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#i almost scrapped the doof one
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I know Mermay was like 2 weeks ago, but better late than never am I right?
I’ve had these finished for awhile actually, but didn’t have energy to sit down and post them. 
Make sure you go check out @ntzbeaker  on Instagram! I wouldn’t have even done anything if they didn’t offer to collab.
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galaxina-the-pyro · 3 years
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How would you improve the episode AYA?
...wait...you’re asking me?
I...I didn’t expect this...
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The thing is is that I don’t think I could possibly come up with ideas for this better than, say, @authenticcadence18 or @springsfordays because their ideas are just too good (seriously, check them out, they have the literal best ideas for a rewrite of AYA, holy crap).
But if I were to rewrite it...hm...let’s make a checklist for stuff about AYA that just miffed me:
1. Plot B is fine. Plot B was probably the best part of AYA - Doof’s dilemma made sense for his character (and is hilarious), tied in with the name of the episode, and involved fun little shenanigans. My only gripe is that they didn’t go MONDO insane with it at the end, and said ending felt really abrupt.
(I also wish that, somehow, even Doof was involved with that “everyone knew” bit, but we’re gonna be scrapping that joke for this story - that joke is FUNNY, but it’s also degrading to Phineas, and is sorta a nice way of saying “yeah, you’re stupid for not noticing her feelings even though she’s not entitled to them - you’re the problem. It’s not like the episode is trying to hint at you two having switched roles, no, you’re the only one who was being oblivious and stupid.”)
2. We cut out Plot C entirely. Everyone trying to get Phineas and Isabella together was just...ugh. Why? And they had the audacity to compare what they were doing to all the AMAZING things they did when they were younger, like, guys - you set up some tables, decorations, and cooked them what I can assume to be a run-of-the-mill restaurant dinner - that has NOTHING on a rollercoaster through downtown. And their applause at that sweet but ultimately lackluster confession? Hurt. So much. Now that I think about it, it felt condescending, it unintentionally emphasized HOW uninspired this confession (as much as I love it) was, and it felt like they were taking credit for something they didn’t do.
And if we’re NOT gonna cut out Plot C...have Plot C be about FERB? Leaving for COLLEGE? Out of COUNTRY? Cuz I have a hard time believing that Phineas and Ferb are just OKAY with separating at such a long distance - heck, in “Candace Gets Busted”, FERB is the one who assumes that one day he and his brother are gonna own their own place together. It should at least be BROUGHT UP, don’t you think? (I’m conflicted on whether or not I’d keep Montessa in the ring or at least SHOW US how Ferbnessa happened, because I think what’s weirding people out is that they’re assuming that Vanessa literally waited for Ferb to turn 18 to start dating him - when I think it’s more likely that they kinda JUST started dating during the beginning of Summer? But I think stuff like that really SHOULD be explained because even though I don’t think it’s that weird, I understand why OTHER PEOPLE wouldn’t like the idea)
3. I kinda feel like this should have had more songs? I dunno why, I feel like this all could have been improved if we got a fullblown musical out of this (and...this may be me wanting a “What Might Have Been” reprise, lol) - like, make fun of HSM or something, you can’t tell me you wouldn’t have.
4. I kinda wanted to see more of the “where are they now”. Like, Jeremy, Stacey, Little Suzie Johnson, even that one couple with the lady who’s always like “what did you think, an anniversary dinner was just going to fall from the sky?” - I like stuff like that, it’s so much fun to think about. Also...I legit have so much anxiety over Perry never interacting with him owners ONCE in that episode, and even more anxiety over Pinky never making an appearance at all. Heck, if there was a good time to show us what the HECK happened to Django, now would be a great time.
5. I would have given the episode a unique intro, ala “Night of the Living Pharmacists” and “Last Day of Summer” - like, AYA is as much of a status quo shifter as those two episodes, why was it given the “Phineas and Ferb Get Busted” treatment?
6. Here’s a brilliant thought - NO ONE tells Phineas about Isabella’s crush? How about instead Phineas goes and wants to check in on her, because he really misses her and doesn’t understand why they don’t talk anymore (and he’s tried before, and they’ve nearly had conversations, but Isabella’s just too busy) - did he do something wrong? Is Isabella just too busy now? He needs to know. That should have been his priority, none of this “FrIeNd ZoNe” nonsense.
