#i dont think the way i write lends itself to that style & it felt very amateurish/childish

[northern-passage]

i wrote a 500 word dynamic poem for neo-twiny jam :-)

i rewrote this in a few different ways with a handful of different drafts before settling on just doing a poem; this originally came from a full branching narrative i've had stewing for a while, and i might come back to it one day. but for now i enjoyed channeling that into this poem, which has also been very influenced by the fact that i've been writing hungry vampires for almost 2 months now.... it was also my first time messing with audio in twine, which ended up being way easier than i expected (i'm sure it helped that i only used one audio sample tho)

faith does contain sexual content, and while not super explicit, it is the main theme of the poem.

anyways hope you enjoy and check out the other entries here!

#if u read one day hike it's in the similar vein i guess. sad lesbians...lol #this is VERY embarrassing for me i do not write or share poetry very often so. HRNG #i tried to do more of a narrative style first with choices & an abrupt short voice #but i really didnt like it. felt even more embarrassing than this... #i dont think the way i write lends itself to that style & it felt very amateurish/childish #so i set it aside for a while and kept working on my other project in the meantime #so i think when i came back to it i was feeling partially inspired by what i had written for that which made me rewrite it again #sex and food and desire and hunger... you know how it is #not 100% about it all together but i like it more than the first 4 versions lmfao #i did try to do timed lines as well and it just.. didnt hit for me. i love/hate timed lines you have to really get them just right #or else they're just annoying iykwim #also i was surprised i actually hit 500 words i didnt think i was going to #also also this is a poem in that. i wrote it and am calling it a poem...mnfkjdg #anyways. ough #faith #other writing

[roughentumble]

oh, another silly little detail for the ficlet(that like no one saw so this probs isnt of general interest lmao) was like. i couldnt stop thinking of just how fast things can move in animation

specifically scenes of archery and battle in princess mononoke, and a variety of scenes by satoshi kon. i remember seeing a mini-documentery about satoshi kon that talked about how he managed to compress a lot of information into his scenes, make actions quicker and punchier by removing frames and such in a way you simply can't with live-action films. scenes could have entire seconds shaved off of them(which is a lot, in film), not because quicker is always better, but because when utilized correctly it makes everything weighter, gives it its own feel and pace. one use is making sure punchlines land in a snap, with beautiful comedic timing, for example.

it always felt to me like the images were practically overlapping-- they happen so fast, all at once, one moment ashitaka is there, the next he's jumping, suspended in air for a brief moment of stillness-- then suddenly, all at once, in no particular order, the arrow has found its target, and he's landed, and the tower is knocked over or a man's been dismembered or a wolf's head comes to life. like it all happened in the space of one breath

its just really fascinating to me. the pacing of it, and i always liked how it seems to line up with panic, too. in a fight, in a panic, order of events(at least, for some people) can get really jumbled and confused, things seem to happen at once, it's all over quickly. the style lends itself to telling the story of that feeling, i guess? idk if that makes sense

i feel like it might be unique to that form of storytelling. in the same way you can't remove frames or compress action for a live-action shot of a human, i feel like that sense of all-at-once action, that extremely quick punchline, the removing of a few frames of information, cant really be translated into writing(or at the very least, not by me). i would love to read it if it could be, but i think that it's impossible to make it an exactly 1-to-1 transfer, and i suppose that's alright. i could just see it in my head, played out like that, image after image, frames clipped, action compressed, i could hear the air being sucked out of the room as time slowed to a stop in one moment of stillness before sudden, incomprehensible action, and like...

none of this is to say i captured any of that, or to imply my idea was particularly inventive, or to try and say i think myself among the weighty titles of terry pratchett, ASOUE, ghibli, or fucking satoshi kon, but just. that they made me think, i guess. i dont think i showed anybody what i saw in my head(and since i saw it not in words, but in pictures, i dont think i ever could translate it perfectly), but that's. what i was thinking about

just. the way satoshi kon worked is so fascinating, man. his films are such a joy to watch.

#not to imply the scenes crom these films are incomprehensible either!!! #they are INCREDIBLY clear and direct-- as they have to be to truly convey what's happening #while using that compressed style #i dont mean to denigrate the work that goes into it in that sense #i just. you know. its like..... it happens so fast and you see what happened #and then your brain sort of processes what happened a beat later #if that makes sense??? #thats kind of how it works for me anyway. #idk. sorry to ramble #writing tag #long post tag