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x-authorship-x · 1 year

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Hi Torship 💛 i just need some advice for writing OCs because i saw your OC shisui post and i immediately remembered how quickly you're able to introduce really solid OCs in your Fics and... how?!?! Mine are always so obvious and blehhh :'0 thank youuuu

Hiya~

Whooo boy, so obviously every writer is different and will have different tips, you don't need me to tell you that. I'll just try not to talk your head off too long and keep this productive 🤣 so, I'll show you how I build up a "shop window" OC and an "full package OC".

So, when I say 'shop window', what I mean is: this character is walking past, only briefly interacted with, but must have enough of an impression to enrich the scene. You can't just be surrounded by blank canvas, thats a completely different effect

E.g- Tadame, the Hokage's Receptionist in HOPE AU:

Think about when you meet a stranger. You notice at least one thing that makes a lasting impression. A pretty dress, the smell of smoke, how they made you feel (maybe they wanted to shake your hand and you didn't know how to refuse?), an accent, etc etc. For Tadame, she is notable for a few things:

Her fashionable style. Shisui almost immediately informs the reader that she is a plain-clothes ANBU. This makes her ease and composure even more striking. It broadens our idea of what ANBU get up to. It's also good to see an unapologetically feminine woman being a badass bodyguard... Whilst in a cheeky nod at the "Moneypenny Bond Secretary" character.

She is warm and familiar. We're used to people being awed, stressed, or angry around Shisui etc, Tadame makes a point to be extra friendly. She is also very comfortable with the Hokage, who is deferred to by everyone (even Kakashi at this point). This sets her apart, reinforces her personality as consistent without needing much exposure, and gives us an immediate idea of what routine is like in the Tower.

She demonstrates her own off-camera motivations, life, and relationships by her actions. She makes Shisui pick tea, even ones that Sarutobi doesn't enjoy. She smokes heavily, a contrast to her very sophisticated and feminine image (I based her on Audrey Hepburn in Sabrina, actually), and she takes part in festival preparations with (presumably) a large cohort of coworkers which hints at Tower life as well as Konohan culture.

This is all done very quickly. We don't see Tadame a lot, we don't get much dialogue and, when she's not present, Shisui doesn't think about her. Bear in mind that overcrowding things is just as frustrating as not building up enough. As a chronic purple-proser, i know this is a bit rich coming from me lmao

TL;DR: i make most of these decisions off the cuff. Start with "what does the protagonist need to recognise in this OC?" Is it the accent that's important, is it their job, who they're related to, what theyre doing? Tadame was the ANBU bodyguard who could get Shisui directly in to see the Sandaime, he immediately noted how unassuming she was for the power she had. He played nice with her, hence why he catalogues so many details right off the bat. Compare this to Shikaku's receptionist, who is noted as being very angry with Shisui for ignoring protocol... Until he apologises to her, because if this lasting impression, and she is convinced to forgive him. The T&I receptionist is a running joke that Shisui forgot his name once and was so embarrassed afterwards that he constantly reminds himself of it later.

Okay, let's keep going and pray I get more coherent lol

Full package OC: e.g Akira, Shisui's main Crow Summon from HOPE AU:

Full Package OC is exactly what you think it is. Fully fleshed out, dialogue, screen time, treated as one of the main cast. The main thing here is moderation (how to avoid a Mary Sue, as you might say) and realism. I think it's actually easier than a shop window OC.

You need a motivation, a good quality and a flaw. Even better if the last two are connected.

Akira:

Akira is a Crow. To be a Crow - I decided as a nice contrast to Shisui and Itachi's modesty despite riches and genius - is to be extremely frank about how great it is to be a bird. It's ownership; like how corvids nick shiny things, the Crows think of their Summoners as their belongings and not the other way around. Birds are a collective, they fly en masse with a few stand out personalities, so it follows that the Summons would function similarly. They aren't like dogs or cats, who will follow (in varying ways) leadership. Whoever's in charge is circumstantial to the tasks in need of doing and whenever Shisui looks like he's in charge (in the fic), that's just professionalism. It's plenty for the reader to chew on, it fleshes out the Summons as a whole, and it sets up a baseline expectation for the readers being introduced to any Crow.