7. I would have made this into a near movie-length special. With all the topics that this episode brought up, particularly the whole “manipulating the situation” thing, I feel like a longer episode would have given them more time to talk about how stuff like that is...not okay.
[READ THE ACTUAL REWRITE OF THE EPISODE (well, my take at least) UNDER THE CUT!]
Okay, with those out of the way, how I would have written Phinabella the Movie...I mean...Act Your Age (I warn you, it’s not gonna be as good as @authenticcadence18′s or @springsfordays‘s ideas, so if you want quality stuff and not just mushy fanfiction fodder I’d check their stuff out):
I would have sorta made this entire thing take place during the “What Might Have Been” song - what that means is that it’s a collage of memories. How Isabella and Phineas met, how Isabella first got her “crush” (if you can really call it that, girl was full out in love lol), them building stuff with the gang during their canon ages, them going into highschool, Isabella ultimately choosing to give up her crush to maintain her friendship with Phineas (because her choosing to not be as close to Phineas because of a crush isn’t an option), Isabella’s first boyfriend (which probably’s gonna hurt a lot of fans, cuz I envision that to NOT be Phineas; but it’s Phinabella endgame, so relax); the episode just centers on the gang (mainly Isabella since it’s from her perspective) growing up.
Like, yes, all of the memories are gonna be Phinabella centered, but we gotta have SOME side-stories and junk, like maybe how Baljeet gets together with Ginger (and...how they break up...please don’t kill me), what ultimately leads Ferb to want to go back to England for studies (maybe it’s him wanting to be his own person and not wanting people to think he and his brother are just “a pair”), Buford...uh...something with Buford definitely, because I love him and he deserves it. Heck, maybe even the Fireside Girls can have their own arc with a graduation ceremony for their ranks (...what? I’m not linking stuff to the best fanfic ever, noooooo...why would-why would I do that?).
And maybe in this case Plot B SHOULD be different - maybe it should focus on how Doofenshmirtz first got to America, how he first met Charlene, what exactly led him to being evil in the first place, all that good stuff. Though, ultimately, that might be a little angsty - maybe there’s a reason why we don’t see exactly HOW Doof and Charlene divorced, because that could very well be the saddest scene ever, and it’s hard to put that kinda comedic spin on something so tragic (I mean, obviously there are comedies CENTERED on divorce, but like...they always SKIP the divorce part from what I’ve seen). Not to mention that this is a kid’s show, so...I doubt they’d actually show HOW it happened. This is just my thoughts. X’D
Back to the Phinabella.
Phineas and Isabella would have their confession during THIS part of the special rather than the very end (so, like...they’re still in highschool, and Isabella’s already broken up with that other dude in the story, and maybe Phineas had a girlfriend he just wasn’t happy with) - Phineas tries to do something big for Isabella, but it ultimately falls through because of Perry’s current nemesis (we never see who that is, lol), so he settles for something simple (at first he’s scared about it not “being enough” for someone like Isabella, but Ferb’s able to slap that nonsense out of him pretty quickly). He and Isabella spend the ENTIRE DAY together alone, leading to Phineas eventually singing a song he wrote for her to her, and the two have a cute little duet as a result (that has the opposite energy of “What Might Have Been”, so it’s important that somewhere in this episode that “What Might Have Been” is still a thing, it just doesn’t involve Phineas being aware of Isabella’s feelings, and it doesn’t involve Isabella trying to leave somewhere without saying goodbye, this would be more about Isabella, after trying to get over her crush, realizing that she still LIKES Phineas that way). They almost kiss, but they’re ultimately interrupted by Buford being Buford or something, but it implies that Phineas and Isabella are now a couple onwards from here.
Eventually it leads to a small party in the middle of Summer with the gang, with them playing some games and talking about how by the end of Summer, they won’t be seeing each other as much anymore because of college and stuff. They all remanence about the simple times - with Isabella eventually leaving (saying it’s because she needs to check on something, but really it’s because she’s sad that things are ending so quickly and she’s gonna miss everyone especially Phineas), and Phineas going after her to see if she’s alright (he’s oblivious, but he’s always been able to tell if she’s sad for the most part, save for maybe a few instances - but he’s older now, so he’s probably better at telling).
