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#a revision could be adding a verb that makes the simile more congruent btw
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rereading the worst scene I have ever written in my entire life and why did harrison have to drag lonan so hard here:
The sound of Lonan’s voice is like crashing into a concrete wall.
#this is a simile that in my poetry workshop we might say isn't quite symmetrical enough
#BUT IS IT FUNNY YEAH
#not that I care to critique the line because literally not the point of this book but since we're here and I mentioned the symmetrical thin
#LET'S TALK ABOUT IT BC IT'S ONE OF THE ONLY THINGS I LIKED
#ABOUT MY POETRY WORKSHOPS (this is a joke if my prof ever sees this)
#anyway so basically entails having a simile where the comparison doesn't feel quite accurate to what it's describing
#that can entail accuracy in tone size etc
#like for example here it's hard to grasp how a voice can BE like crashing into a wall
#bc the senses here aren't quite symmetrical (hearing the sound of a voice VS feeling or seeing something crash)
#ANYWAY not saying I don't think it works it's just a neat thing I learned that I actually do like and think you can use
#intentionally too....... but I'd never thought of the symmetricality (? lmao) of similes before
#& I think it's made them stronger
#a revision could be adding a verb that makes the simile more congruent btw
#like “HEARING lonan's voice is like crashing into a wall” etc bc the verb hearing is symmetrical with the “image” (in this case sound)
#that a crash makes..... anyway this has helped me when i'm like why tf does this simile not work
#ANYWAY RANDOM CRAFT CHAT IN THE TAGS AS WE LAUGH AT LONAN HAHAHA YOUR BOYFRIEND HATES U etc
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