Writing Fight Scenes, Part 3 - Being Hit
Today's topic kinda made me giggle. We're gonna talk about Being Hit.
If your character is hit in a squishy spot, they're going to react very differently than if they were hit in a non-squishy spot. Also, if your character has no fight experience, they will react very differently than if they've been sparring since they could walk.
It has occurred to me that not everyone has had the pleasure of being punched! So don't go do irl research; I have already done it for you!
Edit: Holy shit I forgot to mention that I did martial arts for about five years, so don't worry about me! Everything is fine!
Getting hit in the face
On either side of your face, curving from your temple down your jaw, is a C-shaped zone. 'C' stands for 'consciousness'. This is the knockout zone. There are two main knockouts (I named them myself):
Teleporting - you only lose consciousness for a moment. From an outside perspective, a character that teleports will get hit, fall, wake up upon hitting the ground, and probably deny that they passed out to begin with. From the first person perspective, the character will be standing, and then they'll be sitting with no memory of how they got there
Actually passing tf out - your character will take longer to wake up and when they do, they will be disoriented and have a hell of a headache. Both kinds of passing out are an indicator of brain trauma, but if your character is out for a hot sec, they almost def have a moderate concussion
Observe both of these in action by watching UFC fighting. Not kidding. It is very informative
Getting hit in the c-spot (I'm sorry. No I'm not) isn't the only way to have your day ruined tho
Getting punched in the eye is the Worst Thing Ever I don't care how much experience your character has, if they get punched in the eye they will have to take a moment. It doesn't always hurt too badly, your brain just goes 'hey what the Fuck was that'
Getting hit in the nose does hurt. I know you've heard that it can kill you (nose bone -> brain) but that is sooo rare, so. Don't worry about it <3
If your character gets hit in the mouth, they might lose teeth. They will almost definitely cut their lips/cheeks on said teeth
Getting punched in the ear hurts a surprising amount. Getting punched behind the ear is 1000x worse. There's a soft spot right behind your earlobes/jaw (that's where your eustachian tubes are. If you even care)
Your brain stem (back of the skull, right above your neck) is a second, more deadly knockout zone. If your character is just friendly sparring, do not let them hit to the back of the head
Conversely, it's pretty okay to get hit in the forehead. It'll maybe make your character's eyes water, give them a headache, but it won't end a fight. There's lots of bone (armor) there
Getting hit in the body
I'm just going to go down the line
Throat - bad. Chances are, it'll do some damage, but even if it doesn't, it's kinda like getting punched in the eye, where it just feels Wrong. (Also there's two main regions, the neck part (larynx) and the collarbones part (trachea). Both suck)
Ribs - it's not great, but it's better to get hit in the ribs than in the things those ribs protect. There are twelve ribs on each side, but only ten of these wrap from the spine to the sternum. The bottom two, called the floating ribs, do not attach to the sternum; they're easier to break and hurt way more when hit
Diaphragm (squishy bit right in the middle of your chest, where your ribcage ends) - hurts so badly. Your character will probs get their breath knocked out (their muscles spasm, preventing them from drawing a breath. They can only make wheezing sounds. Very undignified)
Liver/kidney - the liver is in the front right side of the body, underneath the lower part of the ribcage. The kidneys are in the back of the body, underneath the lowest part of the ribcage. Your character doesn't want to get hit in either one - they'll make a loud 'hnnnk' sound and it will be embarrassing
Stomach - like the ribs, it's not great, but there are worse places
Groin - take this with a grain of salt, I don't own a ballsack. Reportedly, getting hit in the loverman hurts immediately, but getting hit right where you sit will knock your character to the ground - then, after about three seconds, it starts hurting
Newbies Vs. Pros
There's not a ton for me to say on this one
For a newbie, getting hit in a squishy spot is (understandably) the Worst Thing Ever. It's not unreasonable for your character to end up crying, less from pain and more from surprise/fear
For pros, getting hit in a squishy spot still hurts, they're just able to tune it out more. And, characters with more experience may entirely filter out the pain from hits to places like the shoulders/hips/other not-so-sensitive areas. They may only realize they were hit a day later, when the bruise pops up!