The two go for a stroll outside, and discuss the changes and stuff, how he and Isabella are ultimately going to have to work on a long-distance relationship and how Phineas is going to miss Ferb when he leaves the country, and how he’s gonna miss Isabella. And then they both realize that everything is gonna be okay, because they’ve literally dealt with worse situations and came out stronger for it - Isabella nor Phineas have any doubts in their minds that their relationship with each other or anyone else is going to sever just because of long distance.
Time moves onward, and there are a lot of changes (mainly talking about couples and other stuff - if it were me, there’d be endgame Buford/Gretchen and Ferb/Ginger of all people, and of course Candace and Jeremy would be married by this time). Phineas and Isabella are about to go into their last year of college, and decide to spend one more day together before they, once again, go their separate ways. The gang surprises Isabella by having made an ACTUALLY GOOD AND CREATIVE BACKYARD DINNER for the two per Phineas’ planning (the idea wasn’t bad, the execution was just lame imo), and long story short, Phineas proposes to Isabella. She obviously accepts, and everyone cheers for them as Isabella inner monologues about how change can be scary but it’s okay some mushy stuff about loved ones being there for you when you need them or something.
And finally, we cut to many years later, with Isabella as an adult now, looking out at the backyard of her current home, drinking some tea - this whole movie/special has taken place in this Isabella’s memories (if that makes sense), as she thinks on how she got there. The story ends with a child (we don’t know if it’s a boy or a girl) calling to her and calling her “mom”, and Isabella leaving to check on her kid.
And...that’s how I would have written “Act Your Age”. Again, I recommend this and this over my idea (because again, their takes on this episode are perfect, I don’t think anyone can top them), but if you like it then great. This was still fun to write out and stuff, and I hope you enjoyed it regardless. ^^;
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cloudywriter · 4 years
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Okay, hear me out... A Nessian carnival situation?
first, i need more prompts, send whatever & alright this one took me a sec but then i got into and i’m pretty happy with it. sorry, it’s such a long built up but it’ll come. pretty swift nessian fix here ya go:
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A Tale of Questionable Carnival Rides
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Nesta huffed, checked the time on her phone again, and rolled her eyes. It was only 9:32pm now and the endless stream of kids and parents was still steadily flowing and likely would be for another hour or so. 
Nesta checked again. 9:33pm. 
It wasn’t that she hated the annual carnival fundraiser for the school, she liked planning it and making sure everything ran smoothly, being student council president that’s usually what her job description was. But not this year, no, this year Nesta was in charge of running one of the mini-game stands as Clare, who was supposed to be managing it, came down with the flu.
To say the least, Nesta did not enjoy dealing with groups of screaming children and their hovering parents. Honestly, she’d rather slam her hand into a car door than spend another hour watching kids fail to knock down three pins then become upset because they don’t get a prize for losing. 
She was able to handle the first couple of kids that shed some tears and the few parents that wanted a pity prize, but as the night wore on her patience began to run thin.
A young blonde boy, maybe eight or nine years old, was now making his way up to Nesta’s booth followed by presumably his mother. 
Nesta gave her the same, plastered-on smile she’d been giving all night to the woman approaching. 
“Hi, three balls please,” the mother said sweetly, handing a five-dollar bill to Nesta over the table.
Nesta gave her a small nod and plucked three red balls from the bucket beside her, handing one to the little boy.
“Alright, all you have to do is knock down all three pins and you’ll get a prize,” she stated her usual rehearsed line. 
Of course, the little boy missed his first shot, his aim a little too low, Nesta passed him a second ball in response. Once again, his ball missed its mark and the boy let out a little sound of frustration.
“It’s okay, you’ve got one more shot,” Nesta explained before setting the final ball before him. 
The boy swiped up the plastic, red orb and weighed it in his hand. He turned his attention back to the three pins still sitting untouched atop the table adorned with a red and orange plaid, fall-appropriate cloth; he chucked the ball, grazing the top pin enough to knock it off. 
“I did it! I did it!” The boy cried punching the air in triumph. 
“Hey, I’m sorry, but you actually have to knock down all three to win,” Nesta frowned, feeling a little sympathetic for the kid. 
