#script revision

[chironshorseass]

ok i really really really enjoyed watching the first two episodes and i think the show is already so faithful to the books in ways the movies wished they were BUT i’m gonna be a bitch just because i can and rant about a few insignificant but at the same time very important Things the writers didn’t Understand:

percy is angry.

and i know this is seen with his anger towards poseidon in the show, but i’m talking angry. as in, generally speaking. when he’s with grover and they’re talking about nancy, percy says something along the lines of “we should fight back,” and grover’s like “noooo we can’t stand up to bullies.” and then percy stands up to her and blah blah blah…but in the books percy’s first line is “i’m going to kill her” after she throws a sandwich at grover. grover talks him out of it because he’s already on probation.

with just this scene we know percy stands up to bullies, and that’s partly why he has so much trouble at school! in the show, he stands up to nancy, apparently for the first time, and gets kicked out because of it! sorry but as someone who worked in a school, i know for a fact that kids can get away with so much more before they’re actually kicked out lol. it would’ve made sense, like in tlt, that he’s already at risk of suspension so him “pushing” nancy is the final straw. it’s just very weird, considering it could be only a line of dialogue that makes percy’s anger and the connection between his outburst and him getting kicked out more clear.

consequently, percy arrives at his appartment and gabe is just a general (still admittedly abusive) jerk instead of a drunk, violent (also abusive) man. when we meet gabe, it makes a lot of sense why percy has so much trouble with his anger. it’s easy to see that connection. literal child + alcoholic abusive father figure = there’s bound to be some trouble….that’s not really the case in the show, especially in the way that sally easily stands up to him. people have said a fair bit about this topic already, so i’m not gonna expand on that, but i really wish the writers had focused more on percy’s internal anger, as it’s such an important part of his character and affects the way he reacts to things throughout the books; it just worries me that in the first episode it wasn’t as established. i. e. he hates dionysus on sight because he reminds him of smelly gabe, he hates the gods—is angry at poseidon—because, where was he when my mom and i were suffering at the hands of smelly gabe? ok i’m not gonna talk about more of this or of sally because other people have said it and i could write a four page essay of what the show got wrong plus i want to talk abt other things before this gets too long:

the monster scenes.

the mrs. dodds being a fury reveal felt sooo…weird? even the movie version did it better lol. it felt super rushed and strange how percy’s just standing there and the next he’s on the ground, but he had riptide with him so he just impaled her and then she turned to dust??? in the books, not only does she get percy alone, but grover tries to stand up to her—which is a big deal since he knows what she truly is and shows how much he cares for percy in that moment. percy has time to be genuinely terrified bc he’s alone with a literal monster and he’s about to die…and chiron throws him riptide just in time, but then he too vanishes so percy’s left wondering if he imagined everything. but no, in the show mrs. dodds comes out of nowhere and attacks him, and it’s so fast that percy doesn’t have time to dwell on wtf happened. the situation doesn’t seem as serious as it does in the book; in the book she tries to interrogate percy bc she thinks he’s the lightning thief, and when she doesn’t get her answer, she attacks him. this is another thing: the stakes. they don’t feel as high in the show because there’s no annabeth trying to ask percy what was stolen, no hellhound, no fates cutting a string, and no alecto/mrs. dodds interrogation. there’s not much of a lead up to the quest, really.

theeen the minotaur scene, which also feels super weirdly paced and there’s just not that same sense of urgency. again, other people have talked about this, so i’ll just stick to another main concern of mine: grover’s role in the scene. it was so strange how in the book he’s semi unconscious and in the show he’s fine (so fine that sally does something completely out of character and makes grover swear to keep percy safe? she would never put that much pressure in a child???) ok so he seems fine in the show, but then when they’re running percy’s holding him as if he can’t walk???? they’re not even fully sprinting, given that a monster is chasing them lol. (the problem with the stakes; i mean with the way they run and have an entire talk with sally makes it feel like they’re not in any real danger).

back to grover: he was perfectly fine, and he got percy back safe. not at all like in tlt, where percy has to practically carry him back, after loosing his mom and killing the minotaur. THEN percy passes out and later wakes up at the big house. this is important, bc grover’s entire THING is being percy’s protector, and he couldn’t do that properly bc he was indisposed. he felt awful. of course he did. his character arc is overcoming the guilt and insecurities—that he’s not a proper protector and therefore can’t search for pan; his main character motivation—by successfully completing the quest and helping percy retrieve the master bolt.

