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#m bj killed a bunch of kids and would've had no problem killing more if s qq hadn't intervened
pangolen
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#cw i'm being mean about a stranger's fanfiction because i've been reading it for weeks or months now
#and it's consuming me but i need to finish it at this point
#ok one of the problems w this fic is really just. how much the author fucking hates y qy
#what'd this dude ever do to you
#his death was so much more brutal than was really called for
#and yet!!! not nearly detailed enough
#cut off his arm without any fanfare
#ripped out his whole stomach within a sequence of 'and then's
#unnecessary AND uninteresting
#like the author was already grossed out or something and didn't want to touch it further
#also maybe im desensitized to fictional Bad Things Happening
#or maybe this fic is just so fucking long some of it's faded into the bg of my mind
#but i don't really think his Crimes warranted all that
#cut off his cultivation and let him rot or whatever. eye for an eye and force a truth serum down his throat in front of an audience
#idk i just think setting up a whole arena and cutting off his limbs was a little excessive
#telling him his beloved friend & the person he promised to protect has been dead under his nose for like 10 years or whatever is also
#A Bit Much
#like yeah he did a lot of fucked up stuff
#but it's only getting punished so hard because the fucked up suff was done to the protagonist
#m bj killed a bunch of kids and would've had no problem killing more if s qq hadn't intervened
#well. teens and young adults but still
#but that's not worthy of punishment i guess because we like m bj?
#'it was for revenge' oh that's fine then
#& anyway on top of all that. it just felt like the author was setting him up to Do Bad just for the ability to punish him later
#if that makes sense
#like not to move the plot forward or anything. or for character depth.
#just to make sure we know y qy sucks and he has it coming to him
#so tldr my notes are: 1) make it make sense; 2) lean into the violence a little more damn
#also i know it's a fic someone worked hard on and posted for free and it's silly to criticize it like this
#but god i'm almost 300k words in im invested and it's for the worst
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