Building on that, Akira's motivations become a little easier. He wants to, like any bird, preen and puff up. He has illusions (that aren't illusions tbh) of grandeur, of how humans are supposed to behave (he doesn't get out much), and he boldly claimed the pursuit of "noble adventure" when he agreed to work with Shisui. Everything Akira does, therefore, needs to fit in this mentality. That he is special, that this makes Shisui special by association, and that Shisui is is Shiny Rock Summoner to be possessive over. He also, like all Crows, speaks differently from the other characters, which sets him distinct in the reader's mind. Voila!

Akira's strength, it becomes clear, is his devotion. He is all talk when it comes to complaints; in a tough spot, he is so ready to square up to anyone and anything that he gets extremely pissed/hurt when Shisui denies him the chance. This absolute faith and engagement with Shisui is brilliant for the narrative, Shisui as a character, and with connecting the audience to Akira. As the audience is encouraged to want the best for Shisui, they share a common goal with Akira.

This ties into Akira's fault, which is his pride. He's hard to work with, he doesn't like to admit his wrongdoings or back down from a 'slight', and that means Shisui is often forced to put up with Akira acting out or sabotaging tasks, knowingly or not. It also makes Shisui hesitant to trust him for more delicate operations, and Shisui occasionally laments that Itachi was matched with Arakan, who is more feeble but also of sweeter disposition. However this fault is frustrating but endearing, so readers may actually like him more because of this behavior. They think it's funny or maybe Akira is expressing the anger that readers connect to but no other character is displaying.

TL;DR: Akira has a baseline motivation that he shares with his (OC) kin, which allows the readers to immediately make assumptions every time they meet a new Crow (All Crows see Shisui&Itachi as their possessions, themselves as dignified and Noble, and as outsiders as intruders to be distrusted and chased off). Akira's strength, his devotion, is linked to his flaw, his pride. Both of which, however, connect him to the reader and build a relationship between OC and audience, even without Shisui directly involved. The key to a Full Package OC is to match the likable with the dislikable. For someone you deeply love, flaws should be something that can be lived with (Akira's pride), worked on (Shisui's esteem, recklessness, over independence), or something to be struggled with (Kakashi's self destructiveness). Similarly, strengths need grounding in motivation/context, like Akira (he is devoted because it is rooted in his history with Shisui and the culture of crow summons) or Shisui (his loyalty and creativity come from his determination to do his family proud, to keep the peace his grandfather worked for) or Kakashi (his devotion and extreme skill came at the price of his innocence and his loved ones). If you make an OC and feel it's going wrong, try consulting this balance again!

Maybe I've just waffled on about my own OCs for way too long but I hope you can see what I'm trying to show. You have to treat OCs like real people, like they have a life off camera and they're not just plot devices or tools for you to throw on the page. If they have a name, they have a person behind it. If you don't want to do this, do not give them a name or a very strong description. It could prove distracting and the audience might fixate on a detail that they think is a clue but you actually just tossed in there randomly. God knows that drives me wild, sometimes.

Anyway, I'm sorry this is so long (🤡) but I didn't want to cut it shorter and not be helpful, so....

Best of luck with your writing, Anon! ✨

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daggryet · 9 months

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idk much about fontaine, though I did see the trailer but for now I'm just like. Vibing.

I kinda want tighnari if I'm honest he's cute and also having another dendro would be good (I have Yao Yao and collei, cause abyss,

I pulled characters I wanted sort of by luck without really aiming at it like when I first started playing and pulled bei dou and ningguang on accident, because I didn't know how primogems worked and saved up a decent amount (that was so gay of them actually to show up together lmao). I pulled for tohma because hes my boy and for now I am very happy with what I have (got razor in that same time which I didn't expect but am very happy about cause he uses a two-handed weapon and also electro which is my fave element and is also a wolfboy)

So yeah. I don't actually know, I might try for alhaitham when he shows up again and kaveh (cause yeah I'm one of those people. I am not immune to bickering old married couple vibes), but it's far away for now and idk. I'll see how the wind blows or whatever the saying is

I rambled on huh. so yeah. also thank you for the offer of help I might take you up on it sometime later. I am in eu but our timezones are still pretty different and I'm currently starting a three day shift so I'll be out like a light when it's evening for me and somewhere in the day for you, so yeah. we'll see. Thank you though again it's very sweet of you!!!