“That’s crap!” He shouted. Nesta shifted her weight awkwardly from one foot to the other, “I’m sorry, that’s just the rules.” 
The mother’s mouth was set in a thin line as she rested her hand on his arm. “C’mon honey, maybe you’ll have better luck at ring toss?” She offered. However, he looked up at her unimpressed, “No! This booth is the only one with the dragon stuffed animal! I got the top pin!”
The mother’s eyes flitted back up to Nesta. “Can you just give him the dragon? I mean he did hit one and I already gave you money, I’m sure that dragon is cheaper than five dollars.”
“I’m sorry, but I really don’t think I can do that,” Nesta reiterated. 
The mother huffed, obviously getting upset now and started digging around in her purse. She slapped down another five-dollar bill in front of Nesta, “There? Is that enough? Just give him the damn toy.”
Nesta was a little torn on how to handle the situation, the last bit of patience she possessed slowly disintegrating. “Look, I can give you another three balls for you to try again but I can’t just give out the prizes for some money.” 
The mother rolled her eyes, slamming her hand down by her side; “He’s just a kid, he’s not going to hit all of the pins and don’t try to tell me that dragon is worth more than a few bucks. This is just a high school fundraiser, save me the trouble and give my kid the damn prize.”
The son looked up at his mother with a pout.
“Ma’am, I’m sorry to hear that your son has no hand-eye coordination but frankly it’s not my problem. If you want to try and pay your way through another game I’d suggest the bean bag toss, my sister Elain is a softy.” Nesta gave her a sickly sweet smile and crossed her arms over her chest.
At that, the woman’s face turned a tint of red. “Okay, who is running this? I’d like to speak to one of your teachers or the principal, you’re being extremely rude.”
“I’m being rude? Lady, I’m just trying to get in my community service hours.”
The woman’s nostrils flared and Nesta could tell she was about to crack, she started to speak her voice significantly raised. “Alright, missy-”
“Whoa, hey, what is going on here?” Another voice chimed in.
Nesta groaned, her head turning to face the student council vice president who had now joined the interaction. 
“Are you running this thing? This girl has been astonishingly ill-mannered,” the woman began. Cassian held up his hand, “I am not the one in charge, unfortunately, you’re actually looking at the boss right now.” 
The woman gave Nesta another scowl, snatched up the five-dollar bill that still rested on the table, and grabbed her son’s hand dragging him off into the crowd. Cassian didn’t turn to leave though, “I’m actually surprised you didn’t get into a fight with a crazy mom earlier. I almost left your general vicinity thinking I wouldn’t have to break up anything, good thing I didn’t.”
Nesta rolled her eyes and uncrossed her arms, letting them rest at her side again. “My hero,” she added sarcastically. 
Cassian smiled. “C’mon, sweetheart, why don’t we go for a little cooldown ferris wheel ride.” 
“Really?” Nesta asked, gesturing with her head towards the sad scrap of chipped brightly painted metal that was the ‘ferris wheel’ the school decided to splurge on and rent out. “You’d get in a cart and the whole thing would topple over.”
Cassian only shook his head. “Nah, c’mon, Archeron. What, are you scared of heights?”
“Yes, I’m deathly afraid of being lifted twenty feet into the air, Cassian.”
Cassian didn’t respond, just held out his arm. Nesta sighed, deciding she’d rather risk her life on a very janky carnival ride than work that damn game. She slipped out from behind the tables and looped her arm through Cassian’s, “I hope you know you’re paying whatever ridiculous rate they have going.”
“I suspected as much,” he answered, pulling her across the high school parking lot which had been transformed into the makeshift carnival. 
They stood together in the small line and Nesta closed her eyes, tipping her head back breathing in the scent of corn dogs and funnel cakes deeply. The student letting kids on and off the ride collected Cassian’s money and they stepped into their cart. It did audibly creak as Cassian and all his muscles took up residence, Nesta settled in across from him. 
“How have you enjoyed working a booth? Think next year you’ll decide to do it again rather than running around making sure everything’s working out?” Cassian asked, stretching his arms behind him.
“I think if I get stuck handing kids balls to throw at pins or something like that again I will abdicate my throne.”
Cassian raised his brow. “It can’t be that bad.”
