OFFAL HUNT REMASTERED LIVEBLOG // CHAPTER 13
‘what, already?’ cry the people.
‘yes, already,’ say kc and diesel. ‘but only for like a hot second.’
okay lets just jump right on in HOORAH
It was raining. The sky roiled saltpeter grey overhead. There were Grimm nearby. Glynda touched the cracked lens of her glasses and wiped away the fat drop of rain which had splattered against it. It was cool on her fingers. She stopped walking.
i love the transition from cinder’s POV which is all meaty slimy big wet slippery fancy words to glyndas ‘listen. words are. hard.’ look at this writing. look at it. lick it.
She stood very still, trying to remember where it was.
Her hand rose to her collar. It found waterproof fabric. She was wearing her poncho.
okay but drag me i do this all the time.
It might have bothered her, if she were the kind of Huntress to be bothered by discomfort.
this whole chapter/bit/arc/everything might have bothered her, if she were the kind of huntress, to have a braincell,
also gonna double back for JUST a moment since i’m on full 👈😎👈 neighbourhood watch and i think
The Manticore seared the sky beyond the clouds like a second sun.
I FEEL LIKE THATS A 👈😎👈. IN FACT I’M PRETTY CONVINCED OF IT, ACTUALLY. HM. HMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM--
its hard to like. rly say how good this narration is in its own little way because its so. like that. you know. but its making such good use of the, like, negative space between sentences that everything feels so good and disjointed and did i mention the writing alone -- like even if we ignore literally Everything Else -- blows offal hunt v1 out of the water??? like who even is that bitch. idk her. but yeah like it feels both real fast and real slow, like yr skipping from one thought to another but yr not actually GETTING anywhere? it’s like that classic case of ‘talking a lot but not saying anything’. anyway i love this fic and u should too, is my point,
Cinder made a sound. It was the kind of sound people made when they weren’t having a good time.
you know what thats a LOADED sentence and also a MOOD. what sound is that? im not sure but i Feel It. In Fact Im Feeling It Right Now.
Cinder always seemed to be having a good time.
“I need to talk to you,” Glynda said.
Cinder said, “Read the note on your Scroll.”
i dont know WHY written instructions is SO funny to me but it IS and its probably because i. have also done this. look maybe. just maybe. we in the autistic community really DO toss the braincell around like a hot potato maybe we’re onto smthng here,
Your soul is fucking disgusting, so follow me at a distance.
wrow cinder u have SUCH way w/ words. also have u considered that yr the gross one here,
dont trust ozpin
OUGH THAT HURTED. MX AUTHORS THAT ONE REALLY HURTED.
To be a Huntress just like her mothers.
hell yes
i am still laughing at them being like. separated like this. BECAUSE IN THE FIRST VERSION IT WAS ALL 👈😎👈 AND 👈😍👈 AND 👈😏👈 but now we gotta wait for it we gotta MUSCLE THRU this SHIT. im sorry that was all very vague but trust me i know exactly what this is running up to. the fabled 👈😳👈 bit U KNO THE ONE!!!!!!!!! anyway,
After a moment, she added her to her contacts.
is her contact name 👿😡😒💩cinder “ew” fall🤬😡🤮🙅♀️ or
this joke isnt even funny but finding those emojis took like five whole minutes so im sticking to it
The addition said:
dont trust winter
do you ever just LAUGH because 👈😔👈 but also because 👈🤣👈 cause I SURE DO
im. I KNOW I SHOULDNT but the fact cinder has to rely on fucking phonecalls because she cant get close is just the funniest fucking thing. this is some peak humour here ngl. can you fucking imagine. ‘you stinky so im just gonna call u’. the audacity.
The Manticore felt close as flame.
👈😎👈
god do i have to do this for every reference to fire now. i mean yes. also but. why.
okays theres a bit here. theres a Bit. it ends like this
In every story, the witch and the dragon were enemies.
but this Bit is just fucking loaded to the gills with bloody 👈👈👈👈👈👈😎👈👈👈👈👈 so im just. ACKNOWLEDGING THE BIT AND MOVING ON. OKAY WE’RE MOVING ON!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Her Scroll made a sound like fractured glass against the wall.
me: stop talking abt how much u like the narration
also me: but do the people KNOW
The smooth metal was badly cracked. She tried to remember when that had happened.
did you know the concept of her having a cracked Scroll is giving me more anxiety than anything else in this fic. please can someone replace it cracked screens STRESS ME OUT--
this bit i have to depict as a screenshot but god. GOD. its SO GOOD:
u ever read a fic and be like ‘i wanna like. do smthng like that’ ME W/ THIS. AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA. ITS JUST THE LITTLE THINGS!!!!
“You have to stop... You’re going to kill me.”
everyone else reading this part, probably: oof ough
me: SHES KILLING ME TOO BABE!!!!!!! WOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THIS INHUMAN SHIT HELL YES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! EVERYONE LOOK AT THESE TWO ASSHOLES WHO ARE LIKE THE POLAR OPPOSITE OF NORMAL PEOPLE IM THRILLED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
like srsly idk what it is. but getting into all this fuckin crazy shit has me AMPED AS FUCK... i love this weird shit,,,,,,,,, like when og offal hunt kinda touched it i was like ‘nice’ but this version is just. swan-diving into it butt-first and i’m THRIVING.
“We—We’ll talk. Just stop. Please.”
see i was thinking this when she was ignoring her msgs like. cinder are you aware you are. how they say. actively making it worse? and now she reaps what shes sown and i dont feel bad for her AT ALL ~~~~~~~~~~~
“You can’t imagine what the last three weeks have been like. I can barely sleep when you’re in the same town, did you know that? It’s like swallowing salt… I feel pickled, and I didn’t even think your soul could affect me—"
theres smthng rly poetic abt their suffering being like. directly interlinked but having the total opposite effect to the other? so glynda suffers and basically caves in and feels nothing and cinder suffers and feels Every Bad Feeling Ever Felt and i just. hm. soulmates. JHGDSFJGHKDF
“Close to her, and now you,” Cinder insisted. “It’s too much of a coincidence. I’m just reading what’s there.”
“remnant is probably flat,” says cinder. “i’m just saying what my eyes see.”
She stowed it away next to Vivienne's, in a place where she would never lose them. In a million years, she would never lose them.
hey when does cinder’s name go there too asking for a friend the friend is me
i feel like bacia’s also been name dropped early!!! which is nice because y’all know im, how the kids say, a Slut for lore. anyway im liking the stronger implications of her ties to 👈😎👈 which im also thrilled abt so theres that too
“Maybe not." It was the tone of someone who didn't care. Who didn't love her.
THATS. HM. THATS AN INTERESTING ADDITION ON THE END OF THAT LINE. HM. HELLO? HM. HM. am i reading too much into it PROBABLY do i care NO
“Yes,” Glynda said. “Goodnight, Cinder.”
Glynda heard Cinder’s hesitance.
The line went dead.
HMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM--
AND WE REACH THE END. boy was that a surprisingly action-packed chapter considering they dont. do anything. A HALLMARK OF GOOD WRITING. anyway this is probably? my fav chapter so far (WILD) and i am PUMPED to see how much Weirder this whole things gonna get so with that said, im gonna sit here and WAIT FOR IT.
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