❤💛

same!! trying very hard to avoid leaks, but for now i'm vibing with neuvillette. i don't know what his deal if, if he's gonna be good, if i'll even be able to use him, but rn i have my heart set on him.

maybe it has to do with fyodor from bsd being his english va. Whooo knows

wishing as a newbie is a lot of fun because when you don't have a really good understanding of the system, you just pull for fun. even standard's great fun in the beginning

i have kaveh and alhaitham, and if i ever get a solid electro character that isn't a bow user (i can only handle one bow user per team... Charged attacks characters are not my favorite, but i will learn properly for tighnari), they'd be able to make a good team. in my head anyway

alhaitham is a very fun to play, so if you have the primos i'd definitely recommend him. and if your cousin gets her yae miko, that's 50% of a g-d tier team right there. kaveh was SO tough to get, i think i got him after like 70 pulls on the baizhu banner where he was featured 😭 a good investment tho because i had him as a main from that day till the day i pulled kazuha. through sheer force of will, anyone can be a good main

and of course, any time! work that changes your entire schedule is awful, just had my own two 5am starts, but i hope you made it through your shifts!

#ask #❤️💛 anon #genshin

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SaL anon here my friend wondering how your recovery from last night's episode is going? Well if it's going good allow me to throw a wrench in the works with a song!! Now I was thinking I could go hard and suggest Saturn or Sorrow but I am aware you're probably still feeling fragile so I decided to take it easy. So instead let's talk about Son!! After the flashback scenes I got this on the brain, and let's not discount the beauty of the line "I ran the risk of being intimate with my brokenness".

Sorry this took me a bit, we have family in town so I haven’t been at home much, but I am....whooo boy. That episode was A Lot, but in such a good way. I may have my issues with them choosing to kill off Gwyn instead of having a major medical emergency or something, but given that a lot of it is based on personal experiences with both parental loss and drug abuse, I thought it was so powerful and so well done, and Ronen man....Ronen put himself through the wringer to bring us this episode and it shows. I actually didn’t cry through most of the episode (I was too busy trying to remember to breathe!), but that moment we see Gwyn’s face as TK turns to leave and she breaks a little bit and you can see her holding herself back from trying to take control and make sure her “sweet boy” does what what she brought him to do? When you can see she’s so scared that she may never see him alive again? But she chooses to put her faith in him and that he will choose to fight for himself?! I am inconsolable about that scene actually. And with Tim saying she might be back for more flashbacks, I will give my right arm for a scene of her picking him up at the airport after he gets out of rehab and he’s just so bright and happy and healthy and they have a long hug and cry and.....hold on, I gotta go sob into a pillow for a minute.

Okay, I’m back! As much as I appreciate steering away from Saturn, and Sorrow (because we’re ALL to fragile for that right now, and because I feel like this is going to keep coming up across the season so we will have a chance to talk about them later when it’s maybe a *tiny* bit less painful.), I’m not sure this song is going to be any less painful, BUT it is such a hopeful, bright, song that I think it is definitely the correct choice!

Show me who I am and who I could be Initiate the heart within me 'Til it opens properly

Slow down, start again from the beginning I can't keep my head from spinning out of control Is this what being vulnerable feels like?

Okay but that opening line?! I just got crushed in the feels. Because not only do we have Gwyn who is begging TK to look at who he is right in that moment in 2017, and to think about who he wants to be in the future, but we also have that future, and Carlos, who has helped TK so much in thinking about what he wants out of life for himself, and has helped him start healing his heart and opening up to accept the love that is all around him! Also, we are definitely seeing a TK who is lost in his grief and has a head spinning out of control. Because those moments he’s been opening up? He CHOSE them. He CHOSE when to be vulnerable, and who to be vulnerable to. And now he’s hurting so much, that the being vulnerable part isn’t entirely in his control anymore, so he tries to wrest back the control where he can. I will NEVER shut up about this episode and the way Ronen portrays TK being lost in grief. It’s not the loud grief some people might expect, but it’s so, so true to who TK is as a character to just totally shut down, and not let even his dad and Carlos see his full vulnerability. I am SO excited to see how the rest of his journey goes down this season because I think this is going to cause some struggle, but ultimately build a stronger, healthier relationship between him and Carlos.