I'll probably cover things like nerve bundles in another post, this one is already too long as is. Whoops. I hope y'all are able to make use of all the times I was hit during my adolescence
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Ding-Dong-Dashin’ on Heaven’s Door
My first @harringroveson-bingo prompt! BE WARNED: it contains TEMPORARY CHARACTER DEATH, though he will be brought back later! Read on Ao3
A2: Terminal Illness
Title: Ding-Dong-Dashin’ on Heaven’s Door
Rating: Teen and Up
Word Count: 3771/?
Ship(s): Harringrove
Major Tags: Temporary Character Death
Additional Tags: Terminal Illness, ghost, character brought back to life, Canon-adjacent, Billy doesn't die at the mall, But they can't save him until later, sad probably, but happy ending
Summary: They get Billy out of the mall, but even the hospital can’t save him...but even after he dies, he isn’t really gone, and strange things happen in Hawkins.
The thing with the Mindflayer was, it was stubborn.
They’d gotten Billy out of the wreckage (before he burned up, even), they even got his bleeding stopped on the way to the hospital (though he lost a lung in the process)—but if the Mindflayer was gonna die, apparently it was gonna take Billy Hargrove with it, sucking all the life out of him like it had the farm above the tunnels.
Steve wandered by Billy’s room on his way home, after they’d finished checking him over for weird truth drugs or whatever, and after he’d poked his nose in to see them stitching up El’s leg after they’d gotten the slug out. He could see Max across the hall, sitting in the chair in the corner of Billy’s room. She was gripping the seat with white knuckles, listening to all the machines keeping Billy alive while the doctors tried to find something wrong with him they could actually fix. She told Steve (in a flat voice) about Billy’s lung, and the damage to his spine, damage they couldn’t even estimate until he woke up and tried to move.
“His lung,” Max repeated, her voice gravelly with tears.
“I’ve seen damage like this before, actually,” his doctor told them, once she’d asked about Billy’s parents, and Max and Steve had stared back at her. “At the veteran’s hospital. We got a World War II vet in. He’d been hit by a sniper as he was boarding the ship home. Bullet bounced around everywhere, he lost part of his liver, a kidney, a lung, some intestine…everything in his x-rays was in the wrong place, because they just shoved everything back in, and sewed him back up. They didn’t think he was gonna live.”
Max glared at her, her knuckles whitening as she gripped Billy’s blanket.
“He made it,” the doctor stressed, gently. “He married and came in for his checkup with his wife, and talked about his children. And our medicine is better than it was forty years ago, in a war zone. Your brother’s injuries were severe, but they haven’t turned septic. The problem is…something else,” she said, using a swab to dab at the black slime dripping from under Billy’s eyelids.
“Shit,” Max whispered, as Steve bit his lips together, watching the doctor try and sound calm as they all watched Billy cough black smoke.
Steve kept visiting after that, feeling kinda weird about it, given that he’d tried to run the guy over, and he still remembered—too vividly, sometimes—the sensation of Billy’s fists connecting with his face. It was just…he kept remembering Max, sitting there next to the hospital bed, waiting for her brother to die.
Also, Steve reminded himself, Billy Hargrove was an unredeemable asshole, but he had stopped the Mindflayer from killing basically everybody. A few evenings here and there watching him gasp for breath, mumble to people who weren’t there, and puke slugs up into a bucket weren’t hurting Steve any. Lucas sat with Max sometimes, holding her hand—or Dustin tried to make her laugh���but mostly she just glared past Billy’s feet under the blankets. Sometimes she cried.
The couple nights Max couldn’t make it, she called, her voice eerily calm, to ask whether Steve would sit with her brother. “We don’t know how long he’s got,” she said, flatly. “I don’t want him dying alone.”
“Sure thing,” Steve told her, grimacing as he realized he was awkwardly giving the wall a thumbs-up. “I—yeah. I’ll hang out and, uh, I’ll—at least through visiting hours.”
“Thanks,” she rasped, and hung up without another word.
