#along with petty old bitch & egotistical dimwit & girly pop fun times

[allastoredeer]

Behold, my rough draft opening hook and my edited opening hook:

Rough Draft:

Edited:

I feel like it's already setting up the tone of the fic pretty well 😂🤣

#Alastor: let me equate everything to murder radio or jazz #those are his three personality traits #along with petty old bitch & egotistical dimwit & girly pop fun times #sometimes I forget how much fun editing is #Things are going great so far I think #Just Kiss Already #Chaggies Totally Legitimate Dating 101 Crash Course