And I will try, try, try to breathe 'Til it turns to muscle memory I'm only steady on my knees One day I'll stand on my own two feet

I'll run the risk of being intimate with brokenness Through this magnifying glass I see a thousand finger prints On the surfaces of who I am

I am thinking about 2017 TK and his insistence that he’s fine because he’s not missing shifts, and how he thinks if he just keeps trying to push forward, and keeps saving other people, that it will be okay. I’m also thinking back to him making the decision to move over to being a paramedic, and how it was partly a way to get out (a little) from his dad’s command (and protection) and to stand on his own two feet. Because he was finally feeling steady at that point, thanks to all the love and support he has been surrounded by! I also love the imagery here of looking closely and being able to see all the finger prints of the people who have helped shape your life all along the way, and Gwyn’s are ALL over TK and it was so great to see the most important ones in this episode.

Show me where to find the silver lining As the mercury keeps rising 'Til the glass or my fever breaks

Show me how to struggle gracefully Let the scaffolding inside of me be strong enough To hold this tired body up once more

I’m sure I said it in my other post about this song but this verse is my absolute favorite. Gwyn looking at TK in all his strung out, angry, scared, bargaining, lying mess and calling him her “sweet boy” because he IS and always will be is just....😭 That silver lining of knowing that his mom is there, supporting him, loving him, fighting for him, even at his lowest? TK has to do the work himself, he has to fight for himself, but knowing that his mom thinks he’s worth fighting for? That was everything to him in that moment and you could see it. And there is just something so visceral about the imagery of being under internal construction, and knowing that you’re putting in the work, but still being scared it’s not enough to hold. Ryan’s voice here conveys all that desperation, and it just kills me every time. TK is struggling this whole episode. He is hoping that all the work he has put in for the past few years is enough to hold him up, and in the end, it isn’t. He crumbles. BUT he doesn’t have to hold himself up alone! He has his whole new family who are ALL looking out for him. We know he panicked and blew up things with Carlos over the season break and didn’t tell anyone on the team what happened. Because he is still hiding those vulnerabilities and the “ugly” parts of himself from everyone. My greatest hope is that through this time of grief and struggle that he learns to truly open up and allow the people he loves to support him when he needs it.

And I will try, try, try to breathe 'Til it turns to muscle memory I feel the pressure in my blood Building up and liberating me

So I will try, try, try to breathe 'Til it turns to muscle memory I'm only steady on my knees But one day, I'll stand on my own two feet

I'll run the risk of being intimate with brokenness Through this magnifying glass I see a thousand finger prints

I ran the risk of being intimate with my brokenness I was given a gift of hope In a thousand finger prints On the surface of who I am

“being intimate with brokenness” really is the theme of TK’s journey already this season, and I think it will continue to be. He cannot truly open up and fully accept love until he accepts ALL his emotions. In typical SaL fashion, this song ends with hope. Not just trying to breathe, but being liberated, not just I will run the risk, but I ran the risk. And what did becoming intimate with brokenness lead to? A gift of hope. The only way out, is through, and it’ll only be when TK has become intimate with his brokenness, that he will be able to clearly see all those fingerprints. From his mom, his dad, Enzo, the firefam, and Carlos, all speckled across the surface of who he is, who he chooses to be every day. It’s going to be a journey for sure, but one I’m so looking forward to!

I think it’s neat and worth a mention that in the liner notes for this song, Ryan mentions that since it’s part of the “Life” album, he worked in references to the 4 primary vital signs (heart rate, body temperature, respiration rate, blood pressure) which is just, SO fun in reference to both Paramedic TK that we see in action in this episode, as well as recently injured TK who was suffering from hypothermia (body temp), and had issues with his heart rate being too slow, and not breathing on his own. Just a fun and lighter(ish) note to end on! This was rough but cathartic and I can’t wait to see TK’s journey this season!