these are just little seeds that needed to be planted in the first two episodes of the show…so that the rest of the show feels cohesive and makes sense with what happens in tlt. if these character traits and scenes are looked over and not given proper importance/not replaced with something similar, then the show will have a different tone than it does to the books. i don’t think it’s necessarily bad, but it is disappointing that the details sprinkled in the source material are lost in translation. they may have seemed insignificant to the writers, but not to meeee!!!!!!

#pjo adaptation #percy jackson #grover underwood #they should’ve hired a couple of insane pjo girlies to read and revise the script. just saying!!!!

[vixeneptune]

GUYS !!

Say your affirmations in PAST tense like it already happened, it's not unfamiliar to u, its nothing new, you're used to it already, you have it in the bag. GET COMFORTABLE WITH THE FEELING OF THE WISH FULFILLED like full on settle in it.

The yesterday method :

Yesterday i manifested 500K, it's in my bank account and idk what to do with all this money I'm overwhelmed 😭 I'm so grateful tho

Yesterday I literally manifested meeting a new person who became my bestfriend we clicked instantly !

Yesterday I manifested the love of my life he came in out of nowhere and he's exactly my type! It's even better than ive imagined

Yesterday I received so many flowers and gifts for no reason!

Or

Revision method

I was born super pretty ,I've always been confident from a young age, I grew up in a healthy household with loving parents , I'm used to being spoiled and pampered , I've always been social and outgoing I've always had so many good friends and always been popular everywhere I went, I've always been successful and super lucky and fortunate. I grew up rich and traveled around alot. All my relationships have always been great with men who worship me. I've always been naturally attractive and I get attention easily.

#neville goddard #self concept affirmations #law of assumption #lawofassumption #manifestation #powerful affirmations #self love affirmations #beauty affirmations #master manifestor #creator of my reality #revision #lao scripting #lao affirmations #lao vaunts #vaunts & affirmations

[heavensentbabe]

𝙳𝙾𝙽'𝚃 𝚄𝙽𝙳𝙴𝚁𝙴𝚂𝚃𝙸𝙼𝙰𝚃𝙴 𝚁𝙴𝚅𝙸𝚂𝙸𝙾𝙽 💭💭

What I like about loassumption, is that you don't have to dwell on potential outcomes as 'what ifs' or 'what could've been'. You can revise, you can just embody a new state of having fulfilled whatever it is you wanted in the past. If you apply, and quit complaining about the old story, you'll find this liberating.

1. The old story doesn't exist anymore, you're completely removed from it. If it comes back to you in thoughts, correct it with the new story.

2. Don't worry, you're not practicing perfection. It's alright if you fall out of the new state and back into the old story again; you can spiral. Please allow yourself the space to make mistakes, allow yourself to be human. As long as you pick yourself up again.

3. As long as you keep consistently coming back to the new story, and stick with it, you're doing well. Wake up thinking from it, sleep thinking from it. Even the gap between morning and night, you're coming back to the state.

4. Relish in that new state, the same way you've always dwelled in negative states in the past. Marinade in the fact that you have all it is that you want, and you've already manifested it — creation is done!

5. Persist, persist, persist. So long as you don't allow the old story to be dominant anymore!

You're to be fully saturated with the new story. Whatever the hell you want, you have it. And that includes new memories, too. Revision can affect any tense. You can use it to continue a new current story, or change the story of past events.

ᴱˣᵃᵐᵖˡᵉˢ

• Don't like how that TV show ended? Revise it from the very first episode, to the details you didn't want. It ended exactly how you wanted it to end. It had the narrative you wanted it to have and everything about it is perfect now. Wow you're so powerful that you changed past events of a well known fictional series? Congratulations for using your god powerful abilities.

• You're anxious about the grades you'll get once the results come out? Revise your state; 'no I'm excited to get my grades because I know I did so well because I've always done well.' Of course you did well, of course you got distinctions. You always got distinctions. Your worst mark is an 80 % .