Billy was fairly lucid sometimes, though he mostly couldn’t talk—either he was throwing up stuff that horrified the nurses, or he had tubes in him to keep him breathing. Steve sat next to the bed and griped about shitty customers, and shittier uniforms, and Billy watched his face, sometimes. Sometimes he slept, but Steve stayed anyway, until visiting hours were over.
He was strong enough to lift Billy too, when he got confused and tried to get out of bed and fell, and Max couldn’t do anything except scream for help. Steve hugged her, after they got him back in bed and asleep, and she sobbed silently into his sweater, shaking.
Towards the end, Billy yanked the tubes out, over and over, until they stopped fighting him. “Fuckin’...dyin’...anyway,” he mumbled, taking a shuddery, wheezy breath between each word.
It was weird hearing his voice, raw as it was. His skin was mostly blue-black and veiny, but his eyes were still Hargrove, still the guy who’d climbed over furniture to get to Steve at a party, and then all he’d done was glare. Steve wondered what to say. “How’re you feeling,” he asked, immediately feeling stupid as Billy shook with silent laughter.
“Fff…fuck you,” he panted, his body jerking, and Steve grabbed the bucket fast, helping Billy turn to hork up the water he’d drunk earlier, black liquid, and what looked like some of a tentacle. He laid on his side with his eyes shut, afterwards. “...thought I’d…get to…do more shit,” he gasped, laughing.
Steve grimaced, nervously twiddling his thumbs. “...least you aren’t dying a virgin?” he suggested, fairly sure, and Billy choked again, turning his body as much as he could to drool and spit thick black fluid into the bucket. “Sorry,” Steve told him, feeling underqualified for the situation.
“...I’m…fag,” Billy whispered, tears dripping down across his face as he shook again, trying not to laugh.
“What?!” Steve asked, grabbing for a paper towel, and cleaning the guy’s face up a little.
“‘Z’it even count…f’never…kissed…” Billy wheezed out, and Steve thought about it.
“...maybe not, huh,” he agreed, wincing. “If you didn’t…I mean, you didn’t kiss anybody you even…kinda…wanted to kiss.”
“...yeah,” Billy gasped, his shoulders jerking with hiccuping sobs. He didn’t open his eyes.
The next day, Max was there, so Steve just popped in briefly, to tell her a story about a customer who wanted child-appropriate slasher films. Billy’s skin was sunken and grey. He didn’t seem aware—his eyes were half open, but he didn’t look over when Steve talked, even when he helped Max sponge her brother off a bit.
Steve didn’t tell her what Billy’d confessed. It didn’t seem like her business—or Steve’s, even, except that he’d been the only one there to tell. The hallway seemed silent after the rasping, uneven sounds of Billy struggling for breath, as he left Max with her book and her dying brother, wondering whether Billy would wake up again.
Max called the next day, and Steve waited, biting his lips together, to hear Billy had died. “...Neil finally said they can start the morphine tomorrow,” she said, her voice hoarse. “They said…once they do, he probably won’t wake up. E-ever.”
“Shit,” Steve said, rubbing his face. “Fuck. Uh. You…”
“I gotta go to school,” she said, sounding wet, like she was breathing through a bunch of raw eggs, or had a sodden swimsuit in her sinuses, and Steve grimaced, wondering where the hell Billy’s parents were.
“I’ll take the day off,” he said quickly, and listened to her cry. “I—I can, um, I can at least sit there. I’ll tell him…stupid shit about Hawkins. I mean, he’s not really missing much—”
She gulped a sob at that, and Steve shut up, cursing himself. “See you after school,” she gritted out.
It seemed like it was gonna be super awkward, sitting next to Billy all day on his last day alive, so Steve braced himself for listening, but he also took a book—the novelization of the Star Trek movie with the little teddy bears. He was glad he did, because when he got there, Billy was out cold, his breathing labored. Steve sat down and opened his book, then, after some thought, read it softly aloud. At least if Billy could hear anything, he’d know he wasn’t dying alone. After the second chapter, when Steve’s throat was getting dry, he looked over to see Billy’s eyes open, focused on him.
“...hey,” he said, and Billy’s mouth quirked a little.
“That…ewoks?” he asked, closing his eyes for a second and working his jaw between words.
“...yeah, that’s what they’re called,” Steve remembered. “I always forget.”