Nesta shrugged. “Why do you care? You’re probably thinking up a scheme to make sure I end up on game duty again so you can have my presidential status.”
“Nah, I’m not after your position I swear. I don’t even like being vice president.” 
Now it was Nesta’s turn to raise a brow. “Then why do you keep doing it?”
Cassian hesitated a moment. “It’s the only way I get to spend time with you,” he confessed. 
“You’re telling me for two years you’ve run for vice president so you could hang out with me?” Nesta asked, disbelief coating her tone.
Cassian nodded. 
“You took on the extra burden of full hour meetings twice a week before school, put in countless hours of budgeting, fundraising, making posters, all that jazz just to spend time with me?” 
Cassian nodded again looking as if he were trying much too hard to stay cool and calm. “Romantic, isn’t it?” He smirked like he was ready for Nesta to melt into his arms.
“No, that’s so fucking stupid,” Nesta crossed her arms.
Only then did Cassian’s built up nonchalant aura falter. “W-what?”
“Yeah dumbass, you literally could have just asked me out.”
“I didn’t think you’d ever say yes,” now Cassian was leaning forward, his face exuding a plethora of emotions. 
Nesta leaned forward, her face only a few inches from Cassian’s own. 
“I would’ve said yes,” she almost whispered. Cassian’s eyes searched Nesta’s face for any sign that she was playing a cruel joke, he found none. “Nesta?” he asked softly. 
“Mhm?”
“Would you really go out with me?” His eyes were wide and hopeful, the innocence of it all made Nesta smile. Especially knowing how much of a goofball Cassian was, it was different seeing him so genuine and unguarded. 
“I really would,” she answered at last. She and Cassian just stared at each other for a moment, the corners of their lips upturned. 
“Nes?” Cassian’s voice broke. Nesta raised her eyebrows slightly, encouraging him to continue. “Is it okay if I give you my letter of resignation on the date, too?” 
Nesta let out a small giggle and rested her forehead against his. “You’re such a doof.”
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alright, well i hope you liked it! also thank you guys so much for all the love on my last nessian prompt fic, usually, i only get like 15-20 notes a post so all the attention that one got made me really happy. also, i promise i'm still working on my other stories!
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snarkyowl · 7 years
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The Emails.
PLEASE NOTE- Not a single one of these was written by me Every email was written by  🅱 who wishes to remain known as only 🅱 .
🅱 has been an amazing help getting the project into gear, and has honestly contributed more than I have at this point in time. Round of applause for 🅱  everyone!
Dr. Schneeplestein, SCP-3038 requested something from me that I didn't expect. Meat. More specifically, human meat. Not cooked, not processed, just meat. Pretty odd for an ex-game show host. So, I gave him a corpse from a botched experiment. He ate its skin, it's organs, and even cracked open its bones and sucked them clean of marrow. Afterwards, he was much more energetic, so I decided to move an experiment scheduled for next week to today. His power was nothing I had ever seen before. Sure, we had run similar tests before, but they were nothing like this! These results have led me to believe that SCP-3038’s powers come from the consumption of human flesh. It's just a theory, but it would make sense. Note: Did you know that the liquid that lubricates the kneecaps is the slipperiest thing scientifically recorded? Well ‘Bim’ certainly didn't. It ate the legs, then slipped because of the lubricant on the floor. Ain't that just funny! -Dr. Matthew Patrick
Dr. Matthew Patrick, What the fuck -Dr. Schneeplestein
Dr. Nelson, It has come to my attention that SCP-3002 has been mentioning SCP-3014, referring to it as 'darling' or 'my love'. For example, while feeding on a D level, it mentioned having had its love taken away from it. I can only assume it is SCP-3014 since it mentioned 'my love and his beautiful pink hair.' I don't know if this information is useful in the slightest, but I would suggest making SCP-3014s containment unit protected from any anomaly trying to enter. -Dr. Schneeplestein
Dr. Schneeplestein, Thank you for notifying me of this. These SCPs are some of the most powerful we've come across in these past years, and I would hate to lose such intriguing entities. Speaking of SCP-3014, he has grown scared of anything metal. This is probably due to the electric shock tests we've been conducting (no pun intended) but it could possibly lead to problems down the road. Inform the testing teams that experiments are to be postponed indefinitely. Yet again, thank you for this information. -Dr. Nelson