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#sleeping at last anon #911 lone star #lone star spoilers #tk strand #sleeping at last #son #sorry if this is an incoherent mess #*I* am an incoherent mess STILL about this episode

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wolferals · 4 years

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🇪🇸di mi nombre🇪🇸

finally fallin' chapter 5

arón piper x reader

(The spanish is all google translate, i wont take responsibility for mistakes)

chapter 5

After your „date" with Arón, he had been so sweet to walk you back to your small apartment at around 9:15. On the way there, he had reassured you that you were going to be fine filming the video with him.

You were still pretty nervous and to be honest a little anxious already.

To explain your concern about the smallest thing, it'd be good to clear some things.

When you were 14, your grandma had died right after Christmas. That had really gotten to you, you had been very close with her, and you hadnt gotten the chance to say goodbye go her.

Thats how it all started, your sadness, the loneliness.

You had spent days and nights sitting on your bed, listening to sad music and just staring at the ceiling.

The years after that it had gotten a little better, you didnt cry at the thought of her anymore but now every little thing triggered your mind into thinking you were going to get hurt or embarrassed.

You were overthinking everything.

And to briefly explain why you got so nervous when a guy looked at you or complimented you, you had never been in a super serious relationship. And you were almost 20 now.

Some people would say its weird but you had realized that maybe your time hasnt come yet, and that was okay for you.

So as to right now, you were sitting in the subway on the way to the address Arón had sent you.

College had been alright today, Itzan and you had had lunch together again and had spent some more time finding ideas for the photo shoot with Arón.

You were still nervous but tried to calm yourself down by thinking back to what Arón had told you. He was going to be there and he had done nothing but be comforting and sweet to you.

On the right station you got out and walked to location.

It was a big market place somewhere in Madrid and you immediately spotted Arón in the crowd. He was wearing a black shirt and a jeans jacket over it. He looked good.

You walked up to him and he noticed you right away and walked towards you.

„Hola chica, you feeling good?" He pulled you into a tight hug.

That had been your second hug. The first had been the night before when he had taken you home and then left.

His hugs were tight but so comforting to you.

„Hey, I'm good how are you?"

He put his arm around your shoulder and you guys walked back to the others.

„Guys that's y/n, my girlfriend."

Your head shot up to him.

He grinned and added:"In the video."

You started laughing as well.

Then yon got introduced to the other guys and you went through the scene again before you relatively quick went to filming. The first scene had been easy for you. Just walking around, holding Arón's warm hand, pretending to be interested in everything around you.

Since he was a lot taller than you, you used the opportunity to put your head on his shoulder while walking.

He pressed your hand tightly until the guy yelled a loud „cut."

You walked back to the camera to see the scene from this perspective. Arón was still holding you hand until you both realized and he let go, grinning at you.

„That was great guys, we already got it." His friend „Moonkey" spoke and highfived you both.

The next scene had been the one, getting some food and sitting down at a bench. You had to feed each other a little to seem „cute" until you spilled the ketchup from your fries on his shirt, making you laugh out loud. For real though, it hadnt been planned but Arón later on had said that it was perfect for the video.

It was getting darker over the course of filming those cute/funny scenes with the guys and at around 7 you decided to take a break and get an actual snack.

The guys got burger and stuff but since you and Arón had eaten for the scene before, you just grabbed drinks and slowly walked to the next location.

The cameras were wrapped up in bags that the guys could easily carry as backpacks.

The club you originally intended to film a scene it was closed that day and the next one would've been to far to walk so you had to change your entire plan.

„Why dont we film the rooftop scene now and include some dancing and jumping around? Turn on some music and you guys dance."

Arón agreed immediately but you again got self conscious, having to dance in front of a couple boys.

Arón reassured you again and took your hand as you were making your way up to the top of the building.

While the guys were setting up the cameras and all, you and Arón were standing together, talking.