“Ewoks,” Billy rasped. His breath was gurgly, but he actually sounded…better, somewhat, more awake.
“You want some water?” Steve asked, getting up.
“...nah. You…leaving?” Billy asked, his hand twitching in the blankets, and Steve tossed the book into his chair.
“No, nope,” he said quickly, glancing at the clock—five entire hours until Max could possibly make it after school, even if somebody gave her a ride. “I’m here until Max gets out of school, you’re stuck with me.” Billy squinted at him, and Steve pointed to the bathroom with both hands, like a moron. “I’m just getting a drink. ‘Cause I was reading.”
Billy bit his lips together, and Steve took that as permission, retreating to drink several refills of the tiny paper cup on the counter. His mouth felt like he’d been breathing desert sand, and he wondered why Billy didn’t want a drink in the dry hospital air, but the nurses had told Max not to try and force anything into him.
When he got back, Billy was trying to get the hospital bed to raise behind him. Steve helped with his pillows, so for the first time in a while, Billy could sit up, a bit. He didn’t weigh enough, Steve thought, pulling him up very carefully so he could stuff pillows behind. Billy shut his eyes for a long second after Steve finished, and Steve didn’t dare move his hands off Billy’s shoulder and back, didn’t dare drop him if he wasn’t steadied out yet, in case the asshole was hurting.
“Fuck,” Billy whispered, tears streaking down his cheeks, leaving oily black streaks. He shook with suppressed coughs, and more black goo dripped down his chin.
“Shit, I broke you,” Steve said, trying to look around for the “help” button without moving, and hurting Billy worse.
“Already…broken,” Billy wheezed out, trembling against him, and squeezing his hand. “S…fine.”
Steve waited a long second before moving, and then kept his arms up and ready while Billy settled back into the pillows. Steve sat on the edge of the bed, kind of…unwilling to yank back the hand Billy had squeezed, and worried about sitting too far away, in case Billy needed something, the bucket, or help lying down again.
“...why’s…Max coming,” Billy managed, his eyes closed. “Got…school.”
Not having much in the way of family meant Steve had watched other people’s so hard it was probably a little creepy. “...’cause she’s your sister, and she loves you,” he said confidently, and Billy snorted a laugh. “She does,” Steve told him. “I guess she’s got bad taste, man.”
“...gon’ get…in trouble,” Billy rasped out. “Max…”
“Look, she’s got my number, okay,” Steve told him, gingerly squeezing his arm, and trying not to tug on the IV. “I’ll be there.”
Billy glanced up at him and away, his eyes filling with the creepy black tears again.
“So,” Steve said, clearing his throat in the awkward silence, and Billy looked up, smirking a little, his eyes red-rimmed. “Uh. I got roped into going to see The Black Cauldron. It was the worst.”
“The what,” Billy grunted, coughing, and Steve dug his fingers into the blankets next to Billy’s hand, trying to keep his voice calm.
“It’s this shitty kid’s movie. There’s a psychic pig,” he said, rolling his eyes, and told Billy what he could remember of the weird story, while Billy watched his face, glancing down occasionally at his hand on Steve’s. He laughed until he cried some more at Steve’s impression of the creepy little furry monkey guy, and Steve found himself trying to remember every second of the movie, because Billy was awake for the first time in forever, and listening to Steve’s dumb rendition of an awful movie had to be better than waiting to die.
By the time he got to describing how they’d just edited in live-action actors with colored visual effects, Billy was grinning tiredly. “Wha…this shit,” he muttered, and Steve laughed, squeezing his hand.
“I know, right?” he agreed, noticing Billy was feeling better, for real, he had some pink in his cheeks, and the tops of his ears. Maybe he wouldn’t die, Steve thought. Maybe the doctors had been wrong, all of them, and Billy was going to be a pain in Steve’s ass for years to come.
“...keep going,” Billy rasped out, and Steve stopped just smiling like an idiot, and remembered where he’d been in the story.
“That’s most of it,” he said, “—but you wanna hear about dumb movies, I’m your guy.”
“Tell me,” Billy wheezed, closing his eyes tightly for a long second, and Steve waited for him to open them, squeezing Billy’s hand in both of his.