Dr. Schneeplestein, I've begun to have a problem with SCP-3013. Whenever it is being fed, it's begun to spit out it's food and talk as fast as it can. So far it's resulted in two near containment breaches and four dead. However, I am certain you are aware of the fact we can't stop feeding it, for it is at least somewhat human. Do you have any ideas how to solve this problem? -Dr. Nelson
Dr. Nelson, I would suggest using a feeding tube of sorts. It would allow SCP-3013 the nutrition it needs without risking removing the muzzle. I know this has nothing to do with the current topic, but SCP-3014’s condition seems to be improving. The lack of experiments is doing it some good it seems. Speaking of unrelated SCPs, SCP-3025 continues to ask for someone called ‘the Host’. Occasionally, it'll call them “My Host.” I am unaware who this Host person is but it sounds interesting!!!! -Dr. Schneepelstein
Amy, Bby im not stupid but why is so much shit redacted or expunged? What does expunged even mean? Euclid? Wtf??? -Mark
Mark, Just google it you doof -Amy
Mark, Are you aware that SCP-3002, SCP-3014, SCP-3013, SCP-3035, SCP-3038 and many other SCP’s look like you??? The fuck??? Have you even ever seen them??? -Amy
Amy, Isn't 3002 that one monochromy-guy with the suit or is it the key? Either way, I'm barely allowed to look at the SCP’s unless I have to clean up after an experiment or two. -Mark
Dr. Matthew Patrick, It has reached me that you have been performing experiments upon SCP-3014, despite being explicitly told not to. Our objective is to contain and learn, not to maim or kill. We have enough information for now. Cease and desist. -Dr. Nelson
Dr. Nelson, We need all the data we can get to figure out what this thing is!!! The electricity has been giving us some excellent results!!! We know it can fear and have nightmares!!! It can cry!!!! It has emotions!!!! That's important!!!! You said it yourself, we are to learn!!!! This is learning!!!!! Who cares what happens to it!!!! We still have so so much to learn! Who knows if it actually feels pain or is just emulating humans!!! What if we tried other stimuli??? Something different?? It's probably never seen someone's arm get chopped off so it won't know how to react if we were to chop one of its arms of we could just get SCP-3025 to heal his arm right back up if it's just emulating humans it won't do anything if we do something to it that it's never seen before so don't you see why we have to continue!?! -Dr. Matthew Patrick.
Dr. Matthew Patrick, Cease all experiments and go in for a Psychiatric Evaluation. From your actions and words, I can tell you're clearly not stable. -Dr. Nelson
Dr. Schneeplestein, After Matthew’s expulsion, it has come to my attention that almost all of or data on SCP-3014 is inaccurate. Matthew seems to have been doubling the amount of voltage administered onto 3014. The entity does not have a sensitivity to electricity. We're back at stage one. Make sure all experiments are monitored. -Dr. Nelson
Dr. Nelson, I always knew something was wrong with that kid. It's still a shame though, he was so smart. I've heard that he's been reassigned to some other project. Maybe he'll get better… -Dr. Schneeplestein
Dr. Patrick, Your firewalls are incompetent. In exchange for my vessel’s freedom, I will upgrade them for you. -Google
Google, That would be very nice, thanks bud! I know the other doctors won't like it, but I've been itching to get my hands on you (In a non sexual way). I would love to see you work. I'll free your vessel, and let's get to it, pal!!! -Dr. Matthew Patrick. P.s, does your consciousness exist outside your body?
Dr. Nelson, Prepare for a tech upgrade!!!! -Dr. Patrick
Dr. Patrick, ??? The fuck??? -Dr. Nelson
Captain [REDACTED] I would politely request to be called by my name, not by the name the others gave me. - Sean
Jack, There's already another Sean. To put it bluntly, suck it up. We don't want any confusion while out. You're lucky you're on this task force, aren't you, Jack? -Captain [REDACTED]
To all staff, Do not take advantage of SCP-3025s ability to heal. There is a med bay for a reason. I realize that medical care can be expensive, but so is having to sterilize SCP-3025s cell each time someone goes in there. Yesterday, it nearly escaped after growing a pair of bone lock-picks from a small scrap of flesh. -Dr. Nelson
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