He again told you stuff like:"Close your eyes and just pretend no one is there. You're gonna do great I'm sure."

You smiled at him and then examined the view over the city and its lights.

„Alright Arón, y/n just sit down over there, cuddle and maybe watch the stars i dont know." <Moonkey> laughed and you both did as he said.

Aròn put his arm around you, pulling you closer to his chest.

You intentionally closed your eyes and listened to his heartbeat and breathed in his cologne. You were fully enjoying this until something or something basically ripped you out of your thoughts and your comfortableness.

„Cut thanks."

Arón seemed to be a little startled as well because it took him a bit until he removed his arm from you.

„Now, dancing. Arón show her what you got." one of them laughed. „Cabrón, i cant dance." Arón cursed and looked at you.

He then turned on some reggaeton you didnt know but it was perfect for dancing so you took a deep breath and let all your thoughts go.

You grabbed Arón's hand and just started dancing around like you didnt care who was watching.

It seemed to help him because he got more comfortable as well and you ended up jumping and running around the roof terrace, not giving a shit at all.

<Moonkey> was dancing along behind the camera and the mood was set.

You all had so much fun that second and you wished it wouldnt end.

To be completely honest, you owned it. You felt everyones gaze on you, Arón was almost looking at you freaking out in awe, as he was dancing with you.

If you werent so in your own state, you'd think there was a certain tension between the both of you.

„Cut. As sorry as I am to stop whatever is happening here, we need to finish this so I can cut it."

„Off to Arón's." The blonde guy spoke and again packed the camera in the bag.

You caught your breath first and then looked at Arón.

You started to laugh loudly, not being able to believe how careless you were just dancing.

Arón smiled at you for a while before you all left to go downstairs to enter his apartment.

Finally sitting on the black couch in his living room, he first handed everyone a drink and then sat down next to you.

His place was a lot bigger than yours. No wonder though, he was an actor and probably had more money than you, not that that mattered you just noticed.

„Everything ready?" He then asked and again put his arm around you.

„Ready." you all answered almost simultaneously.

The scene was relatively short. You started by clicking your glasses together, then pretended to laugh about something and then it was time to end the scene with a kiss.

You slowly turned your head to meet his and smiled at him.

His eyes were sparkling towards you, before he smiled once again and your lips finally met for the first time.

It was a short but hard kiss.

You heard Moonkey go „whooo" behind the camera, but you were too focused on Arón's kiss.

It felt better than you had expected and by now you were almost sure you had deeper feelings for him.

Was that crazy since you didnt even know him that long?

„Cut." someone broke off your kiss and you kept on looking into each others eyes for a little.

„Guys" Moonkey laughed, official breaking the tension going on.

Afterwards, the guys packed their stuff, took some time finishing their drinks and then took off relatively quick.

„Alright I'll cut it together and send it to you next week or something." His friend told Arón and they talked a bit before you heard the door close.

You were still sitting in your exact position on the couch, with the half full glass of red wine in your left hand.

„See, it went fantastic." Arón fell down on the couch next to you.

„Yeah..."

-„Thank you. I had a lot of fun." you finished your sentence.

Arón smiled at you.

„Me too."

And then it all went super fast.

The alcohol kicked in and you guys went off to talking about rather intimate topics and he scooted closer to you.

„Ill call you next time I need a fake girlfriend." He slurred and laughed afterwards.

Since you were a bit tipsy you joked:"You can leave out <fake> too, thats fine with me."

Arón started laughing again and before you knew, his lips were on yours again.

This time it was more forceful and rougher.

You liked it a lot.

He grabbed the drink from your hand skillfully and placed it on the table without breaking the kiss.

And then he was on top of you, with both his hands holding your head.

You knew you had to stop him before it got too much but your drunk mind wanted it more than anything that moment.

Next thing to happen was him taking off his shirt, revealing his toned chest and abs.

„Joder, Arón." you cursed and looked down on him.

Arón chuckled at your comment.

„Di mi nombre, bebe."

#elite #aronpiper #cute #preference #omander #aronxreader #ander #preferences #smut #itzan escamilla

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