• You felt like your hair hasn't been healthy/ growing for years? Revise it. Your hair has always been healthy. You only have memories of people complimenting your hair.

• You're not comfortable in your body shape/appearance? Revise it. You were always meant to look the way that made you comfortable. Right now, you're so comfortable in your body and skin. You feel so content in your desired body, you look exactly the way that you feel about yourself now. Everything is perfect!

𝘠𝘰𝘶 𝘊𝘢𝘯 𝘚𝘵𝘢𝘳𝘵 𝘗𝘳𝘢𝘤𝘵𝘪𝘤𝘪𝘯𝘨 𝘐𝘵 𝘕𝘰𝘸, 𝘋𝘢𝘪𝘭𝘺

At the end of the day, think from when you woke in the morning. Where did you wake up? How did you wake up looking like? Is there a desired person beside you? Did you wake up in your desired mansion? What is your daily routine of your desired lifestyle? Did you go to your desired job?

You don't have to be that detailed about your daily revisions. As long as everyday you're living the life you wanted. You can revise in any technique. Visualizing how the day went, journaling it — writing it down in your diary, voice recording how your day went etc.

Please utilize it, it's so perfect if you have an issue with constantly embodying states or if you may have shitty days! And you don't just revise by the end of the days, you can revise on the spot!!

For example, let's say you're out & about and you're driving/walking passed advertising boards. And you're living in the end as a fashion model!

Well, those boards you passed by had your face in them. You saw your face there and oh my god you're so famous because it's at least twelve boards you spotted your face in!

It can be really as simple as scrolling through your phone, and revising that every social platform you go to, you see people using your face as their avi.

Revision can be used in so many ways, don't waste it.

#law of assumption #loa #neville goddard #manifesting #manifestyourdreams #affirmyourreality #affirm and persist #visualizing #scripting #revision #revising #state of being #self concept #loassumption

[aregebidan]

“who are you? i don’t even know your name” “don’t be in such a rush. you will give me a name someday. and i live in terror of that day” / “i’m afraid to turn around. not of your anger, though. i’m afraid i’ll see nobody” / “go on dreaming. when you dream about my likeness you create it” / “when you loved no one you never thought of death” / “give her proof of her love” “shall i?” “kill her before she sees you” “no!” “then kill yourself” “how?” “let her go”

literally who is doing it like them. no one. no one. no one.

#panna a netvor #turn my ashes into a fucking. dvd of this cinematic masterpiece #what if the beauty and the beast had reverse pygmalion and galatea but also reverse orpheus and eurydice— #—and also just the most banger lines to ever fuck the mind of man even in their depowered slightly clunky youtube english subtitle form #to understand the script in the original would be too much for me. i’d drop dead on the spot. i’m completely serious #what if. creation myth love story death tale gothic thriller. and there was exquisite music and a bird guy with an evil internal monologue #whose only wish ever was to be rewritten revised killed off and resurrected and irrevocably changed by love……oh i’m going insane #film

[naj-celestia]

satisfy your imagination!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

dwell in your imagination, have it now, your wish is fufilled. ✨

ꜱᴏᴍᴇᴏɴᴇ ʀᴇᴀʟʟʏ ɴᴇᴇᴅᴇᴅ ᴛᴏ ꜱᴇᴇ ᴛʜɪꜱ.

#affirm and persist #neville goddard #loassumption #reality shifting #revision #manifesting #law of assumption #reality shift #manifesation #shifting #scripting #vaunts & affirmations #vaunting #master manifestor #manifesting success #4d reality #subliminals

[redstringraven]

endure {pgs 3&4 // 16} prev || next

will i ever commit to nyxram's right-eye tattoo? the answer is maybe. for now, i press forward. T-T/ ...i would, despite the warning signs, try to befriend a leaper in dnd. i can't help myself.

#tmnt 2003 #tmnt 2k3 #tmnt oc #tmnt traximus #tmnt zanramon #triceratons #;hannah draws #;comic: endure #;tmnt #;traximus #;zanramon #;tmnt oc: nyxram #[ note to self: stop revising dialogue in the early pages you're eating yourself alive ] #[ stick to the damn script JFDLKS before you corner yourself ]

[watchfuldeer]

you made it pretty clear you didn’t want me

succession 4.09 church and state

#ewan roy #greg hirsch #succession scripts #succession #unconscionable that they cut this #but the funeral episode script was clearly slapped together after they realised they needed story revisions #but still. fuck!!