“Okay,” Steve told him, his own eyes stinging, because Billy’s hand in his felt cold. “Lemme tell you about Gymkata.”
Steve and Robin had agreed that Gymkata was the worst movie ever, every time they snuck in to see it, watching an olympic gymnast find convenient pommel horses and bars to swing on to defeat ninjas. Billy laughed silently, tears running down his cheeks as Steve got up and acted out scenes from the movie, kicking off the edge of the bed, or pretending to grip the curtain rod concealing Billy’s bed. “A fusion of ka-ra-te and gymnastics…GYMKATA,” he mimicked, as Billy wiped his eyes, shaking with suppressed laughter. “Worst movie ever,” Steve told him, delighted at the grin on Billy’s face, forgetting for a second the reason he was there—until he glanced at the clock, and realized Max’ school was out, and she’d be showing up any minute. It’d be stupid, he thought, to hang around in the way, while Max spent her last evening with her brother.
“...you…gotta go?” Billy rasped, looking from him to the clock.
“Hell no, I can wait until Max shows up,” Steve told him, sitting down on the bed again and kind of…trying to rub some warmth back into Billy’s hand. “There’s a guy in it with a rubber face on the back of his head, so when he turns around, he has to be really careful he doesn’t move his neck and make the rubber face wrinkle.”
“Jesus,” Billy wheezed, tears dripping freely out of his face.
“We snuck in and watched it all the time,” Steve told him, and Billy’s mouth quirked, again.
“...you an’...girl?” he asked, dryly, and Steve shook his head, then remembered what Billy had confessed the day before. He’d never had anyone he could tell, but a dying guy was probably the safest it got.
“No, um…Robin’s a queer too,” Steve told him in a hurried whisper, even though there was nobody else around, and Billy stared at him. “She crushes on girls,” Steve said, to be clear. “Just on girls.”
Billy licked his lips, glancing with wide eyes from Steve’s face to the open hallway door, and Steve wondered, suddenly, whether he even remembered his confession. He’d been half conscious, gagging over the side of the bed. Maybe he hadn’t meant to say anything.
“I’m here!” Max said, stomping inside to drop her backpack on a seat. Her skateboard scraped sideways across the floor as she tossed it, ducking her panting, sweaty self into the bathroom and slamming the door.
“Do you wish you got to kiss somebody,” Steve asked, in a rush. “A—you know, a guy.”
“What,” Billy whispered, blankly. He’d turtled back into the blankets a little since Steve had brought it up—the queer thing—his jaw set warily.
“You never got to kiss anybody you wanted to kiss,” Steve hissed at him, listening to Max flush.
“...fuck you,” Billy rasped out, his eyes shining with tears that overflowed down his cheeks.
“No! No, I just—”
Max turned on the water, and Steve just leaned in and pressed his lips to Billy’s, ignoring the taste of puke, and the awful, stale smell of dehydration, and whatever the Mindflayer had done to Billy’s body to turn his tears dark and slimy. Billy inhaled hard, coughing again, and Steve squeezed his hand, and left, because that had probably been a really stupid idea, but at least Billy’d have something else to think about, like what a fucking weirdo (and shitty kisser) King Steve Harrington was.
If Billy called after him, it wasn’t loud enough to hear.
The next day, Saturday, Max called again. “He’s gone,” she rasped out. “He, uh. He asked about you. At the…where you were. Where you’d gone.”
Steve was kind of…shocked, even though he’d known, even though the doctor had told them what to expect. Billy’d been more awake, he’d been grinning, and laughing, and Steve had thought maybe, just—maybe they’d been wrong, maybe he’d live. Max was quiet on the other end, and Steve cleared his throat. “Probably pissed I spent his last day telling him about The Black Cauldron,” he told her, grimacing.
“...I don’t think so,” she said, and then she was quiet for a bit again, and Steve paced around the kitchen.
“Want me to pick you up,” he suggested, waving his hands. “Get—uh, I’ll get you a—one of those breakfast sandwiches. At McDonalds’, you know.”
“A what,” she said, her voice as wet as Billy’s had been.
