach the bottom tends to do that, though. The further he falls, the more things he loses.

He’s already lost his name. Whatever it had been before rings around in his head, unintelligible. Already replaced by something else. Ραφαήλ, whatever that was, is now Crawly. His halo shattered somewhere far above him, scattering in shards. His angelic markings left when he first started to fall.

Still, there’s one thing that rings around in his mind that he clings to, hoping he will never forget it. Aziraphale. The white-haired angel he had seen around a lot, always smiling, always helping out. The one he had never had the courage to talk to. The one who he’d run away from, whenever his blue eyes caught Crawly’s and that smile was directed to him. He may never see him again.

Smoke envelops him and fills his lungs; his mouth; and burns his eyes. The end must be near. He makes himself smaller, pulling in his legs and closing his eyes as he braces himself for impact, and whatever awaits after that. If anything even does.

He certainly wasn’t prepared to fall into a liquid – he couldn’t call it water, for water wouldn’t hurt this much. The initial shock causes his eyes to shoot open and a surprised inhale – both of which were mistakes. The liquid burns at his eyes and fills his lungs as the pain starts to settle throughout his being and into his very soul. It chokes him; burns him; changes him – the coding of his angelic form rewriting itself as he writhes around, trying to do anything. Scream. Cry. Breathe. Anything would be better than suffering by himself. A sharp pain forms along his back as even his wings begin to change, and the liquid finally takes him as it rips the grace of God from him, fading into unconsciousness.

When he awakes again, sprawled across rough, jagged stones, he can tell he’s no longer the same person. Ραφαήλ definitely wouldn’t fit him, not anymore. But Crawly doesn’t seem right either. Patches of his skin glimmer in the light of the fires burning around him, looking vaguely like scales. When he rubs a rough finger over them, he realizes that’s exactly what they are. A forked tongue wets his lips and brings back with it the overwhelming scent of brimstone. He cringes away at the sensation, catching a glimpse of his reflection in a small pool of the liquid that hadn’t yet caught on fire. As his yellow, serpentine eyes stare back at him, he remembers the one thought he had clung to. Aziraphale. He was still there, perfectly encased in his memory. He smiles despite his current situation before getting to his feet to try and find the other demons. 

They were completely empty – they had nothing left for them. But Crawly still had one thread of hope to hold onto. One thing that makes him different from the other demons. One thing that keeps him from turning completely. The thought of possibly seeing Aziraphale again keeps him going, and when Beezlebub eventually asks for someone to go up to earth and cause some trouble, he’s the first to volunteer. This might be his chance. And if it is, he wouldn’t let himself run again. It might be the only chance he ever gets to talk to the angel, and he isn’t going to lose it this time.

The rest of the month’s prompts are here!

#whumptober2019 #no.19 #ineffable husbands #aziraphale #crowley #whump #my fic #ao3

[the-rewriter13]

The Devil & The Seven Deadly Sins

Part 1: The Premises

the premises of the Seven Deadly Sins, Children/Show Sins & The Devil

Part 2: The Devil

The Devil in detail

Part 3: The Seven Deadly Sins

1. Beezlebub 2. Asmodeus

#half-way hotel au #half-way hotel #beezlebub | half-way hotel #asmodeus | half-way hotel #lucifer | half-way hotel #mammon | half-way hotel #satanus | half-way hotel #belphegor | half-way hotel #leviathan | half-way hotel #the devil | half-way hotel #premises | half-way hotel #hazbin hotel rewrite #hazbin hotel critical #hazbin hotel criticism #hazbin hotel critique

[aziraphaleisagender]

Who wants to help me rewrite the Jean/Javier duet but it’s Crowley and Beezlebub.

“I am warning you, Beezle! I’m a stronger man by far!”

“I was born with scum like you! I am from that gutter too!”

Obviously I’m shit with reordering beats and notes, but Would It Not Be Fun As Fuck

#Good Omens

[the-rewriter13]

Hazbin Hotel Rewrite, part 1: the premises

The beginning of a rewrite, let's go!

So I wanted to start off with the Seven Deadly Sins, however I won't be going into the most of detail for the premise of it.

Obviously in the original show, they've been either woobified or are kinda basic so I wanted to change that.

I had the idea to kinda completely alter how the Seven Deadly Sins (7DS) work. To do this I'm taking inspiration from another rewriter about the Show Sins, I can't remember the user of said rewriter (sincerest apologies).

First off the more basic stuff:

The Sins in the show. They're kinda just nerfed so to compensate the Show Sins as I'm calling them, will be the children of the actual 7DS.

That's why Ozzie supports consent, Bee (not calling her Beezlebub as that's the canonical name of the Sin of Greed) promotes less self indulgence.

However of course, the Children Sins can be like their parent (Mam as an example (once again, not calling him Mammon).

Now onto the more detailed stuff:

The 7DS. They're obviously going to be far more powerful than most of the demons/sinners in Hell. However like in Hazbin Hotel, I wanted Lucifer to be the most powerful 7DS but not for the reason you think.

Instead of Lucifer being the cast down fallen angel Lucifer, I wanted the 7DS to be parts of that angel. 7 parts of a whole.

The name of this fallen angel? The Devil or AntiChrist as his true name (name when born of Heaven) has been lost to time.

Each 7DS holds part of The Devil's former self as when he was cast into Hell, the impact and curse tore him into the 7 pieces everyone knows as the 7DS.

Out of the 7DS, Lucifer holds the most. Think of it as percentage out of 100 I guess.

One idea that links the 7DS further is the Ritual of AntiChrist. On each solstice, with the winter solstice having a higher chance, the 7DS come together to try and reform into The Devil.

On each day of the solstices, Hell experiences a mass power surge that rocks the world they know. A power surge so powerful that it even is felt up in Heaven (albiet lightly), however Earth is exempt from the power surge/earthquake because Earth is seen as battle/neutral ground between Heaven & Hell once The Millennial Reign of Christ is over.

The 7DS go through a transformation which forms The Devil, each piece (Sin) fitting into place. However so far the Reformation has been unsuccessful, causing The Devil (and by extension the 7DS) to become frustrated.

I will talk more about each 7DS, the Show Sins/Children Sins & The Devil individually.

#hazbin hotel rewrite #hazbin hotel critical #hazbin hotel criticism #the devil #seven deadly sins #half-way hotel au #half-way hotel #premises | half-way hotel #hazbin hotel

[the-rewriter13]

Hey there, hello! I've been offline for a little while I know, just been a little busy.

Before I get into the purpose of this post I will mention that I am still going to rewrite the 7 Deadly Sins & social hierarchies as said before (see linked post) and I'll post the first 7DS rewrite as soon as possible.

That being said here's a new poll about which child/children of the 7DS I should rewrite first!

#hazbin hotel rewrite #hazbin hotel critical #hazbin hotel criticism #7 deadly sins #hazbin hotel critique #rewrite poll #my poll