[wondrousmay]

An interview with Shihei Lin (manga editor of SPY x FAMILY) and his relationship with Endo Tatsuya

Translated by Twitter user: jewelbean_jp

Original article

#spy x family #tatsuya endo #endo tatsuya #sxf manga #a very good interview which gives us an insight into Endo-sensei’s work ethic! #he takes his work very seriously! #i hope he takes all the break he needs #revising the entire movie script on top of being a supervisor on the anime AND working on the manga is just a lot of work!

[quackshley]

uhhh the scrunkliess!!!!!!!

#furry #furryart #furry art #furry artist #furry artwork #furry oc #wow i havent drawn comic stuff in ages. i might dump some of the old concept art here at some point. maybe itll motivate me to start drawin #it again. i still do love the golden pine theatre comic #i did revise some of the script though but that was a while ago. the beginning got a decent overhaul. plus some designs got punched up. #Theres more i wanna fix and change but im still waiting for motivation to hit me #and if i start posting the comic again itll be as i feel like drawing it rather than weekly. Also might switch from webtoon to tumblr for #posting it. but eh who knows im just rambling here

[ophelliate]

little snippets from the mutant mayhem official script that i enjoy

screenplay's found in this article that micah retweeted. read away!

#you can tell this was made in about a month but i love it so #mutant mayhem #teenage mutant ninja turtles #tmnt #scriptwriting #screenplay #i might be the only person who cares about this but god am i eating #it seems like its a revised script for further animation/directing so you can't *exactly* tell what was improvised #but there are some quips or two that i don't think got in the final edit #it's also nice to see that punctuation rules do not matter #and that fight scenes *do not* have to be that detailed #thank god #oh i'm rambling for fic #whoops #long post

[magnolia-sunrise]

realizing with some degree of horror that with my schedule the next thing that makes sense to work on is the comic ive been postponing for like a year 😭

#i want to do it... but i Dont Want to... but i want to #well long eaater weekend is as good a time as any to least revise the script and start thumbnailing uahhh #its a throwback to second time wolf and bastien met and i think in some ways a key to all the fire and smoking symbolism #but also its a lot of just two ppl talking and it always kills me how do i make that look interesting

[saber-monet]

"Instead of" Revision method

How does it work ?

You take the old story and swap it out with your preferred story.

Why does this work?

Keeps you from spiraling into the old, unwanted story

It essentially puts you on your preferred timeline, without having to do the mental gymnastics to resist your 3d.

you'll feel an instant shift in your energy and mindset

Example:

"instead of growing up low income, I grew up upper middle class"

"Instead of being shy, I was confident and outspoken"

" Instead of dating creeps, I only attracted gentle men"

"instead of scrolling on my phone, I went for a walk this morning"

"Instead of 180, the scale said 145 today "

"Instead of receiving junk mail, I received a $2,000 check today"

"Instead of being judged for my special interests, i was rewarded and celebrated for them "

"instead of annoying me, sp was really kind today"

" instead of struggling, i went with the flow today "

#manifesting #revision #neville goddard #self concept #scripting #law of assumption #reality shifting #reality revision #past revision #edward art #revision tips

[pocketsizedquasar]

:( oh, ahab

[ID: highlighted text from Moby Dick; italics my emphasis:

“...deck he would seek to recover his strength. Ah, God! what trances of torments does that man endure who is consumed with one unachieved revengeful desire. He sleeps with clenched hands; and wakes with his own bloody nails in his palms. Often, when forced from his hammock by exhausting and intolerably vivid dreams of the night, which, resuming his own intense thoughts through the day, carried them on amid a clashing of phrensies, and whirled them round and round and round in his blazing brain, till the very throbbing of his life-spot became insufferable anguish; and when, as was sometimes the case, these spiritual throes in him heaved his being up from its base, and a chasm seemed opening in him, from which forked flames and lightnings shot up, and accursed fiends beckoned him to leap down among them; when this hell in himself yawned beneath him, a wild cry would be heard through the ship; and with glaring eyes Ahab would burst from his state room, as though escaping from a bed that was on fire. Yet these, perhaps, instead of being the unsuppressable symptoms of some latent weakness, or fright at his own resolve, were but the plainest tokens of its intensity. For, at such times, crazy Ahab, the scheming, unappeasedly steadfast hunter of the white whale; this Ahab that had gone to his hammock, was not the agent that so caused him to burst from it in horror again. The latter was the eternal, living principle or soul in him; and in sleep, being for the time dissociated from the characterizing mind, which at other times employed it for its outer vehicle or agent, it spontaneously sought escape from the scorching contiguity of the frantic thing, of which, for the time, it was no longer an integral. But as the mind does not exist unless leagued with the soul, therefore it must have been that, in Ahab’s case, yielding up all his thoughts and fancies to his one supreme purpose; that purpose, by its own sheer inveteracy of will, forced itself against gods and devils into a kind of self-assumed, independent being of its own. Nay, could grimly live and burn, while the common vitality to which it was conjoined, fled horror-stricken from the unbidden and unfathered birth. Therefore, the tormented spirit that glared out of bodily eyes, when what seemed Ahab rushed from his room, was for the time but a vacated thing, a formless somnambulistic being, a ray of living light, to be sure, but without an object to colour, and therefore a blankness in itself. God help thee, old man, thy thoughts have created a creature in thee; and he whose intense thinking thus makes him a Prometheus; a vulture feeds upon that heart for ever; that vulture the very creature he creates.”]

#mobydick #moby dick #whale weekly #ahab #captain ahab #herman melville #melville #classic lit #classic literature #quasartalks #:( #making myself sad doing my ch3 script revision #he makes me so. #oh ahab. oh ahab.

[miralands-resident-conspiracist]

Why is the difference in writing quality so drastic;;;

#love nikki #love nikki lore #love nikki dress up queen #I know there's probably a decent amount of time between these two bits of script #but at that point #maybe revise the first chapters?? #no wonder so manypeople don't take the story seriously

[sliebman10]

Heartthrob

(Standalone, but takes place in the Scripted and Revised AU)

“We’re here with Hollywood’s newest power couple, Sirius Black and Remus Lupin. Their movie, Stop and Smell the Roses has been the talk of the town and it opens tonight. This is the first collaboration between this pair. Black developed a reputation as a young heartthrob of a director, and then Lupin swooped in and took him off the market,” Rita Skeeter chirped from her booth. She turned her thousand watt smile toward Sirius and Remus, who were sitting across from her. 

“Is this more about the movie or our relationship?” Remus murmured into Sirius's ear.

“Remains to be seen. Dorcas will pull the plug if it’s too much,” Sirius murmured back.

Then he angled toward Rita as he visibly turned on the charm.

Word count: 124

@wolfstarmicrofic

#wolfstar #sirius black #remus lupin #wolfstar microfic #hollywood au #scripted and revised #heartthrob

[silvermars]

yeah spike smoking is aesthetically and physically attractive, but what i find most alluring (and, frankly: hot) is that it's an extension of his personality. his personhood.

he's not supposed to be a person but he is. he has a favorite food, he watches daytime soaps, he searches the dump for salvageable furniture and lamps to decorate his home, he has a recurring poker game..... and he smokes.

when he's nervous, when he's bored, to relax himself, to look cool. it's a routine, a very human habit of his.

it's the seductive power of being a person.

and like i've said before, it's about fire. literally. technically speaking a cigarette isn't dangerous, not to spike's non-working lungs. but the fire he has to use to light it is. one little slip, someone knocking into him or a distraction and he could get seriously singed. or at worst, dusted.

but he literally doesn't care. any fire -- from something small like the flame of his zippo to the burning inferno of the sun or the blinding glow of buffy -- spike is unafraid and utterly drawn to it.

it's almost like he isn't a vamp, the way he searches out the light of fire. from passion, love, grief and guilt. he burns with personhood.

his smoking is just a physical subtle manifestation of that.

and that's fucking hot.

#idk but that revised pangs script @disco-tea posted literally rewired something in my brain #everything is clicking #btvs #spike btvs #btvs meta