“We can drive out to the quarry and throw rocks,” he tried, because he couldn’t suggest they get high, though he put that thought aside to circle back to, in case of desperation.
“...okay,” she sighed, and he groaned internally, because how come somebody hadn’t stepped up to help who knew what they were doing, somebody with better ideas than kissing dying queers and throwing rocks.
As he hung up, he felt something cold brush his lips, and he shivered, stepping back, and frowning around.
Max didn’t want to talk. She didn’t want to hear about stupid movies, or do much more than heave rocks as hard as she could, so eventually Steve just turned the radio on, and let her be. To his surprise, when she climbed in the car again, she stared at the glove compartment, took a ragged breath, breathed slowly out, closed her eyes, and asked, “Can we do this again?”
“Sure,” he said instantly, giving her an over-enthusiastic thumbs-up, and she laughed, wiping her nose. As he looked in the rearview mirror, his heart nearly leapt out of his chest, because he stared straight into Billy’s dark blue, red-rimmed eyes. He whipped around to look in the backseat, and there was nothing, not even a bulky folded coat or a pile of trash to explain the shape, and he stared back at the rearview mirror again, seeing only the view out the back window of his car.
“...you can drop me off at home, I guess,” Max said, digging around in the wrappers from their McDonald’s breakfast and blowing her nose hard into a napkin.
“Y-yeah,” Steve said, glancing into the backseat again. “Uh,” he said, trying to remember what he’d been gonna say before he started hallucinating. “Um, you want I should drop you at Lucas’ house? Or somebody?”
She frowned, crumpling the napkin in her hands. “...I guess,” she muttered, sighing. “Mom keeps wanting me to cheer up.”
“...call me up anytime you wanna yell,” Steve told her, prepared to make excuses to Robin and his boss.
“He was a shithead, but…he wasn’t always a shithead,” she mumbled. Steve nodded, gripping the steering wheel, and wishing he had any idea what to say. “...his dad…” Max whispered, then bit her lips, shutting her eyes tightly for a few seconds. “...shit, just take me somewhere,” she bit out, with a sob, and Steve startled and hit the gas so hard gravel flew.
She didn’t call all the time, but over the next couple weeks, on Steve’s days off, he’d get a call from her little angry voice and go pick her up. She’d stare out over the quarry and tell him stories about Billy—sometimes little things, shopping for Christmas presents together, sometimes bigger things.
“He had a weird gap in his ribs,” she said one day, sipping her Coke. “You could feel the broken ends, and the gap between. Like…a couple inches, probably. He said he’d gotten it when spies broke in,” she said, snorting a laugh. “We were just…watching late night TV, y’know, I Love Lucy, all quiet after everybody else went to bed, and he had a few beers. He let me have one. It was gross,” she said softly, staring out the windshield. “I found this…hole in his rib, tickling him. He was…cussing me out, y’know, laughing, and I kept asking. He said his dad did it. Threw him into some cinder blocks.”
“...shit,” Steve muttered, grimacing.
“He was always—he’d grab Billy’s face, make him say things—make him say he was shit, or—or he’d hit him—” she cut off, her breath shuddery.
Steve didn’t know what to say to that, trying to imagine Billy allowing it.
“I know he shouldn’t’ve…what he did to you,” she said, glancing over at Steve, and glowering away. “...he was a shithead, I know he was, it’s just—it’s stupid—”
“He was your brother,” Steve said, grimacing. “I mean. I don’t have one, but…you knew him a long time. It makes sense to be sad about it.”
“Pissed as hell about it,” Max growled, sniffling, and Steve handed her his napkin.
“Yeah, that too,” he agreed, and she laughed, blowing her nose again.
Steve’s house had gotten drafty. He wore sweaters over long underwear, kind of glad he didn’t have a girlfriend, because it was not a sexy look. He’d wake to a chill feeling on his face, or pivot on his heel because he felt something tug at his sleeve, in a room colder than late summer in Indiana had any right to be.
Once, out of the corner of his eye, he saw Billy, sitting cross-legged right at the end of Steve’s bed, his mouth moving like he was talking. When Steve shoved himself up, staring around, his heart pounding, no one was there.
Chapter Two
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